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Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from DieselDriver
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“Hey, no Vin Diesel, but we’ve got Minsc, right?”Thanks for that picture. Now I hear Vin Diesel talking to Boo in my head. The mental picture is him with those eyepieces/goggles he had on in the movie. I think it was "Pitch Black" or something, forgot which.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [23 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from DieselDriver
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Re-reading is fun as long as I skip over the interludes (ludes mannn...) in the "real world". Went on ebay a few minutes ago and found a nice looking set of the Balder's Gate games. Unfortunately they are for Windows 95/98. Not going to run on my W7 comp. I do have a 98 machine but it died awhile back. Hopefully it's the power supply and I can get it going again. IMHO 98 was as good for it's time as 7 is now. The ones around it. ME, 2000, suck. Same for 8 and 8.1. What were they thinking getting rid of the start button. Good Grief, I wonder if they could figure out another way to make it more resource intensive and sure enough they did. They will again too.
Comments from author:
Get the Enhanced Edition instead. I'm not thrilled by the added new content but it can be ignored and the actual game plays much smoother than in the original (and is perfect for W7).
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-three" from DieselDriver
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Hey wait a minute... How can your story, at 35 chapters, be to long if Diane Castle's story about Alex Mack is right at 200 now? Her chapters are just as long as yours if not longer.

BTW, did you read my reply to your comment on the earlier chapter about Tabula Rasa?

Reply to your comment and explanation: Ah, thank you hugely!
Comments from author:
Diane Castle's chapters vary hugely in length. Several chapters are less than 500 words long, whereas others (especially the more recent ones) are over 7,000. And I've broken my story up into several volumes because there used to be a site rule limiting the length of stories, which is why long-standing authors such as me, Cordyfan, and Hotpoint break up our longest stories, but that rule seems to have been scrapped and Diane is just ploughing on and on and is now approaching a million words all as part of the same story.

I've just read that reply now after waking from sleeping for more than 12 hours (I was extremely tired after finishing a run of 10-hour night shifts).

Summary of 'Tabula Rasa': Willow had a quarrel with Tara and stupidly dealt with it by wiping Tara's memory of the quarrel. In the musical episode 'Once More With Feeling' Tara found out that Willow had wiped her memory and was, understandably, upset and threatened to break up with Willow. Willow's response was to wipe Tara's memory again - but an accident with the spell components multiplied the effects and wiped the memories of, not only Tara, but the whole Scooby gang (including Spike). Everyone passed out in the Magic Shop and woke with total amnesia.

They reconstructed their identities from what they found around them; Buffy had no ID on her and decided to call herself 'Joan', Spike was wearing a suit from a second-hand shop which had a name-tag inside saying 'Randy', Xander's ID of course named him as Alexander Lavelle Harris, and Dawn read her name-pendant upside-down as 'Umad' and, when she realised what it really said, kept on calling herself 'Umad' as a joke. Giles and Anya found documents showing they were co-owners of the Magic Box and, as Anya was wearing an engagement ring and they had woken lying side by side, they assumed they were a couple. As Spike and Giles obviously were both British they came to the conclusion Spike was Giles' son - it was night-time and no-one realised Spike was a vampire. When vampires attacked - they were after Spike for a gambling debt, and he'd been wearing the second-hand suit as a disguise - Buffy/Joan and Spike found that they both were expert fighters and superhumanly strong. When Spike was revealed to be a vampire, but had no desire to attack anyone and in fact had an automatic reflex desire to protect the others - especially Dawn/Umad - they came to the conclusion that he was a Vampire with a Soul.

Willow had used a crystal as a repository for the memories - intended, of course, to be just Tara's memories of the quarrels but ending up full of the whole gang's memories of their whole lives - and, during the vampire attack, she dropped it. In the original episode the crystal was stood on, and broken, and the memories were restored. Tara left Willow immediately and everyone else reverted to their previous relationships. In this version, and in Tabula Rasa Ad Aeternum, no-one stands on it and the memories stay wiped. And in this story Warren, Jonathan, and Andrew discover the crystal and come up with the crazy idea of inserting the stored personalities into the computer game.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [19 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-one" from DieselDriver
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“I think that we can. Let’s talk. Over a drink, perhaps, Galvarey?”

This Galvarey is a real poopy head, a traitor to his order. Isaea is just a general poopy headed inbred idiot.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [18 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-six" from DieselDriver
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"where are we going to find a feather duster, a walrus, and nine gallons of whipped cream out here in the Windspear Hills?"

What is that all about. Jokes are worthless in a story if you don't know them, nor understand them. Like the name Roger Delgado meant nothing to me till you mentioned Dr. Who. I figured he must have been the guy who played "the master" since they were talking about people who called themselves "the master". A pretty pompous thing to call yourself in my opinion, with just a touch of arrogance thrown in.

