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Winifred Burkle, Padawan Learner

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Review of chapter "Three" from Aista
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I was so engrossed I actually felt depressed seeing the 'End?' at the bottom of chapter 4. Would've loved to have seen where you were going to take this.
Review By [Aista] • Date [29 Sep 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Three" from (Current Donor)DeacBlue
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I liked it, except that Fred comes off as the tiniest bit OOC. She's a scientist, and she is going to attempt to describe what happened to her as best as she can with the tools that she has, which in this case are her knowledge of the mathematics of alternate universes and her direct experience of travelling between them. I expected her, when the masters were admitting that they knew little about what happened, to step forward, start some science babble, even ask for something to write on and with to explain her thoughts.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeacBlue] • Date [21 Dec 10] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Three" from fanrei
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too bad this story was given up. i just found it but i rather like the plot.
Review By [fanrei] • Date [26 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three" from GundumM
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interesting
Review By [GundumM] • Date [23 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three" from (Recent Donor)Luna
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Aw, I'm disappointed this hasn't been continued since 06... Very interesting idea of Fred in the Star Wars verse. Maybe someday you will return to it??
Review By [(Recent Donor)Luna] • Date [26 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three" from Dragonelf
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I hope you get inspired to continue this story.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [18 May 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Three" from purrfus
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I tend to stay away from Star Wars crossovers for the same reason I stayed away from the last 2 movies.

Great job with Fred so far. One of your notes indicated Fred would not be having an impact on the SW verse. Are you going to train her and then send her to an Earth?
Comments from author:
There's a number of themes I wanted to touch on. The whole demons-and-aliens thing, for one, and travel between dimensions, for another.

I can't tell you, yet, what exactly's gonna happen to her, but I'm gonna say this --- Fred will never make it to Jedi Knight. She doesn't even really make it through training.

Her whole goal, though, is to get back home, which will be what drives her later on.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [13 Dec 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Three" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Don't mind Wise, he's just a grump.

As for writing, you could always skip ahead to where you want to be? Unlike the insane crap I came up with and then abandoned for the same problem, the setup here is fairly simple and you could also make it part two of a series, with this as the first part.

But only if there's Fred/blue girl. jk
Comments from author:
I couldn't do that, I don't think. I couldn't just write the bits I was looking forward to writing, without setting it up properly. It'd cheapen them, to me, because they might not have the right effect.

Actually, though, I'm a big fan of Aayla Secura myself, and I was planning on saving her. There's a number of stories out there, about changing the way things went in the third movie, and, while my plans for this did touch on certain events from the movies, there was no real interference.

Still, though, your interest has reignited mine. I'm gonna see what I can do with it.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [11 Aug 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Three" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
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Figured it might be an Aayla Secura cameo. Or at least the first appearance that would lead to an introduction.

I'm always quick to champion femmeslash pairings, and thought that Fred/blue girl would be particularly ironic given who Fred became later in the AtS series. :)
Comments from author:
I see. Well, I'm not writing anything off at the moment. And, yeah, I can see how that'd be funny.

Then again, I haven't actually touched this in a long time. I kinda got writer's block --- I know where I want to take it, but I don't know yet how to get there. Apparently, it comes across as brief.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [11 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
*pokes the story a few times to see if more comes out*

Fred/blue girl?
Comments from author:
Nah, this is before she was blue. Unless you meant that blue twi'lek? That's just a padawan.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [11 Aug 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Three" from Mackon
Review:
Hey this looks like it could be good bit early to tell where your going with it but nice
Review By [Mackon] • Date [6 Apr 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Three" from Wise
Review:
Not a bad start, but the chapters are way too short. You seem to have Fred's voice down pretty well, but some of the passages read more like summary than prose.
Review By [Wise] • Date [12 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three" from magicalbookworm
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Wow, great idea! I can't wait to see some more!
Review By [magicalbookworm] • Date [31 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Three" from WhiteWolf
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I have to say it is an interesting story.
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [31 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Two" from CPTSkip
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I like your story's beginning. You seem to have a nice grasp on Fred's character and I like your Yoda. I hope you write more of this story.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [31 Jan 06] • Not Rated
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