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Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from NaiveGhost
Review:
I like this. (The reworking of the ages is kinda off and weird but I like this).

You kinda skimmed over Buffy stuff which is fine because its not pertinent to this story. But things like is Joyce alive or dead, if Buffy died and was resurrected (Glory storyline) why hasn't the story progressed to the Hellmouth collapsing/First Evil?

Keep writing!

;-)
Review By [NaiveGhost] • Date [1 Jun 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 27" from Lin
Review:
Usually i dislike fanfiction where an original character is in the center..but you really have made it work. Meh, i wonder who the spy is. It would be too obvious if it were a Slytherin...Ick, hope its not Ron :P
Review By [Lin] • Date [9 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from TorturedAngel
Review:
great updates :)
Review By [TorturedAngel] • Date [24 Mar 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 21" from Vld
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And now that they saw how monstruous humans can be, maybe the Slayers could renegociate this whole 'no killing humans' thing? Albeit only in dire circumstances.
Review By [Vld] • Date [24 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 21" from TheRubyGoddess
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So far, it's a great read. I find myself wishing for more chapters NOW! The characters are believable, and fit in well with canon. I love your development of Snape, and Sera comes across as real and believable. I'd love a little more insight into how Giles feels about Snape, Sera, and their budding relationship. Good story all around.
Review By [TheRubyGoddess] • Date [24 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 19" from PrimitivePixx
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Good chapter. I'm eager to see where this goes.
Review By [PrimitivePixx] • Date [18 Feb 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 19" from TorturedAngel
Review:
awesome story! plz keep going with it! :)
Review By [TorturedAngel] • Date [18 Feb 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from terrie
Review:
I like how your keeping the feel of the characters in both HP and BtVP without going overboard. What I mean is some writers make the dialogue too cutesy or have the characters go off on arguments or playful dialogue in front of the HP characters that they've just met (not that sometimes it isn't funny but sometimes it's just embarassing and makes the story too unrealistic to continue to believe in). This is AU so messing with the ages doesn't bother me. You've taken an interesting idea (Severus' seer daughter) and made it work without sounding forced. You make good use of descriptive paragraphs but keep enough dialogue to give the reader the feel of being there and being privy to the characters thoughts. My only suggestion (offered humbly as this is your story & as I'm a Severus & Remus fan) is find some happiness in life for older HP characters that "Old Voldy" has managed to ruin. You've made a great start for Severus. I think your capable of creating an original character to match with someone (your choice of course). Happy writing!!!
Comments from author:
Thanks so much =) Sorry I haven't responded to any of the reviews, but I've been so busy with RL. I'm so glad you're still reading this (and liking it) More's coming soom ;)
Review By [terrie] • Date [11 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10" from shazrasha
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Ok reviewing the whole lot in one go. I'm enjoying this even though I've really only been skimming the pages. (Bad habit but will read it properly when have more time). I like the whole way you've set it up with her reading people randomly. Hope to read more.
Review By [shazrasha] • Date [18 Oct 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from banner
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That was sweet - I bet it'll be last nice thing for a while...
Review By [banner] • Date [21 Sep 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from (Past Donor)renatria
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This is too cute. I look forward to seeing more. I hope that Snape turns out the be the Daddy. .
Review By [(Past Donor)renatria] • Date [21 Sep 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from banner
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That was well done. I'm glad she understands about necessity.
Review By [banner] • Date [19 Sep 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from TimeTwist
Review:
Not bad so far. The only negative is the iritating *~ before each paragraph.
Review By [TimeTwist] • Date [17 Sep 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue cont" from banner
Review:
Scary and fascinating. A nice strong start.
Review By [banner] • Date [17 Sep 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue cont" from manic
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I enjoyed this! I look forward to more. If Severus knew this woman a while ago, could the girl be his? No, because she already had a dad she couldn't be with. Oh, well. Thanks for sharing!
Review By [manic] • Date [16 Sep 05] • Not Rated
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