Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from bradsan
the most irritating story I ever read. First she loves this one, then she loves the other one. Then you jumped from one side to the other without background. The beginning started reasonable but the rest of the story was in a rush. The storyline could be interesting but you blew it.
Review By [bradsan
] • Date [28 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from gleeky
Its too fast and Jumps around too much to really like the story.
Review By [gleeky
] • Date [21 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from jammiesMM
Well I read the rest of what is posted and it looks like the timeline is all screwed up. I mean Willow & Tara did the spell to bring Buffy back it seems after she killed Glory. Then how does Buffy know about the other slayers and the First? This is a nice idea but it needs to be 'fleshed out' a bit more. How could Zarak be in love with Buffy when it seems like they never met. And Apollo falling in love just like that? And now all the others are there? What the heck is going on is all I ask because this is way too confusing.
Review By [jammiesMM
] • Date [1 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from EricThorsen
This story started out well, but it jumps around too much to really work out. You need to consider what you want to have happen and then show it happening.
Review By [EricThorsen
] • Date [9 Mar 06] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from jammiesMM
This story is going way too fast. I think they believed Buffy too easily and didn't even blink when she killed that vamp. And the deal with Apollo that is way too fast he is not like that in either series. I know this is fanfiction but unless you have a reason why it is gong so fast with the "falling in love" then it just makes it too unbelievable. The second chapter was a bit short. But the plot idea is great and originial I have not seen really any Buffy/Battlestar Galactica stories. Just try to expland on things a bit more you have the makings of a great story.
Review By [jammiesMM
] • Date [8 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from acs
Among other problems (e.g. your story is more of a basic plot than a story) you really need to put a disclaimer at the beginning of your fic. You should check the site rules.
Review By [acs
] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Rating [1 out of 10]