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Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from Dragonelf
Review:
I really hope you get inspired to continue this story.

::Feeds the plot bunny::
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [16 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from Harry
Review:
Well, at least now we know that Willow is aware that the changes to her are permanent. Question is, how soon is Demona going to come to Sunnydale, and pick up her new DAUGHTER!
Review By [Harry] • Date [1 Jan 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Awakening" from Harry
Review:
Well, now we know the answer. Question is, how much of Demmona will be rubbing off on Wills!
Review By [Harry] • Date [4 Mar 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: The NIght" from Harry
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You did a great job in bringing out Demonna's charachter. Now, lets see what happened after the statue was broken!
Review By [Harry] • Date [4 Mar 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from Jorrie
Review:
This is awesome! Super interesting. I REALLY hope you continue, REAL soon. Pretty please with a cherry on top? I'll be keeping an eye. ^^
Review By [Jorrie] • Date [19 Dec 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from purrfus
Review:
Nice idea with something different. I enjoyed how you worked with Willow trying to be practical about the problem, and isn't it good that her parents are never home?

Trying to understand the logic in your AU: I can go with the costume and the change because I can accept Janus working with self identification and intent - if Willow says she is and thinks of herself as the character then she is. I can work with the various skin colors as Willow's mindset. I can even work with the end of the spell keeping her physical changes when for everybody else its just memories.

Why didn't Giles get to beat up Ethan (I missed that)? And apart from using the focus on the practical to bury her head in the sand, how is Willow going to deal her change? Are there really gargoyle in your AU? If so, what kind - physically? Are they evil, or guardians that avoid the hellmouth? Update soon please.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [24 Nov 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from DarkTopaz
Review:
I hope you update this
Review By [DarkTopaz] • Date [2 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from Lucinda
Review:
An interesting alternate costume, but you have one thing wrong - Demona wasn't a lavander gargoyle. Goliath is lavander, and so is Angela (Demona & Goliath's daughter) but Demona has red hair and blue skin.

I do find myself wondering if this will eventually have more gargoyles - the Guatemalan clan perhaps? or the interference of the Fae.
Comments from author:
Thanks Lucinda, you are one of my favorite authors.

I misremembered that her skin was blue instead of lavender, my bad.

As for the other stuff, something will probably show up.
Review By [Lucinda] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Awakening" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Oh, let me count the ways...
1. A Dominique Destine costume? I've never seen her in anything identifiably Dominique. The human form was shown in regular human clothes that ranged from average to classy, or Demona's outfit. What would there actually BE on a shelf that would constitute such a costume, and given that it's just normal clothing, why would it ever catch Willow's attention?
2. We catch up to that in the next scene. A business suit with her hair in a bun? Even if a random business suit did catch her eye (which I'm not sure why Ethan would be selling as a Dominique Destine costume in the first place), considering the identity is a fictional alias of an even more fictional character, why does she turn into a gargoyle instead of a snotty English librarian, or assuming Janus actually knows what's going on in Willow's mind and is willing to go along with it, a very surprised, very human Demona?
3. There's a backlash from the spell being broken that simultaneously reverses the changes in everyone else but makes Willow's change permanent? Yes, you as the author can decide to take your story wherever you wish to take it, but that doesn't mean we're required to accept it when you strain credibility like that. I mean, after all, Giles destroyed the statue and nothing happened to him. Even if he wasn't in a transformed state, if destroying the statue had a negative magical effect on the person who did it (the key behind what will follow in this story), SOMETHING would have happened to him.

I can't really be bothered to go on to the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Sigh.

I can go back and rewrite that part. It would be nice if I had a proofreader....

I'm trying to be plausible here.

Goes off to rewrite posted chapters...
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from Dragonhulk
Review:
I like the cross and plot, but the delivery is a bit rough. All and all its nice, and I eagerly await the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Oh well.

I don't have a proofreader so, I'm putting this out as I come up with it and trying to make things make sense.

So far not too bad. If I have to I can go back and revise.

I have a lot of material for the next chapter but, am not satisfied with it yet.

In case anyone wonders, I am open to suggestions and if need be will even revise.
Review By [Dragonhulk] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from UncleKai
Review:
owie... Gargoyle clothing are much work. Never had seen Demona sleep. Did she even need to sleep after Pucks spell?
Comments from author:
Yeah, I always thought that was a lot of work. Willow isn't the sort to want to go around in a loincloth and a strip of cloth to cover her other strategic areas. Hence the determination to have some decent clothes.

Demona might have been immortal but, she had to sleep sometime. At least I think so.
Review By [UncleKai] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from Sadfru
Review:
Different, never seen a chapter focused on clothing alterations before but sensible given the changes in size (willow a 5ft nothing, gargoyle 6ft something), but would have thought Buffy would have taken interest in that, maybe measuring her and taking her shopping in the day, Xander as the pack mule, been done but a classic (Males as pack mules, works every time).

Are you attempting to phase out Xander and Buffy, they seemed less talkative, or am I reading to much into it given the story is just up to the second day, would have thought willow would freak out a little, maybe a little rant at Ethan, with him being smarmy and British right back at her.

Seen very few willow Halloween stories out there, keep it up :)
Comments from author:
Willow asks Buffy for shopping help the next day. Lets hope Ford isn't a problem :smirk:

There will be Willow freakage, soon. She just needs a moment for her mind to wrap around all that has happened.

I'm not trying to phase Buffy and Xander out but, knowing those two it would take a bit of time for them to get to it. Xander has his Buffy obsession after all.

Remember it was Willow who was usually the supportive one.
Review By [Sadfru] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: The Day After" from war
Review:
I'm surprised Buffy or Xander wasn't with Willow to give her support or at least call her. interesting observation about needing to modify her clothes. good story looking forward to your next chapter
Comments from author:
Buffy has always struck me as kinda self absorbed when it comes to her friends, I suspect it would take her a couple of days to really notice Willow needed a hand. This will make it into the next day, assuming dear Ford doesn't distract her too much. Xander being male probably didn't think about the clothing issue. Expect him to notice soon something is bothering her. At the time I figured Willow was still in a bit of shock too much to freak other than adapt. There will be a delayed reaction and there will be ranting, oh yes there will be ranting.
Review By [war] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Awakening" from war
Review:
interesting story hope you continue.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I plan to continue but, the next chapter will take a bit longer as what I posted was largely finished when I decided to share some of my writing.
Review By [war] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Awakening" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
It's very simplistic and rushed feeling, and could go from a 'good idea' to a 'good story' with some more attention to detail. It definitely feels far too much like you're just rushing from plot point to plot point.
Comments from author:
Actually, I've been working on it for a while.

In what way is it rushed? There are different writing styles.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Not Rated
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