I haven't read the story to the end. I think that would give you the indication on how I liked it. On the bright side I like the concept of how the story started. What I didn't like about it is that Buffy went with the Angels to meet Director Gordon (?) and second that she is so loose with the information she give them.
One I don't think she would have mentioned that she came from Sunnydale. The Slayer she might and maybe a few of her warstories. But you have to remember that Buffy was in a state that she wanted to be alone.
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [26 Nov 05] • Not Rated
This is interesting. I was wondering when someone was going to do a B-13 fic.
The writing is a little choppy. You need to work on your characterazations some. But all in all it was readable and interesting. Looking foward to where you go with it.
not bad of a fic. However after awhile it was somewhat annoying to hear "Buffy replied seriously" or "buffy asked seriously" perhaps try to use different words and phrases.
Nicely done! I like the way Buffy was recruited by Horace. He did the soft sell which is really the only way it would have worked with her. Can't wait to see further stories set in this AU with Buffy taking on the usual suspects with occasional help. Hmm, when Faith arrives, I can see some of the Angels backing Buffy with Kakistos. And will she discuss her summer with Giles or be wary of him because of the information the Farm gave her about the Council? Keep up the great work!!
Review By [captuniv] • Date [25 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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