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Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from bradsan
Review:
wakey wakey.
Wake your Musie this story needs a update. I'm looking and still looking and consider my confusing still no update. So Muse wake up and update this good story.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [27 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from bradsan
Review:
I just realized that if they want more children that they always have to look what kind of gender the baby will have. When the gender is a girl then Legolas has to carry the baby. The Valar promised any daugther and not the first born. Darn that's harsh.
When it was the first born Elorien/Dawn could be the one. She is made out of Buffy and not Joyce so technical she is Buffy's daughter. They could have use it in the future when they want more children and Elorien already past the age when slayers are called.

Ah well this is only is important when this is gone be a very long story with more pregnancies involved or if you want to write a sequel when this one is finished.

loved it short but still loved it. Can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
Thank you as always for taking time to review.

Yes you are spot on with your comments, although your comment about Elorien hadn't actually occurred to me, still you are quite right that it could be viewed that way. Since I hadn't taken it into consideration I just thought that any future daughters would have to be birthed by Legolas.

As to a sequel I didn't think there would be anything left to include in a sequel once this concluded, I could only forsee a sequel if this had not been the alternative I chose. I am not sure about doing any stories that involve actions such as battles as this story in particular was always going to focus on love and relationships
Review By [bradsan] • Date [11 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 21" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
Awww. Poor Puffy Legolas. LOL though really I think he would be so delighted with the babies that he wouldn't even be that upset about being teased.

And I wanna just say I LOVE Faramir the one in the book of course. Movie version Faramir was given a bad script.

Ok now that that is out of the way, I am really looking forward to the mending of the family tree for Legolas his father and of course Buffy, Dawn and babies. : )
Comments from author:
Thank you as always for taking the time to review and let me know what you liked.

I am glad that you enjoyed it and the reunion and mending will happen in the last chapter which is only a couple of chapters away and which is already half written. I hope that you will be as pleased with it as I have been writing it.

As to Faramir in the film I am a great fan of David Wenham as we are both Australian and I think great especially in the extended version.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [7 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 21" from bradsan
Review:
Can't wait for another update. I waited long before I started reading again. Not because I didn't like the story. I waited so long so I could read more instead of one chapter. And guess what. you didn't disappoint me. Love the way you rescued the daughter. You've got a wicked mind and I like it.

good writing. Loved it and loving it even more now. Don't wait to long before you post another chapter.

Edit: 70th huh, I saw. About the reviewers I read them so I thought what the heck you need a good review so you won't doubt yourself. And the wicked is meant as a compliment and hey let the man feel what we feel when we are pregnant. Thats why I said you have a wicked mind.
Comments from author:
Firstly congratulations for being my 70th reviewer for this story on this site. Secondly welcome back, I am grateful that you didn't give up on this and that I didn't disappoint you with where it is heading.

None of my reviewers have commented on my wicked mind before but I will take that as a compliment although I really wasn't aware I had one especially in regards to this story. But I am really pleased that you liked the way I resolved it as that particular issue has caused quite a reaction amongst some reviewers and a lot of soul searching for me.

Thank you too for your comment on my writing as that is always appreciated and don't worry the next chapter will be up next week with only 2 more chapters to go after that, so I hope you will also let me know what you think of those as well.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [5 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 20" from EllandrahSylver
Review:
Yep. I saw that coming. *grins*
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time to review, I always like to here what you think. However I am a little confused by your comment, was it meant in a good way or a bad way? Please let me know via an email if you have a couple of minutes free.
Review By [EllandrahSylver] • Date [28 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 20" from Eureka
Review:
YUP! Called that! One way to keep the PTB's from getting their grubby lil hands on the baby girl.
Comments from author:
Thank you for letting me know what you think again, it is much appreciated and I am glad you were not turned off by my choice of how to keep the baby safe. As always I tried to do this with the dignity the characters deserve, I am glad that I achieved it.

