Review of chapter "The Prancing Lions" from DeviousNarcissus
Its kind of funny, but makes no sense. Its really hard to read. Why would Andrew do a Michael Jackson pose and shriek? I know he's girly, but still. Maybe go back and put some more thought into it. Maybe you could even get someone else to help make it better.
Review By [DeviousNarcissus
] • Date [23 Jan 06] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "I Like It When They Walk" from LisaF
I'm not quite sure what you're trying to do with this fic, but whatever it is, it's not really working. There's no story here - no plot, no explanation for how the characters came to be interacting with each other, and the witty banter isn't actually witty. Not only that, but the Hogwarts guys are pretty out of character - they don't tend to be incredibly disrespectful to females, as you have them here. To really get a story going here, you need to go back and explain how Dawn and Andrew ended up at Hogwarts. Start from the beginning and take your time, and put some effort into making it all make sense. Just because this is a crossover site doesn't mean that you can assume that two characters from wildly different universes will end up interacting. An explanation and backstory is essential.
Review By [LisaF
] • Date [29 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Prancing Lions" from DarkLady
the bumbling baboons line was my favorite line in the movie! this story is fabulous!!!!!!
Review By [DarkLady
] • Date [29 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Prancing Lions" from zili
Review By [zili
] • Date [29 Nov 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of story "I Like It When They Walk" from matthew
chap 1: Idiotic, and a single mention of Dawn does not a crossover make.
chap 2: Unreadable formatting, beyond stupid, and not even a mention of a crossover.
Review By [matthew
] • Date [29 Nov 05] • Rating [1 out of 10] • Add Comment