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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from agnar
Honestly I never got past chapter 1, it made no sense at all to me that you randomly changed Xander into a female since Revan was uh, a guy you know?

I'd at least understand if it was an outright female character, bastila shan or someone. But the sex change made no sense, and beyond that having ANY force user able to change the sex of their own body permanently is ridiculous.

Its a shame, I'm still waiting to read a good yahf/star wars fic. They always go off the rails pretty fast in some way.
Review By [agnar] • Date [13 Mar 14] • Rating [2 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from RedCalypso
I have to say I'm disappointed at the confrontation after the battle, that you let things be drawn away from the problem with Buffy and Angel to focus on Gwen Post. Buffy needed a major wakeup call about Angel and the opportunity was wasted. She also needed a major chewing out for almost killing a human in defense of a vampire, but that went by the wayside too. Buffy IS an idiot child and she gets away with it.
Review By [RedCalypso] • Date [1 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Ancalador
To be perfectly honest i find the complete lack of any changes by this point to be rather sad. Despite the changes that Xander went through nobody seems to care and everything is happening pretty much as cannon. Despite having advanced knowledge the only thing Xander has used it for is one grenade and a battery?

Given what Revan is capable of, having BUILT HK, as well as all Jedi and Sith building their own lightsabers, not to mention the passive bonuses that force sensitive have, Xander should have made a lot more of a difference then he has.

Anyway I'll keep reading for now but I really hope that you will actually show some imagination in the next few chapters.
Review By [Ancalador] • Date [4 Nov 12] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from mojtaba
hahahahahahahahahahahahaha really. are You fucking kidding me. it tooks months and torture to finally figure out he still had his powers.. hahahahah i mean Lets just all assume THE spell was powerfull enough for a freaking sex change and full memories but THE power oh no noooooo that is going to take months to even use. hahahahahaha and i see You got an award for best crossover wow...
Review By [mojtaba] • Date [16 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from demonichellfire
great story
Review By [demonichellfire] • Date [25 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from Darrigo
Nicely done. Great set up all round and you kept it from being a Mary Sue when it could easily have gone that way. I enjoyed Xanders reactions to his sex change, definitely one of the better written cross gender stories. Might want to remove the femslash and sexuality tags though, I'm not sure what site policy is but Faith's brief comment about batting for the other team and the half reference to male Xander and Faith having a night together don't seem enough for me.
Review By [Darrigo] • Date [3 Mar 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from deathgeonous
Hmm, I can't believe I've never read this fic! I mean, female Xander, Female Revan, Combined? I LOVE IT! And such a great story as well. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [22 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from TachikomasUncle
Normally I hate everything even tangentially related to the Star Wars franchise, but this is a truly exemplary fic--as is its sequel. Good work.

Review By [TachikomasUncle] • Date [6 Aug 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from slack
Just read this in one sitting. SW stuff normally doesn't hold my interest but this one held me to the end. Grats on a top story.
Review By [slack] • Date [27 Feb 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from Riniko
No one to blame, that's rich. Buffy shot Rachel in the ass with a tranquillizer dart and then everyone seems to have failed to protect their downed friend. But, that was standard for Buffy in the show too. Examples would be with her refusal to take out Angelus or when she left town (leaving her friends and mother unprotected) for months. I think her actions were responsible for the deaths of many people. And then the times she had a out with Kendra or Faith, she would get all defensive about her being the slayer.
On a different note, I wanted to say that I am enjoying the story and think those people that complain about Xander would never do this or that, or how could you change him into a girl are missing that fanfictions are what if's, not same old stuff.
Review By [Riniko] • Date [25 Jan 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from Ramenth
Why does everyone turn british in the middle of this? You started adding more and more Britslang like Bloody and 'Gone round the twist' which kills any sense that the characters are who you say they are.

Edit: It's not that you do a bad job, British-isms are fine. But you were quite good about not having them for the first several chapters, which made them stand out much more than they would have otherwise. Great story though. :)
Comments from author:
I'm British so by default everyone I write sounds British. I would agree that I didn't do a terribly good job of compensating for that in this story.
Review By [Ramenth] • Date [10 Nov 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from PhoenixFTW
The best SW/Buffy crossover I've read.
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Review By [PhoenixFTW] • Date [10 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Vilkath
Interesting idea to start with but then things just get weird so far. First off have Xander basically give up, accept being female and let the girls 'play with his remaining manhood' by dressing up all girly. Are there not things as tomboys? You don't have to wear makeup and dress like sluts to be female and I never understood the instant knee jerk reaction and total insensitivity people have in fics where people change genders.. most common in Ranma 1/2 fics where Ranma is locked female but still. If you have a male friend who suddenly finds them self female. .the first thing you do is not shove them in skirts and tell them how pretty they look.

From there the story sort of degrades, 'Rachel' accepts being female more or less instantly and moves on. Has a few good idea's and thoughts about how crappy things are and how stupid most of Buffy's decisions are but then does nothing about it. Canon events some how more or less continue on like nothing happened, a totally stupid concept with such an AU and drastic change! I can't understand the idea of changing Xanders mind, body and thought process so drastically.. then having it have no effect on events. Should known bad things were going to happen when all the key players like Spike and Angel conveniently avoided being dusted on Halloween despite the city wide slaughter of demons.
Comments from author:
There are many things in the story that I'm terribly enthused with myself in retrospect - it's been several years since I wrote it, and I'd like to think I've learned a few things in that time - and some of those are things you raise here. Frankly, the whole first half of the story is horrendously rushed and needs heavy revision to show a gradual character progression as things move towards a point.

But some people do seem to genuinely enjoy it so I leave it where it is so that they can continue to do so. Maybe some day I'll revise it - I've been planning to do so for a while, and I even started said revision, but it hasn't really happened yet.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [19 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from Dragonelf
Very good story.

Just once, I wish we would encounter an
alien menace that wasn't immune to bullets.
- Unknown
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [8 Jul 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from Bobboky
very good
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Review By [Bobboky] • Date [17 May 09] • Not Rated
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