I'm a little late in reviewing, considering this is nearly a year old ..... I do hope you intend to continue it. Its great to see a pairing that no one else has thought of .... not that I'm aware of anyway - plus the title fits it so wonderfully. Would really love to read more.
Review By [PaulineE] • Date [10 Mar 07] • Not Rated
This was a good beginning. You set things up nicely.
Oh, and you should realize that sometimes "constructive criticism" does equal things like "Well... I think you've got potential but you should read some of the better stories to get a handle on how to write dialog" and such. I've seen people who say "No flames" consider anything but butt-kissing sycophancy to be "bashing".
Comments from author:
Well I don't want ass kissing, I just want honesty on whether or not I should even bother wasting my time writing another chapter. I want to improve my writing so if someone says I should practice something. I'll take it into account for next time.
Review By [Worldmaker] • Date [2 Apr 06] • Not Rated
This is sweet and cute but I really don't think Elliot wouldn't get nosy. She could be breaking the law. A real good reason that he's not being nosy (maybe something about his ex-wife and trust) would be handy. I would be interested in reading more of this story.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Yeah. Nosy-ness is in the future when Faith gives him a reason to be nosy.... still deciding whether it should be finding a bloody knife or Faith comes home with blood on her own clothes... Nosy-ness is definitely in the future. And possibly trust issues...
Review By [Sandi] • Date [2 Apr 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Very interesting. I eagerly await to see where you go with this. The only tiny mistake I found was seperate should be separate. I love Faith, and pairing her with Elliot should be entertaining if nothing else.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the observation of the spelling mistake it will be fixed. And hopefully it will turn out to be entertaining.
Demona