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Review of chapter "The First Was In Washinton That Day" from Zarthrax
Review:
Short and sweet. I like it.
Review By [Zarthrax] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The First Was In Washinton That Day" from ChefJackButler
Review:
I've read in the reviews your so-called rationale for why Bartlet turned them down, but in the end, all I can hear for some reason is you saying "Democrats suck, only Republicans do the right thing.

Which, given history, is utterly ludicrous.
Review By [ChefJackButler] • Date [8 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The First Was In Washinton That Day" from MicheleB
Review:
Wow. Now that was twisted. Never thought about the whole Mrs. Landingham thing. Very interesting idea there. It really works. I love blocks of cheese days. They always give me a giggle.

chele
Comments from author:
Thank you. I hadn't thought of either, until Marcus Rowland brought it up, and it was always going to be twisted.

And there had to be a Big Block of Cheese Day, they're so much fun.
Review By [MicheleB] • Date [12 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The First Was In Washinton That Day" from (Past Donor)vogonguard
Review:
I have two problems with this story.

The first is that it isn't at all clear what happened in the middle: I had to read it several times to understand that President Bartlett is supposed to have turned Buffy down. It isn't stated clearly anywhere and as it's the whole point of the story it has to be.

Secondly, I have a problem with what seems to be behind the first problem which is the assumption that President Bartlett (or it may be *any* Democratic President) would be more likely to turn down the Slayer than a Republican President. I think that it's because this is obvious to the writer that this is left unsaid.

What really needs to be there is the missing scene in the middle, where President Bartlett meets the Slayer and her people and turns them down. And tells us why.

If you don't have that scene the whole thing makes no sense.
Comments from author:
The President would never have met the Sunnydale group, it was Will's job to convince the President.

I agree that there is no scene which may describe why, but I was never able to write one. All that is important is that President Bartlet did not send support (there are several reason why he might not have, I did not think I had to choose one). Although I am sorry that it seems, so strongly, to be 'missing.'

The First's choice for President Bartlet over Richie is because Richie, knowing about the Watchers' council and Slayers would have sent support, and President Barlet would not have. It has nothing to do with their politics.

Thank you for your considered review.
Review By [(Past Donor)vogonguard] • Date [11 Nov 05] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The First Was In Washinton That Day" from cwolf
Review:
Interesting. A few parts confused me the first read... but it was more because the fic was complex in those areas. Had to reread to understand.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. It is a bit involved, as a fic, and I had difficulty understanding it as I was writing.
Thanks very much for giving it another go. I'm so pleased it worked for you.
Review By [cwolf] • Date [10 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The First Was In Washinton That Day" from Vogrin
Review:
Interesting concept. And a nice look into what other actions the First could have been messing with when it wasn't toying with the folks in Sunnydale.
Comments from author:
Thanks. It stuck with me when the idea first arrived.
The First is everywhere *evil laugh*
:-)
Review By [Vogrin] • Date [10 Nov 05] • Not Rated
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