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Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (2/5)" from MountainKing
Review:
I wish, I dearly wish I could say this was going well, but after one and a half chapters I have to give up. As intriguing and fun an idea it is to have Xander an alien (especially an alien with this sort of power) I just couldn't read any further.

Quite simply it's too fast, too much has happened all at once. From Xander suddenly being handed his powers to skiping over three months where he explored the solar system. That sort of development deserved a lot more than a paragraph. Another problem is Giving Xander that much power.

The film gave the Starman those little ball things to limit his powers, allowing tention and development. Giving Xander a practically infinite amount of them makes him a god. Removing all tention and drama from the story.

Then the anachronisms and moments that just scream out of character leave me numb to the story. The Starman has no concept what so ever of Star Trek, nor does he really care to know. He is incapable of pop culture references. Other things, like Xander suddenly planning a multi-media empire based on the slayer story and Giles hardly complaining at all. The immediate reintroduction of Faith, with a retcon that makes no sense. Plot developments flying past all too quickly.

The best thing you could have done would be to just skip the whole fourth year. Having Xander return, trained and experienced with his new found powers. Then he can have any background you wanted quickly and provide som interesting flashbacks.

This is a good idea that just feels rushed, badly structured and not thought out.

Thomas
AKA Mountain King
Review By [MountainKing] • Date [9 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son 4" from purrfus
Review:
Re-reading called to me today. You make even serious things fun to read without taking away from the emotional impact.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [18 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from LordSia
Review:
Cool. Nice story, though far to short.
Review By [LordSia] • Date [27 Dec 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from Ahdamnit
Review:
Good story, but what happened with Faith and the council, you never addressed how they are going to keep the morons from comming after her. Also what about Joyce's death?
Review By [Ahdamnit] • Date [24 May 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from (Past Donor)James
Review:
The beginning of the story was way too rushed and seemingly implausible, even for SF-Fantasy, but I liked the ending, though, like others, I would have loved to seen the scene where Angel and William meet.

James
Review By [(Past Donor)James] • Date [4 May 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from Bluesnowman
Review:
Great story.
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [31 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from purrfus
Review:
Fun to read, but I really wanted to read the scene where Angel meets William.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [8 Dec 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (3/5)" from purrfus
Review:
The puppy parts are way cute. These first few chapters feel a little rushed; I get the impression this was originally intended to be a shorter story, so maybe that's why. Will come back later to read the rest.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [17 Nov 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from (Recent Donor)drdeth
Review:
Great story, i hope you'll do a sequel
Review By [(Recent Donor)drdeth] • Date [10 May 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from Kirallie
Review:
Don't suppose you would consider writing more?
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [27 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from Cutiepie
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Good story. Just one nitpick. You misnamed Linda Jennifer in this part. You re-named her Linda Joyce. =] As always, love your writing!
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from CPTSkip
Review:
OK, the ending was abit abrupt, but overall I really liked this story. One place in chapter 9 you used 'damn' instead of 'dam' but its misuse amused me. All in all, not one of your classicically great stories, but still a darn nice one. Thanks for sharing.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [10 Dec 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (Finis)" from Elleria
Review:
Sequel? Please?
Review By [Elleria] • Date [9 Dec 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (9/10)" from Elleria
Review:
Going to read the next bit now....
Review By [Elleria] • Date [9 Dec 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Xtarman’s Son (8/10) Sinking Sensation" from Elleria
Review:
Update soon please!
Review By [Elleria] • Date [7 Dec 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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