I'm glad I found your story eventhough it's written in 2006. My favourite bit is when Willow break all the wands. It's so cool. Thank you for a wonderful story.
Oh this is just to beyond words. I love this fantastically wonderfully excellent fic. I very much enjoyed the way that Willow handled the Dursleys very funny. I think that the was that Darth Willow handled Riddle was way awesome. Also I felt that what Willow did to the wands of the wizards that were in the ministry was exceedingly funny, I hope that not all of the wands were destroyed as that would cause a lot of work for a certain wand maker. Also Willow did an excellent job in helping Harry to calm down and not get his temper riled up. Again I love this fic, it's simply wonderful and I really really love Willow's patronus. Please continue writing such amazing stories. ^_^
Review By [spring] • Date [19 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
This is a great story. I especially like how Dumbledore used the Patronus Charm to get rid of Darth Willow.
The only suggestion I would make is, you might want to consider using a beta reader. I'm guessing English isn't your native language from the type of mistakes in here, so it would be helpful to have someone look over your grammar and word usage.
Thanks for sharing your story!
Review By [ForTheJoy] • Date [8 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [10 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Proof? Magical Ritual?" from Sterling
Review:
I tried to continue reading this and just couldn't...It could be a really fun story. However the amount of errors you have in this thing is really just to much for me. One of the first tenants of writing is, know how to write. Study up a bit on your english skills and you will find a much more appreciative audience. Good luck, in regards to your future endeavours.
Review By [Sterling] • Date [18 Jul 06] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The next day, house call" from Sterling
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This is a cute little story so far. But you have some big problems with editing. For one thing you keep calling it the wizardry world when it is the wizarding world and all other kinds of grammar and word usage mistakes keep popping up all over the place. I am not trying to be mean here. I'm just informing you that the english in this story needs to be improved quite a bit. You can have the best ideas, have great characterizations and plots but without a proper grounding in correct english any story can turn to ash. Give your chapters another once over and/or find someone who has good english skills to edit your work.
Review By [Sterling] • Date [18 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Very good story, well thought out plot, could have been a bit longer, that said, quite enjoyable.
Oberon, The culture of the wizarding world depends on the wand, they would no more break a wand than we, in Britain would punish a pickpocket by removing his hand at the wrist, where every action from tying one's shoe's to cooking a meal depends on a wand, they would be horrified at the thought, therefore no such spell would ever be created. . There has been some mention of spelling in some of the reviews, may i humbly (as some one who is dyslexic) suggest this little pluggin for IE, either google IeSpell or save time and go to www.iespell.com, its free.
Review By [SnapeDog] • Date [5 Jun 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]