The author is right. The story moves a little too fast, and it needs to be fleshed out a little more. But the idea is a good one. I like the idea of all of them bonding as family. Has the author considered offering the story for adoption? The story has an excellent foundation, it just needs a little work.
Review By [kayron] • Date [17 Dec 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
heya nice plot.....when to updates? anyway since Tara is afterall a Wiccan, why dont use the name of Gaea or whatever version of MOTHER EARTH or NATURE is call......just an idea.....
Review By [ZeeValentine] • Date [30 Jul 07] • Not Rated
it's an ok chapter but it's a little fast in its transition from one event to another and it's a little confusing when you read it.
Comments from author:
I admit it does go fast. I think it will jump a lot till I get use to the fact that people can not read my mind. I'm taking a step back for a day or two and re-read what I have written so far. Since I can never read thru my work with out editing it. I think I fix chapter 2 first witch will force me to fix chapter 3 and 4. Since I'm not really happy with 3 and 4 anyway. More than likely why I did not post them yet.
Review By [Alianna] • Date [12 Jan 06] • Rating [5 out of 10]
I didn't mean to sound like a homophobe, its just getting harder to find good non-slash fics these days, since I've never been able to get into slash, and I probably over reacted. Sorry
Comments from author:
No you didn't sound that way. I get into moods of what I like to read so sometimes it all non-slash sometimes just slash sometimes both. Right now I'm on a slash kick. Plus I did forget to put the warning
Review By [KailBlade] • Date [12 Jan 06] • Not Rated
