Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from Doodle
Is this going to be a crossover with Stargate also?
Review By [Doodle
] • Date [29 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from Hawklan
nice story so far and as always I love X/J pairings, just a shame that it seems to be
Review By [Hawklan
] • Date [15 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from Vassago
There are no comma marks in sight, which making all of the text read like willow-babble, or really bad English.
Everyone falling in love/lust for him at first site is completely unrealistic on a level that I can't even begin to describe. Despite it happening in romance stories/novels, it doesn't happen in real life, and even less so for an entire cast of character's to do it all at once and ALL for one person. At least in romance stories/novels it only happens for one, maybe two, people. In this you have around 5+ people doing it all at once.
It's an interesting premise (Immortal Xander, apprentice to Methos/Death, and Jenny's past romance) I'll give you that, but the way you've gone about all wrong. First off, how old is he? How did he become Immortal? How much suffering has he gone through because of his Immortal life? How does he cope with it? Things like that.
Right now, it just seems like you took an OC, named him Xander, had him born somewhere else, and made him irresistible to every woman everywhere, then stuck him into a series where women are literally everywhere. Yeah, thanks, but no thanks. If I wanted a story like this I'd go read some smut, but this doesn't even have that.
Review By [Vassago
] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from JediKnight
Very interesting job on the story so far, I hope you'll add more soon.
Review By [JediKnight
] • Date [27 Aug 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from Bobboky
very cool, i look froward to more
Review By [Bobboky
] • Date [1 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from Infinix
Not sure how you are going to work such a huge change to Xan's character but so far it seems like it is going well.
Review By [Infinix
] • Date [3 Dec 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from Elleria
Its been almost a year since you updated this, please update soon! I love this story.
Review By [Elleria
] • Date [29 Sep 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from morange
cool, but, ahh, will jenny get caught for doing jail-bait? cause he sure does look it . lol.
Review By [morange
] • Date [10 Apr 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from KingHenrytheV
It's an interesting concept, but Xander's character was changed from a likable guy with a lot of potential to a capable prick.
Katanas are over-used for Immortals, I suggest doing away with them. Immortals often selected swords that held personal value -- like one that was readily available when they first learned to fight.
Killing people at random and having everyone instantly fall for him seems a bit ... callous and backwards.
Review By [KingHenrytheV
] • Date [27 Dec 05] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Immortally Yours" from Ladeia
Interesting beginning. Love to see where this goes.
Review By [Ladeia
] • Date [26 Dec 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]