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Review of chapter "Going Head to Head with Glory" from Stationary
Review:
I really enjoyed this story. The only thing that bothered me was the oversharing/info dump b/w the two parties. I feel like either of them would have told only the most relevant facts, maybe a personal story or teo and nothing else. I could sorta see Sam taking a chance but even he would hesitate sharing everything right? Anyways, I think if you had just cut down on most of the dialog where they shared their stories (b/w joyce and sam) into the most succinct summary possible it would have been much smoother. But that's just me. Loved it regardless. Will be reading the rest of the series! Can't wait until the boys find out who dawn's mother really is and hiw "old" she is.
Review By [Stationary] • Date [7 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Going Head to Head with Glory" from MysteryladyTx
Review:
THAT was AWESOME! I loved the story and the idea behind it...very very NICE!!!

THANKS:"D
Review By [MysteryladyTx] • Date [22 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dad and Caleb" from lucyferr
Review:
John Winchester was an ex-marine. He had watched his wife do this with her friends. He could do this. It was possible to talk on the phone and braid a girl's hair at the same time.

lol

Dawn grinned at her Dad, sitting behind her. He really was a great guy. Imagine that, he was trying to talk a weapons dealer into giving her brothers anything they wanted just so they could kill the hellgoddess who was out to kill her. It gave her a warm snuggly feeling she hadn't had since she found out she was a magical test tube kid.

awwww
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [15 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Taking Care of Hellhounds and Other Business" from lucyferr
Review:
His daughter was insane. That's all there was too it, John decided. There wasn't a single reason to believe otherwise. He had shot all six of the hellhounds and Dawn had jumped gleefully in to decapitate the bodies....Dawn planted herself in front of her father and grabbed a paw of the hellhound body he was dragging over to the fire. "We need marshmallows," she said.

lol :-)

I liked the Spike/Xan nestling mate theory.
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [15 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Going Head to Head with Glory" from winnie
Review:
another demise of Glory story with an interesting twist.
good, no looking forward to the next story in the series.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [winnie] • Date [21 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Going Head to Head with Glory" from GundumM
Review:
a very nice and interesting fic
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [GundumM] • Date [5 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Going Head to Head with Glory" from Dragonelf
Review:
Nice story.
Comments from author:
Thanks.

I thought that it wasn't fair that Sam, who didn't want to be a part of that sort of life, got the freaky powers and Dean, who was all for fighting the good fight, didn't. Besides, it made the choice of John as Dawn's father a better one if everyone in the family had a strong ability.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [3 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not real?" from Dragonelf
Review:
Nice first chapter, however you got one thing wrong.
It is Sam and not Dean that got the powers.

::Continues reading the story::

EDIT: I forgot about the fact that fanfiction authors can turn any
universe into an AU as well as changing other facts.
Comments from author:
Are you so sure about that? *snickers in AU author evilness*
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [3 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not real?" from Karone
Review:
Okay, this review is for this entire series, I haven't read everything recently so I can't recall some of the points I want to make but I have read this series several times so I hope that is enough to give a good review. I like the beginning. This first segment "Dawn Winchester?" is pretty funny, realistic, and goes fairly well with cannon. You did a great job combining the two fandoms of Supernatural and Buffy the Vampire Slayer pretty well.

Which brings me to a couple of things I didn't like. With the end of the series when you kept adding additional fandoms such as SG-1 and L&0:SVU the focus seemed to scatter a bit and I got confused. Even knowing the different fandoms fairly well on there own, the plot seemed to get too complex and well just awkward. I didn't understand why you made the jumps the way you did into the other fandoms. Making Carter and Olivia slayers was like an out-lier so to speak in a box-and-whiskers chart. (Sorry, that's the only analogy that comes to mind.) That jump in the plot was so unexpected and for some reason I think unneeded. You built quite a base to work from to be able to have your story end satisfactory without extra characters. I'm sorry; I'm not trying to be mean but I really didn't understand the point.

