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Review of chapter "Fic Number 1" from JustJesting
Review:
No more zeros, anymore!

Technically well executed and with good introspection on the part of Willow. As this part is quite generic and the only difference to the canonverse is Xander missing, it could as well be another post-2/pre-3 fic. It is, actually.

There is not much that distinguishes this from your run-of-the-mill fic. A look in Xanders mind from third perspective, though I think that feeling left out wouldn't start till season three. After all, he started a relationship himself and Willow starting studying magic happens fairly late. Nitpicking, I know.

My honest opinion? It would have worked well as a single chapter in the story (or one of the stories). As a stand-alone it's not interesting enough in the long run. Sure, the emotions, the analysis of feelings and relationships is nice enough. But it doesn't carry any story (as It's not meant to, i get that). Work it in a multi-chaptered story, preferably after a cliffhanger and you got yourself a winner.

Thanks for writing,
Just in Jest
Review By [JustJesting] • Date [7 Jun 08] • Not Rated
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