Review of chapter "Chapter 4: The Quidditch Game" from goodbye
I saw a few spelling errors in the fic. Feind is actually *fiend* and ceremoiny is *ceremony*. I like the interaction you have with Sirius and Willow. I also like *the scenes* your are writting, but they don't transition well. Write some imagary leading up to *the scenes* or some emotions about changing, or not changing relationship, to help with the transitions better. Also, tying Willow into the the Buffy universe somehow, mentioning Sunnydale or a character, would give this story more depth. I look forward to reading further chapters of this developing story.
Comments from author:
evefett would you be my beta?
Review By [goodbye
] • Date [28 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2:The Sorting Cerimony and Padfoot trys to get his way!" from Keshkreature
The premise is interesting, but you have a lot of spelling errors, and places where you seem to have left out words. You may want to consider getting a beta; it would help considerably.
Review By [Keshkreature
] • Date [27 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "When The Moon Calls Your Heart" from Jinky
YAY!!! Hope more chapters are in the future
Review By [Jinky
] • Date [25 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]