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Review of chapter "A killer disturbed" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Sad that you didn't continue this tale.
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [19 Mar 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A killer disturbed" from Vickzie
Review:
Interesting story so far.
Review By [Vickzie] • Date [30 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A killer disturbed" from Mwhahahaha
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I hope you come back to this, it looks like a good story.
Review By [Mwhahahaha] • Date [16 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A killer disturbed" from nightslayer
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intresting. . .a little long but intresting
Review By [nightslayer] • Date [29 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A killer disturbed" from superbrutal
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I'd probably be a little pissed a her to if she had my kid dating a vampire too.

Thats just not going to end well, just ask Buffy.
Review By [superbrutal] • Date [27 Jun 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A killer disturbed" from Maria
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Out of curiosity, what in the gods' green earth is a "bleep"? Is a beeper? Is it a cell phone with text messaging? Is it something you randomly created? Is it a non-American word? Because the only bleep I know of is when one "bleeps it out" as a way to get rid of obscenities. Explain what a bleep is (and how one bleeps someone else for that matter), and I would love to keep giving this a chance.

Your writing style is slowly improving, the premise is interesting, and your character development is improving as well.
Comments from author:
Bleep is just the noise a bleeper makes when it goes off. So when she says ‘Bleep me’ it means contact her via her bleeper.

Sorry for the confusion.
Review By [Maria] • Date [26 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A killer disturbed" from Kenshin
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Looking forward to the next chapter.
Review By [Kenshin] • Date [26 Jun 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A killer disturbed" from CPTSkip
Review:
Very interesting. I did catch one error in spelling. Near the beginning you have the line: “We have a crime seen you are needed at. It should be “We have a crime SCENE you are needed at. Just being picky.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [26 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "24 Hours Earlier" from SlytherinWere
Review:
I love your story. I hope you'll continue it.
Review By [SlytherinWere] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "24 Hours Earlier" from CPTSkip
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Damn! Faith is dead. That sucks. But a Wesley who is as badass as Edward is just too cool. I really look forward to finding out just what the heck is going on. Lol!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "24 Hours Earlier" from superbrutal
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I was trying to figure out who she was talking to and I've got to tell ya that good old Wesley didn't even make the list.

Its a good surprise though, I'm looking forward to finding out how he plays a role.
Review By [superbrutal] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "24 Hours Earlier" from Twoboots
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This is a very good story, but killing off Faith still makes me cry.
Review By [Twoboots] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "24 Hours Earlier" from FlitShadowflame
Review:
...I have one problem with this chapter, but it's very nit-picky.

Anita prefers "Ms." Blake to "Miss."
Comments from author:
I feel I need to have my wrists slapped. Being an avid reader of Anita Blake, and having just finished The Harlequin, I should have known that. I will edit the fic and mention you for your help.


Thank You
Review By [FlitShadowflame] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "24 Hours Earlier" from littleoldme
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There are some grammar/spelling issues in here, but I find the premise intriguing, and the characterizations are decent so far. A few things to fix:

+Hellmouth is one word.

+You're using apostrophes incorrectly throughout the fic- only use them to if you're trying to show ownership for something (as in, you could substitute his or her in for the word), or if you're using a contraction for *someone* is. Don't use them for plurals- so it should be vampires, not "vampire's," unless you're talking about something a vampire owns- same goes for slayers, watchers, Buffy Summers, etc.

+Wesley's last name is spelled Wyndam-Pryce.
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "24 Hours Earlier" from arkeus
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Cool, thouhg i am a bit disappointed that Willow is only the country's strongest witch :p
Hehe, Wesley power!
He did get badass, didn't he?
Review By [arkeus] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Not Rated
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