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Review of chapter "Chapter 9: Good Friends, Better Enemies" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
This is the part that truly makes no sense - Willow kills *known* slavers who attacked and kidnapped her...explain to me exactly why she would be in trouble with the law over that? Just what was wrong with this? And if she's a government official, wouldn't her attackers be committing a major crime for daring to attack her? There's absolutely no way a judge or jury would convict her over this. So just what was the problem?

EDIT: Have to disagree with you there - they're monsters, not people. It's not murder, it's pest control. Monsters don't have rights. Chopping them into fishbait is fully moral and just. I'm fully on the side of Dark Willow here. She has a perfectly legitimate right of vengeance in this situation - she should go ahead and enjoy herself, introducing them to the Dark Side...up close and personal.

EDIT(2): I mean, really - consider this part:

“After everything we had done, everything I had accomplished, he told me that I was no better than a common whore. He brought me back to his headquarters - he planned to share me with his inner circle. Do you know what I did?”

“You killed them,” Buffy said, piecing it together now with ease. “That’s why you felt comfortable going back to your real name - you knew that everyone who knew about you was dead, because you killed them all.” Even as she said these words her stomach lurched. While she wanted to demand why Willow would do this instead of using a level head, she knew that Willow was too far gone to even bother with the questions anymore.

A "level head?" What exactly does Buffy think Willow *should* have done in that situation?! Just go ahead and *let* them kidnap, gang-rape, and likely murder her? At which point during a kidnapping/gang-rape/murder does she believe Willow finally had some right to defend herself?! I really fail to see the reasoning here. Does Buffy really believe that no one has a right to self-defense, up to and including lethal force, when they're being kidnapped, gang-raped, and murdered? To *quote* Buffy - that's Insane Troll Logic! This from someone who previously made a *career* out of playing judge, jury, and executioner to serial killers (vampires and demons) on a regular basis, with absolutely no legal mandate or authority to do so, in secret? That is the *absolute height* of hypocrisy on her part! Buffy's death toll of sapient creatures in her capacity as an illegal vigilante assassin is *far* greater than Willow's - she has *no room at all* to be lecturing Willow here - and Willow is smart enough to have called her out on just that. Killing killers who exist outside the law for the greater good? That's *Buffy's* career description in a nutshell. Pot, meet kettle - I hear black is in fashion this season.
Comments from author:
You forget- this was the Old Republic legal system. The Slavers had connections in the government- that's how they kept operating. By killing them, several high officials stood to loose a lot of credits, and I'm sure they'd concoct some story how Willow killed honest businessmen.

Plus, you know, IT'S MURDER.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [3 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Return to Naboo" from BrownFinderth
I find it very amusing that Buffy apparently was (is?) a Firefly fan!!!
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [10 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from lucyferr
Loved the "I told you so" moment, and the plot device with Darth Willow. I think a universe with Good & Evil is silly, but given that this story is set in one, it's a good plot device to stray from canon. (If we were satisfied with canon, we wouldn't read fanfiction.)

Not sure what you're complaining about fanfiction . net for - it's a great site. Banning lyrics in chapters was great - any author above the age of 13 who employs that practice needs to grow up. It's a lot easier to leave reviews on ffnet than tth. Chapters where the first screenworth or two is spent on reading review replies are boring - and the rule isnt strictly enforced anyway. Going from that minor annoyance by ffnet to accusing them of banning free speech is dumb. Besides, there is no true free speech anywhere - if everyone said what they really thought, the population of this planet would be a lot lower than it is.
Comments from author:
While I do actually agree with you, my problem at the time was it was basically censoring authors. Also at the time, I had a chapter planned for another story where I was going to use a song in the story, and I was worried that I'd be banned for doing so. Heck, I got a chapter coming up where song lyrics will play a big roll in a key scene.

That being said, now I'm glad that you aren't supposed to respond to reviews in the chapters. As I search for LONG stories, all that did was pad the stories to make them seem longer. Very annoying.
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [11 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 9: Good Friends, Better Enemies" from lucyferr
Can't blame Willow for killing Xiazan et al for enslaving her. I don't see how that leads to her throwing her lot in with Dooku - or maybe I do, since Padme's policies don't seem particularly great. What I don't see is the steps from Willow killing bad people to Willow wanting to kill Buffy - that's very silly and implausible. But hey, it's just a story in a universe where - unlike our own - Good and Evil actually exist.
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [11 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: Arrival on Geonosis" from lucyferr
Which made him wonder, with a wry grin, how she would feel when she learned that the archives were not complete, tampering or not, and that mere younglings answered the riddle her precious archives had failed to.

