Review By [Elleria] • Date [7 Aug 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3, Wands and revelations." from Lin
Review:
So Dumbledore memories are going to be transferred to Xander???? 'cause..obviously Xander can't remember things that ...never happend ..unless this is a differnt universe and his memories are fake? Hmm...well this is most defiantly going to be intersting...i always did see Dumbledore as a manipulative guy. I hope you continue with this.
Review of chapter "Chapter 3, Wands and revelations." from mdemanatee
Review:
Please update soon! This story is really good. I'll be checking back.
Review By [mdemanatee] • Date [20 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3, Wands and revelations." from ctvwarren
Review:
Great...please continue......I am glad you chose xander for the role...
Review By [ctvwarren] • Date [6 Mar 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3, Wands and revelations." from Dieselsaliva
Review:
This is a very interesting start. I hope to see more of it. =]
~B~
Review By [Dieselsaliva] • Date [13 Feb 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3, Wands and revelations." from Elleria
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To short! More soon please? This is very interesting so far. Looking forward to the next bit.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [13 Feb 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3, Wands and revelations." from TorturedAngel
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ack, no,no,no you must not leave it there ack! lol really interesting read so far. more soon, please. :)
Review By [TorturedAngel] • Date [5 Feb 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3, Wands and revelations." from RedDeathLV
Review:
BeatriceOtter made most of the points I wanted to make regarding grammar, punctuation, and proper word use, but I did have one remaining question.
Why did you split the first chapter into three painfully short, chopped-down sections? "Chapter" two in particular is almost offensively short. A paragraph is NOT a chapter, no matter how dramatic you think it is.
Needs much condensing.
Comments from author:
I must give an apology for the short "chapters". Iget insperation in sceenes and tend to put them up as soon as i have them done. I will try to condense them into bigger chapters from now on.
Review By [RedDeathLV] • Date [3 Feb 06] • Rating [4 out of 10]