Amazing teaser! So many questions yet to be answered! Who is with Dawn in the Springs and who isn't and why? How / where did Dawn and mini-Jack meet? Please answer all of these questions soon.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [4 Dec 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Janet groaned again, wishing she could pull the covers over her head and forget the phone call had ever happened. But she couldn’t – she had to save the life of a teenage clone’s not-quite-human girlfriend.
That was a wonderful line, I can't wait to read more! Intriguing beginning!
Bernita
Review By [LadyBold] • Date [22 Feb 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
If the NID were smart, they wouldn't try anything against Dawn... wait, they might not be smart, but even they can't be so stupid that they'd risk the wrath of the Council! Because I certainly don't think even the President could stop the Slayerettes if they got angry enough.
Nice start, I'm looking forward to see how this will turn out. As for the reviewer who felt that you had painted yourself into a corner by leaving Buffy and Willow out of it, I respectfully disagree: Jon is the one making the phone call, he probably wouldn't know the truth about Willow and Buffy. He'd see them as concerned friends and family, and have no reason to think that they might be able to do something to help. (And, yes, Willow may be strong, but that's no garanty that she can help Dawn).
So, well... that's what I wanted to say. Have fun writing.