BTW, where is the story "Tabula Rasa Ad Aeternum" posted? I tried finding it here but this story "Tabula Avatar" is the only one that comes up.

Never mind, I googled it and found it. Worthless. It still starts where the dopplegangers are in the hero's bodies. I have no idea how they got there. Nor the importance of some crystal that Willow dropped.

BTW, your writing is hugely better than theirs.

Reply to your comment: I stopped watching the show (never watched Pinky & the brain, yuck) a long time before season 6 so the only thing I know about it is what I read in these stories. Perhaps you could write a prequel? It's bound to be better than the actual show. I tried to start watching them again but the reading is so much better than watching that I just couldn't.
Comments from author:
Some jokes work for some people but not for others. If you're not familiar with 'Pinky and the Brain' that one won't mean anything to you. Just as a joke in the Season 1 episode 'The Pack', referencing the show 'Lancelot Link, Secret Chimp', meant nothing to me at all - I'd never heard of the show - until a LiveJournal friend posted about it last night.

You need to be familiar with the Season 6 episode 'Tabula Rasa' to follow how the bodies of the Sunnydale crew acquire alternate personalities and their normal selves' personalities end up in the crystal; in the episode the crystal is accidentally broken at the end, and this restores the normal personalities to their bodies, but in this story the crystal remains unbroken and the alternates continue on in Sunnydale whereas the normal versions get put into 'Baldur's Gate 2' by Warren, Jonathan, and Andrew.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [18 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-eight" from DieselDriver
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Woo Hoo! Red dragon hide boots and armor!!!
Comments from author:
Indeed.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-seven" from DieselDriver
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So why did Tazok have to die? She normally doesn't kill people who surrender or are defenseless.
Comments from author:
Tazok didn't surrender in time - except in the sequence which turns out to be his dying thoughts - and Sorkatani thrust to kill him the instant she saw the opening. She'd already killed him once, in the big battle at the end of the first Baldur's Gate game, and he'd still turned up again seeking revenge so she didn't hesitate this time. Yes, she'd have spared him if his surrender had been quick enough but she struck too quickly for him to get the chance.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [17 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from DieselDriver
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And still no "Sloop John B" by the beach boys. Sad...
Comments from author:
In a later chapter Giles considers it but decides the 'worst trip' line makes it too risky. I do plan on him performing 'Good Vibrations' eventually.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fourteen" from DieselDriver
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She let him off easy. If I were her I would have made sure he knew that if he'd asked nicely and been clean, I'd have said yes.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fourteen" from DieselDriver
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I would have thought that instead of "I gotta get out of this place" that "The Sloop John B" would have been better to get them home. All those lines about "I wanna go home" "the captain is sure to let me go home" etc.

Oh yeah, Who stuck a redwood up Buffy's ass? She's being a real shit!
Comments from author:
The trouble with 'Sloop John B' is the line "This is the worst trip I've ever been on."

Buffy is still partially in her depressed state after the 'pulled back from Heaven' thing and that's the main reason she's being a bitca. She'll improve later.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen" from DieselDriver
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Ok, he's dead now. Can Spike drain at least some of his blood?
Comments from author:
Possibly; I leave that to the reader to decide.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from DieselDriver
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Your chapter made me want to go play my favorite RPG - Everquest... Only to find they are running a patch and it's not available for a couple of hours. Bah Humbug!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from DieselDriver
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Ok, question: if their memories are in the game, where are their bodies? And what is happening to them?
Comments from author:
At this point what is happening to their bodies is pretty much the same as what happens in 'Tabula Rasa Ad Aeternum' by Kallysten and Kantayra. I'm not duplicating their work and I pick up the story of Randy and Joan, Giles and Anya, Umad, Alex, Willow, and Tara after that story has finished - somewhere around Chapter 30 if I recall correctly.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from DieselDriver
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“Don’t worry, Bit,” Spike said. “Ghouls just want to have fun.”

Yeah, don't we all? Nice pun. I like puns. You are a very punny person. I like that because if you don't know what to say, you can always drop back 10 words and pun. (american football punishment).
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [16 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-five" from Zeviz
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Thank you for writing this very fun story. It has kept me up too late for a couple days, and now I want to find my Baldur's Gate CDs again. :)
Comments from author:
Thank you! I recommend the Baldur's Gate and Baldur's Gate 2 Enhanced Editions (with improved graphics and added features, available as digital downloads, and compatible with modern operating systems).
Review By [Zeviz] • Date [21 Jun 14] • Not Rated
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