Look forward to your comments for the next chapter which will be posted in a week's time.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [27 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 19" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
So I am really curious about where they need to go to keep her baby girl safe from the Powers that Be. It seems really weird that the Valar or Buffy would agree to that but then I don't know the details. Legolas's father...he would Love Buffy if he would meet with her with an open mind and give her half a chance. Though hasn't she been adopted by Galadriel? That should help some of his concerns.
Comments from author:
First off thank you for taking the time to review,it is always appreciated.

In regards to the safe place issue, they don't need to go somewhere so much as do something as Whistler told Buffy that it was the Valar that agreed to the proviso in regard to any daughter gave birth to and Buffy doesn't know about this agreement yet.

As to Legolas' father, I agree that he would probably love her if he had a more open mind, but the King of Mirkwood was the only one of the rulers of an Elven realm that hadn't received an Elven Ring of Power. Not only that his kingdom was the most threatened before and during the Ring War.
Because of this it is believed that he resented Lady Galadriel for having her ring of power.

I look forward to hearing your cooments on the next chapter if .you have the time.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [21 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 19" from Eureka
Review:
You def made my birthday brighter! So when will Legolas find out about the twins and who is going to talk to his Dad? Cause that just makes it worse on the twins for both parents to be upset like that.
Comments from author:
Well Happy Birthday and it was my pleasure and you made my day by reviewing so there you go.

Yes Legolas will be finding out about the twins in the next chapter, as for his dad you will have to wait till near the end for that one.

Am working on the last 2 chapters now and hope to put the last chapter up on Valentine's Day by posting weekly,so you only have to wait a week for the next installment.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [20 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 18" from Eureka
Review:
Personally I happen to enjoy the thought of a male having to go through what we women have to go through to make another life! That said, there is nothing wrong with L. having a magical carry of the baby girl. With Buffy carrying her till almost term then L "giving birth" to her so that the terms of the "contract" can't be fulfilled so that they keep their children! With the wrapped swollen belly of L that was shown, it stands to reason that he "gave birth" to the baby girl.

Yes, for once I read the reviews first. LOL
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for your review, I was starting to wonder if anyone was going to review and I am glad that you're not put off by the whole male pregnancy thing. I was hoping that this chapter would be able to give a rational reason for it and allay some trepidations that other reviewers have expressed.

Next chapter will be up in a week as the rest of the chapters bar the last two have already been written.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [13 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 17" from GraysonPaladin
Review:
Nice to see this being continued. For you questions 1) Adoption: I'll say maybe, if you think you can pull it off in a believable manner then go ahead. 2) MPreg: Hell No, please for the love of God don't do it. Legolas suffering from the symptoms is in the realm of believableity due to the bond he shares with Buffy, but adding... THAT to it is taking it too far. ~GraysonPaladin
Comments from author:
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me on these issues as it is always appreciated when an author gets feedback.

First to the adoption as that is something previous reviewers have now asked for, I will be going ahead with that and hope that you not be disappointed.

As to the male pregnancy issue this seems to have certainly sparked comment, and I take your own comments on board. See previous answers to reviews for chapter 17 to find out how I have suggested solving this issue and feel free to let me know what you think.

I must say while I love my reviewers to bits and understand that they are important to any author I am a little disappointed that my original take on this story would upset everyone, as the friend I was writing this for who under normal circumstances would agree with you has seen the future chapters and has no problem with it. As always I believe I have written the story in the best possible taste, with humour and absolute sympathy to the characters involved. and as I have mentioned before I do my upmost to see that the characters are as true as I can make them given their circumstances.
Review By [GraysonPaladin] • Date [14 Nov 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 17" from DemonicAngelC
Review:
Thank you for finaly putting another wonderful chapter up. I would be happy to read whatever you feel like writing, but I can understand how some people might be adverse to male pregnancy, it might be a good idea to add it a an alternative ending or chapter. I would also love to read the conversation between Dawn and Buffy about becoming Galadriel's family.
Comments from author:
Thank you for letting me know your thoughts on this issue and I will certainly be including that conversation.

