Review of chapter "Part 19" from acs
Okay.... this is interesting... yeah, that's the word for it... interesting...
I'm assuming this is a parody of all those "Uber-mega-witch Willow" fics disguised as a 'lost relative' fic. I can't think of any other reasonable explanation for what you've done to Willow in this story.
But parodies are usually funny so I think you have your work cut out for you to increase the humour level. Maybe if you add Sabrina, the teenage witch and her cat? That might do it...
Review By [acs
] • Date [12 Feb 06] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Willow the White Parts 1 to 18" from RedDeathLV
This story suffers the same terminal ailments as your other one: horrible grammar, unbearable word use, and a lack of proper English.
As it stands, it is unreadable without major reworking by a third party.
Review By [RedDeathLV
] • Date [4 Feb 06] • Rating [2 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Willow the White Parts 1 to 18" from VillageOrchid
Pretty good. Lot's of typos, though. Did the slayer "saunter" away from Ron or did kissing him cause her to actually stutter? Interesting ideas and a bit less dark than your other story with uber Willow.
Review By [VillageOrchid
] • Date [2 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Willow the White Parts 1 to 18" from Naitch
Another interesting story. Editorial comment of the day- use chapter breakers. Please. Otherwise, scenes flow into one another without rhyme or reason, adn it gets confusing.
Review By [Naitch
] • Date [2 Feb 06] • Rating [4 out of 10]