Now that's good, that's what I mean by referring to it and not just quoting it!
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [11 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5: Homecomings" from lucyferr
Ani and I started learning it a few years ago. We wanted a way to talk to each other, without everybody else knowing what we were talking about."

good idea

“Anakin’s always hungry,” Buffy noted, a small smirk on her face. “Master Yoda once told me that a full quarter of the Temple’s monthly food budget goes towards feeding my little brother there.”
Anakin blushed in embarrassment before he fired back, “Just because some of us are still growing doesn’t mean you have to get like that…”
“Har-har. You just keep going with the short jokes, little boy, and I’ll just keep cutting you off at the knee.”
“Of course, that’s all you can actually reach…”


“Yes, I’m afraid she is.” The younger Jedi replied. Just looking at the man’s face, he saw the deep set concern in his eyes, and he knew that he deserved to know the truth. Judging from the tightening of Padmè’s grip, she didn’t seem to agree.

good of Anakin - should actually help with the courting process, as I don't see Padme wanting a doormat of a man

“We’re headed to war, Buffy. Now it’s going to stop being about the individuals and start being about the corporations- the big players that will be affected by the war. The process breaks down, and bureaucracy takes over.”

sounds abt right

"But I got this place for us. It's the closest you can get to heaven without, you know, dying. "

this isnt just Willow making up for bringing back Buffy from heaven is it? Or did that not happen in this universe?

“That sounds an awful lot like a dictatorship.” Padmè said, convinced that she won the debate.

It's real boring reading canon stuff in a fanfic. By all means reference it, say 'this and this' happened, but please don't quote it! :-)
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [11 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from Dragonelf
You did a great job with this story.

::Starts reading Star Wars- Episode III: Revenge of the Witch::

We cannot live only for ourselves. A thousand
fibers connect us with our fellow men.
- Herman Melville
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [27 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5: Homecomings" from Millaros
That Bai tuo, An jing dian was chinese eh?
Review By [Millaros] • Date [18 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from MarcusSLazarus
Hoo boy...

THAT could have gone a great deal better.

It’s a good thing that Anakin didn’t kill those Sand People, of course- the last thing we need is him becoming more ‘in touch’ with his darker instincts, ESPECIALLY with ‘Darth Traya’ to deal with-, and Shmi’s survival is certainly encouraging, but the fact that Willow’s gone evil on us is certainly NOT something to be enthusiastic about (And that was BEFORE she destroyed Buffy’s arm).

Why is it I have a sneaking suspicion that Palpatine arranged that ‘meeting’ with her old master she mentioned here...?

I have a feeling that to say things are going to get ugly in the later confrontations is a SERIOUS understatement!

I wasn’t certain about Buffy’s reaction to the collar when Dooku first put it on, but in the end it made a certain sense; no matter how strong she is or how far she’s come since then, some old ‘habits’ are hard to break (Plus, it gives Faith a chance to give BUFFY a pep-talk; what’s not to like about THAT?)...

Plus, hey; your exploration of the family dynamic between her and Anakin remains interesting, if nothing else (Particularly the height-related comments; people really didn’t seem to discuss that area that much in the show that I recall).

In general, the only real problem I have with this story is the heavy use of “Firefly”-themed references (Particularly with Buffy and Anakin speaking Ancient Corellian/Chinese); they don’t really seem to add anything to the overall plot- apart form that gag about “It may be a dead language but Master Yoda was around for a few birthdays before the funeral”- and in the end seemed more like a bit of gratuitous ‘fanwank’ than anything else.

Still, the twist with Dark Traya helps to make up for that; I am DEFINITELY looking forward to seeing where things go from here!
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [6 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from Jonakhensu
On Darth Willow... It was rather obvious when you think about it. I think I started suspecting when 'her eyes grew dark'. In canon she did the exact sme thing, though at least she has slightly better reasons this time. Not GOOD reason, mind you, but better than revenge for an accident.
Review By [Jonakhensu] • Date [10 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from Bluejello
I kinda knew the Willow thing was coming, yet it still shocked me (despite the fact that it worked within what happened in canon). Now, to the next part!
Review By [Bluejello] • Date [10 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from Lisa
Poor BUFFY!~!!! I can't wait to go read the third part of this series!
Review By [Lisa] • Date [4 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from owlhawk
You were doing well right up until you sent willow over. If she's using magic then she cannot be a sith. That requires access to the force, and yes you did telegraph it.
Review By [owlhawk] • Date [7 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from Ansku
Great story :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [4 Dec 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from Sky
Wonderful story!! ^_^
Review By [Sky] • Date [20 Apr 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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