As for the other issue yes it would seem that view tallies what those who have already replied have wanted.

I came up with another option from the one given to a previous reviewer and that is the following. As you may or may not know this story is also being hosted by Fan Fiction.net and as yet no one has gotten back to me on that site, so my solution would be to run the non male pregnancy version on this site and run the male pregnancy version on the other site.

I just would have to work out how to title the two, as my original idea was to name the non male one just Other Consequences of the Heart while putting them on both sites. However if I follow through with this new solution I don't think that title would work. Any suggestions would be most welcome at this point.
Review By [DemonicAngelC] • Date [14 Nov 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 17" from Ryutana
Review:
First: I'd love to read the conversation about becoming Elf Friends, it sounds like it would be very entertaining!

Also, I have no problem with male pregnancy, and if that is how you prefer to write this chapter, do what you feel works best.
Also, remember that you are the author. If others complain, well, too bad. If you get too many complaints, you could always post a second story that contains the alternate ending. ;)
~Ryutana
Comments from author:
Thank you as always for reviewing and especially for addressing my concerns as the author on where this shall go.

I am unclear however how I would go about putting up the second story and how I would show it to be different. My only thought was note one as the male version and one as the female version. It does not become and issue until chapter 19 or 20. and I have already started adapting the required chapters.

Is it necessary to put the whole story up a second time. Please let me know your thoughts
Review By [Ryutana] • Date [14 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 17" from slatergirl
Review:
The idea of a male pregnancy is interesting I would read it in a different story but I don't think it's appropriate here but maybe you could post the same story with that as an alternative ending. Personally I hate Dawn and I think that the less we see of her the better.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing and letting me know what you thought and I agree I used to also dislike Dawn but I had hoped I made her more tolerable here. She will be part of this story in a mainly supporting role but I was hoping to keep her as a kid sister type for Legolas and Aragorn.

The male pregnancy thing I felt carried on with the fact that Legolas was already going through the symptoms which will not change regardless.

Do you have an alternate female in mind to take on the task, I had originally considered Dawn for that role but she seemed a little young to be pregnant and it would certainly look strange if both Aragorn's adopted sisters were pregnant at the same time.
22/12/2011
After a lot of consideration and even after writing a new scene for chapter 18 to give another option, I have come to the conclusion that there would be no background in place to logically slot it in.

The story has been geared to what I will be calling COTH -The Legolas Alternative/Solution since the beginning with everything working towards that. For me to introduce another alternative and have it make sense, I would have to rewrite a considerable part of the original story.

I ask you to please give this version a chance, thank you

As for making the male pregnancy the alternate ending that certainly could be done.
Review By [slatergirl] • Date [14 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Vickzie
Review:
Aww thats a sad but cute story!
Comments from author:
Why thank you that is exactly what I was aiming for and I am glad that I am delivering it.
Review By [Vickzie] • Date [8 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from macalaarmstrong
Review:
Hello,
I love your story so far. I know it has been a few years since you have written, but I beg you to write again soon this is truely a wonderful story. I don't know LoTR very well (only since the movies once and read the books many many years again) but you seem to do all characters involved justice. In fact I have recently been looking for the audiobooks of the LoTR novels (I am legally blind and can't read the actual books, but at last I can only find abridged version right now) because of your story and a few others I have recently read. Please, please decide to update again. Keep up the great work and have a lovely day.

Smile,
Macala A.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for your warm words and for reviewing my story, yes it has been a while hasn't it. I am particularly pleased that you mentioned the characters as that is something I try really hard to achieve.

As for the rest of the story I have had the first part of the next chapter written for quite a while and have planned out what I want to put in there, it is just finding the right words that is holding me back.

The next few chapters have already been written and I must warn you that there is male pregnancy ahead which is not as a result of a slash relationship but is a logical reason and tastefully done. I have already started to adapt the story for another version where Legolas is not the carrier but another female is.

Please let me know which version you would prefer to read.

You have a nice day too.
Review By [macalaarmstrong] • Date [11 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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