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Review of chapter "Chapter Fourteen" from SlickRCBD
Review:
I've only ever seen one other story with the idea of Cordelia Chase forced into the Army. It took a wish to a Vengeance Demon to get her there. Judging by the dates, it may have been inspired by your story. It is by an author on this site called Cordyfan.
http://www.tthfanfic.org/Series-1538

Still, in this place I feel sorry for Cordy, although her knowledge and skills are needed.
Review By [SlickRCBD] • Date [13 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from sorawithans
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Okay, that... was a fair reaction from the Base commander there.
Review By [sorawithans] • Date [27 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from LordSia
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It felt a bit abrupt and rushed towards the end, but all in all it was a great story. Well paced, good language, the few relationships were mostly background flavour and did not dominate the tale... Kudos.
Review By [LordSia] • Date [23 Jun 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Ancalador
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Okay this one was a lot better then the previous story. An interesting view on humanity dealing with knowledge of three forms of life previously unknown.
Review By [Ancalador] • Date [4 Nov 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from SilverWave
Review:
Great story!

Thanks :-)
Review By [SilverWave] • Date [3 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Oxnate
Review:
Just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed this and the previous one. -Nate
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [29 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Bushranger
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I just finished this, and loved it. I don't suppose there's any chance that, as the ending hints, "this tale too shall also be told"?
Review By [Bushranger] • Date [3 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from deathgeonous
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Wow, this was even better then the first one. Much, much better. I really wish you wrote a third story in this series, but oh well, what can you do. Well thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [22 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from PhoenixFTW
Review:
Awesome story.
Review By [PhoenixFTW] • Date [30 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from sdavidm
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Excellent series. Shame you couldn't work it more from the Xander angle, thought I understand the reason you had to do it this way.

I have only a few minor quibbles:

1. There seem to be a disproprtionate number of female scientists not at all reflective of the real numbers of women that go into the field. Not sure if these were actual characters carried over from X-COM, it just struck me as odd as I was reading.

2. I'm surprised better sensors weren't part of Rachel's primary contributions! Radar was a huge advantage in WWII. Ditto for better computers, which would make other R&D move much faster. Information is power.

3. Not so familiar with X-COM, but it seems a bit odd to start building capital ships right off the bat. You started with a fighter, which makes sense, but the next logical step would seem to be the equivalent of a PT boat, not a dreadnought or a frigate! The timeline seems pretty tight for building that fleet too.

Just minor nitpicks anyway. A thouroughly enjoyable story, and I sincerely hope you continue this!
Comments from author:
1) You're right. I paid little attention to it at the time, but there aren't that many woman in science proportionally.

2) Didn't think of the sensors stuff, to be honest. I think I did put in a throwaway line of dialogue about their needing new computer technology to hurry up and come online to secure their communications, though, but it's hard to remember this far down the line from the writing.

3) Yeah, I got carried away a tad. Bad habit of mine.

'Excellent series. Shame you couldn't work it more from the Xander angle, thought I understand the reason you had to do it this way.'

Yeah, I've bounced around the idea of a rewrite with slower character development and such to go on. It's a lot of work, though, and I've never quite managed the motivation to revisit something that's a done deal and went down fairly well as-is.

'Just minor nitpicks anyway. A thouroughly enjoyable story, and I sincerely hope you continue this!'

Unlikely at this point. I started in on the sequel, got about 20k words written, and realised that I'd lost all signs of the original material I was working with. I'd got too carried away with the second story and killed the third with it. Such is life.

If I were doing it again, I'd swap the X-COM cross out entirely and possibly replace it with a large demonic force, closer to Buffy, or lose the structure of this story entirely. One thing's for sure: no crossovers outside the main one (KOTOR) to avoid ridiculous scope creep.
Review By [sdavidm] • Date [29 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from darthridian
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maaaate...

great story, just found this gem recently and it's great.

don't know if ur still planning on making a sequal but i would love to read it if you did.

if the 3rd part happened in the babylon 5 verse that would be cool aswell, imagine the shadows pulling the strings of the sith and the vorlons doing the same thing to earth government, would be great and the jedi are caught in the middle.

it would also be awesome to see the 'fist of god' go up against the sharlins :D

excellent writing mate, keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
'don't know if ur still planning on making a sequal but i would love to read it if you did.'

Not really planning on it anymore but I was originally going to put up a third part to resolve the hanging thread of the Sith. Just got so far away from the source material that I rather lost my grip on the whole thing, unfortunately, so it never happened.

'excellent writing mate, keep up the good work.'

Thanks. If you like my work, you may be interested (if you're an anime fan) in the newer stuff I have on my website. Link's in my profile.
Review By [darthridian] • Date [10 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Dragonelf
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You have done an excellent job with this story and the series. The stories in this series most definitely deserved the CoA awards they've won and if they hadn't already won them I would have added them to my list of CoA nominee candidates.

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Just once, I wish we would encounter an
alien menace that wasn't immune to bullets.
- Unknown
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Comments from author:
Thank you. That's a hell of a compliment and it's always nice to know that people enjoy my work.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [9 Jul 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Bobboky
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wow, this is just wow.... love your work hope to read more
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Jen
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I can't believe I missed reading this series until now. I absolutely loved it! The indepth descriptions of battle scenes, the interactions between Xander (Rachel) and the other scoobies, the way you incorporated Harry Potter and the other wizards.. just brilliant. I also really had fun with the way you wrote HK-47. I saw your post about not being able to write the 3rd part and while I can understand, I'll check back now and then in the hopes that inspiration will come to you some time in the future.

Jen H
Comments from author:
I have ideas rattling around inside my head for a third story and every so often they boil up enough that I almost feel I could start writing them. But, largely, my focus is on other things now. You'll see what I mean if you look at my FF.Net profile (same username as here).

Anyway, thanks for the feedback. I had great with HK, too. He's one of my favourite RPG side-characters.
Review By [Jen] • Date [8 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from BobFromAccounting
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I just reread this story for the umpteenth time and it is still as good as it was with the first reading. I loved the direction you took with Revan's tech and the war effort. This fic and the one before it have entertained me for many hours. I look forward to the next in the series, and hope it focuses on Revan establishing her acadamy and fighting the Sith. Keep up the good work and keep typing
Comments from author:
I'd love to write the third story and finish the series, but I just can't. There's nothing there. Every time I sit down to start on it the words just dry up and die very quickly. Pitiful, really, but so it goes. You can see what I've got at:

http://vasey.setsuna.us/KOTH3/

But it's not up to much.
Review By [BobFromAccounting] • Date [29 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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