Interesting beginning but you are running with your story...you forgot that richard's guards are not going to just let him leave with out them no mmatter how drunk and never with a strange woman....you need to flesh out the fic :) Idea is good though :)
I like it so far. You have a nice way with the characters' personalities and it is nice seeing what LV is like in the Anitaverse. I do wish you had a beta reader as some of your spelling is ... a bit odd. Lol! I hope you write more as you seem to be creating an interesting plot-line and I like how you are handeling the characters. Please?
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [28 Mar 06] • Not Rated
this is pretty good. i'd realli like to know how she ended up in the anita verse. had she been attacked? spell gone wonky? accidently stepped on a hotspot jig?
Review By [willowywitch] • Date [24 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Interesting premise. Is she gonna be an 'Anita'-type personality, I hope not cause sometimes that chick has no heart. Are we gonna find out how she ended up in that universe. I actually have a ton of questions, but I am just gonna hold on to them and read on to see if I can answer 'em myself. See it appears you hooked me in under 600 words.
Review By [Erica] • Date [23 Mar 06] • Rating [6 out of 10]
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