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Guardians of the Veil

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Review of chapter "Chapter 5 Epilogue" from Dragonelf
Review:
You did great job with this story and I hope you will get inspired to write the sequel you mentioned in the end of this story.

::Gives the plot bunny some Coconut rice::

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Humankind cannot stand very much reality.
- TS Eliot
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Comments from author:
Thanks. I have most of the first chapter wrote as well as the end - which would be posted first (it is complicated). But until I get inspired to write more I cannot post it.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [27 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5 Epilogue" from zigpal
Review:
great ending. this was definitely a great continuation of your first story, and I can't wait to read the third part when you write it.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I do hope to finish this story sometime. I have about a dozen pages written but until I feel inspired I will remain only on my computer.

Blessings

Dave
Review By [zigpal] • Date [16 Mar 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5a" from JoeDineen
Review:
I think there is too much exposition in the last couple of chapters. I would also be pretty pissed at the Goddess if I was involved in this. I think if you are ever doing a story with elements similar to this again you should take more time to set things up. Use side plots and sub plots to position things and the 'seer of the Goddess' figure should be more enigmatic and their mission not known to the protagonists. In the original Authurnian myths Merlins source of power and knowledge is largely unknown. The reader can make their own guesses but the mystery helps the story. There is not need to explain every thing.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. The explanations are necessary because as I have pointed out I have twisted the Arthurian legend to suit my needs. So without telling it from that point how would you know what was really happening after all as far as Giles knew the legend, as we know it, is the truth, I am having him told that he and everyone else (mostly) have been lied too. The same applies to Merlin and his power, we may not know where his power comes from but the Guardians and the Sisterhood do.

The Seer of the Goddess is allowed some leeway in what they do to fulfil her design with out and out telling them exactly what that is.

Frustration with the Divine is irrelevant to them; the God and Goddess do what the must to fulfil the purpose.

Blessings

Dave
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [11 Mar 06] • Not Rated
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