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Review of chapter "Betrayl" from BrownFinderth
Review:
Great story! I'll be checking to see if there is a sequel!!
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [18 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Betrayl" from Obsidian
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Great story, Thanks.
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [9 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Betrayl" from purrfus
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Interesting idea, but the writing didn't quite make it. The story is choppy and abrupt. Ideally there should be many more chapters with a great deal more detail to fill in the holes.

Tyr is severally OOC, even though he is supposed to have Angel's soul, and eventually his memories. Details, such as Tyr being the last of the Kodiak pride and not a member of the Jaguar pride, are off. While it could be possible for an Alpha to take over another pride by combat or due to some relationship this is not explained so it makes the story an error instead of an AU.

This comes across as though it is very clear in your mind's eye, but unfortunately it didn't translate to the page.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [27 Feb 07] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of story "Visitor" from Anonymous Reviewer
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“But another thing they had not counted on was that when Dawn slept with Spike the magic changed it so that she could get pregnant, creating a new race, my race.”

Huh, so if that's what Trance is, then why exactly is she purple?

By the way, good fic.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [24 Nov 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Visitor" from Anonymous Reviewer
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Not bad, not bad at all, althougth the reason behind everything could've been better. Not sure how exactly,it's just a feeling I have.

P.S. I'm guessing that your favorite Andromeda character is Harper.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [24 Nov 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Visitor" from Anonymous Reviewer
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Okay, not bad but I have got a couple of nitpicks. Firstly, that last chapter was all over the place. I got a bit lost reading it. Secondly, you got it wrong when you said Tyr was of the Jaguar pride. The Jaguars are the pride which the Spike-alike belongs to. Tyr is a Codeac (I don't know how to spell it, but it's pronouced co-de-ak), and the last one of his pride. Also, some of the characters seemed slightly OOC in places.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [24 Nov 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Visitor" from Anonymous Reviewer
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please make the next section! Buffy n Tyr action mmmmmmmmmmm, mebe some shower scenes with Tyr... hehehe
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [29 Aug 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Visitor" from Anonymous Reviewer
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Great fic please write some more of it. I really like BtVS/Andromedea x-overs. Thanks
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [10 May 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Visitor" from Anonymous Reviewer
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Did Buffy over hear her? Keep on going. Loven bunchas!!!

~Nakita~
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [4 May 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Visitor" from Anonymous Reviewer
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*thwap!* More!
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [28 Apr 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Visitor" from Anonymous Reviewer
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I love this story. You made me and my sister laugh at the way Buffy is dealing with everyone. Please more.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [26 Apr 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
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