I think it was sad that you viewed the review of JoeHundredaire as a flame. I think it was spot on, and I think you, whether you wanted to admit it or not, agreed. The excessive spacing has been fixed. Also, Joe's take on your characterizations really aren't off the mark. I understand that this is supposed to be a humorous fic. And yes, your characterizations of the Sunnydale crew is fairly accurate. Your characterizations of the SG-1 crew isn't as accurate. O'Neill? Mirthful? Sure. Teal'c slyly humorous? At times. Sam Carter or Jackson acting the way you have them? Not an accurate representation. That said. This is fanfic, almost by definition it's expected, at least by me, that not all of the characters or events involved are going to be pure canon. If they were, there would be no room or possibility for fanfic. Not all reviews are going to be glowing and gushing about how good a job you did. Reviews with negative tones are also important tools, for you to realize areas in which you can improve. I gather that you're from across the pond, judging by your spelling, so I'm not going to be too harsh in this regard, but I'm still fairly certain that you've got some serious issues with relying on spellcheck. Sander instead of Xander? The wrong word entirely? Strange, sometimes apparently random use of capital and lower case letters? And your punctuation? All need work. Granted, you may have improve since you've written this story, but as far as I've seen in your work, these are areas in which you can improve. This is not a bad story, and I hope the intent of the series remains the same.


I do, however, have one question.

Why are there so many people interested in O'Neill's endowments?

Intresting story.

Out of curiostity, Where does the term Tarith'na come from? Or is it something that one of you made up and just stuck some how? just wondering cause i've seen it used a couple other times in buffy/stargate fics.

Interesting!

Very much an impovement over the original.
Much easier to read and I really like the addition of some of the story filler in the early chapters.
Good work!

What an improvement from the original version. The formatting is much cleaner, and so much easier to read. The story flows much better, and some of the added details really made a big impact.

In chapter 6 Buffy mentions the scotch, the videos, and the potential nuking of best friends, and then in chapter 8 she is surprised and angry? This appears as a continuity problem. Some of the words are used incorrectly, for instance in one sentence you have Carter as his and her.

Since you do have problems with betas, try reading the chapters aloud. It really helps in catching spelling and grammar errors that most spell-checkers don't.

Looking forward to the next installment.

very good

I didn't see anything wrong with the last one, but I like the fuller explanations. So glad Jack's list is still here. Keep up the good work.
Gold

PLease Please Please {is My beggging and groveling good enough?] write the Part 4

YES!!! A PART 4!!! PLEASE!!! How do the Scoobs and Dawnie deal with the aftermath? All of the younger Slayers dead... *shudder*

Look, I'm really trying to enjoy this, but the grammar is absolutely atrocious. Get *someone* to read it over. A friend, a sibling, a parent, I don't care who, but *somebody*.

Hey Jack is NOT small... at least in my mind he's not **shiver of pleasure** So where is Dawn? Wasn't she to join us soon?

YES!!! I'm not the only person who think that about Teal'c staff.... His weapon not his other staff

cool work, more soon please. i love how you've got everyone picking on Jack :)

As you say, Oh, for heaven's sake...

Just because you have had betas flake out, doesn't mean that *you*, the author, aren't ultimately responsible for the quality of the story. I am *telling* you that you have serious problems with punctuation, and advising you on where you can go to figure out how to fix them. The fact that you don't have a beta doesn't mean that you aren't responsible for doing the absolute best that you can. It won't take that long for you to learn how to properly punctuate dialogue, and then you won't have to worry about flaky betas.

Thanks for the great update. I like the interaction between the two groups and their sense of humor.

Thank you