Like I said though, I liked the first installment of the series. John and Dawn were good together; how you wrote their relationship was good; your characters meshed well together. John and Buffy was funny too. I can see that pairing very easily. I was rooting for the pair by the ending of the story. Which only really happens when an author has written the pairing good. The prophecy was interesting. I did think the fight with the Yellow-Eyed Demon went a bit too quick. Everything was wrapped up too well, I guess is how I would put it. Generally I think fights ending in a good outcome and not a lot of character suffering is fantastic, but for some reason I didn't think there was enough angst or conflict. Maybe even conflict within the family would have been better. Or more of a problem with Dawn's powers forming or being controlled or more demons, the Supernatural ones, to take care of.

I didn't understand your purpose of Xander and Spike's marriage. Was it only to explain Spike's nesting behavior change? Or was it to get rid of Anya? With your writing of their characters, they seem to never be able to have love in their relationship. I mean, they won't be in love with each other nor with them staying together will they be able to find love with someone else. No Eros and all Agape, maybe. They would be together for the rest of their lives (until they died) without another shot at love. (This is mostly a personal complaint, not a story complaint. I like happy endings you see for everyone...)

Well I think that's it. This review has been in the making for over a year, almost two in fact. ^_^' Usually I'm a lurker of the most severest degree. Hopefully I said everything correctly. Please take this as constructive criticism. Sometimes I don't write things the way they are meant to be taken. ^_^' Which is mostly why I avoid writing reviews... Have a good day.

Karone
Comments from author:
Thank you.

Basically I kept adding new characters/fandoms when I ran into different situations. Carter and Olivia became Slayers because I didn't want to make up any new characters to fulfill those roles. This is a universe. That means that there are lots of different stories all going on at once. When I finish the latest story, I'm throwing the universe open to anyone who wants to write in it. I just can't keep up with all of those other stories.

I do have a problem with endings. I'm working on it. As for John and Buffy, I'm working on getting a little more romance in for them as well as new problems.

The reason for Spike and Xander getting married was to take care of what I saw as a really big problem with cannon. I hate Spike and Buffy getting together with a passion. That was the cannon reason that Spike eventually stayed and helped the Scoobies. I wanted to keep Spike because I really like his character but I needed a reason for him to stay. As for the romance, well I could have gone either way with Spike and Xander but I was asked to keep them straight. So their marriage is a paper one, one they can ignore if they meet someone else. Their new girl does need to understand the situation but while it will take a while for Spike to get out of it, the marriage won't last his entire life, just Xander's. That isn't very long for a vampire. Xander being the demon magnet that he is, I expect that which ever girl he finally settles down with will understand the situation. As for Anya, yeah I did want to get rid of her but I didn't have to do it that way. It was just a simple way to do it while keeping Spike around.

Oh and there's a small plot bunny running around my feet right now with Spike and Xander's name on it's collar tag. Apparently my muse thinks its funny to give me a bunny about how a romance for Xander would go. I'll just add it to the cage with the Harry the hellhound bunny and the Jack and Dawn's date bunny. At least the Jack and Dawn bunny has more than a few paragraphs worked out.

I love all reviews as long as they aren't hate filled flames and this did not come across as that at all! So thank you once again. YIKES! Has it really been that long? Sometimes I can't believe that I ever got started posting these stories at all and sometimes it feels like I just started a few months ago.

Annette
Review By [Karone] • Date [16 Apr 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Going Head to Head with Glory" from (Recent Donor)kribby
Review:
I really enjoyed this story. Thanks for entertaining me!
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [(Recent Donor)kribby] • Date [29 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Boys Meet Scoobies" from DirectorLady
Review:
I'm rereading this series for about the tenth time and I just wanted to say "Thank you." In canon, Dawn is a self-centered, spoiled, whiny little brat who doesn't grow up until after Willow tries to end the world. You have made her an interesting, likable character who acts like the teenager she is not a preschooler like she acts in canon. So, thank you and please update this series as soon as possible, it's one of my favorites.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I love to hear from readers that they like (or even dislike) my stuff. I have been without a computer for the last week. My internet connection has been down with major problems. But the next chapter of Starting the New Council is written and the one after that is about half way done. Now that I've got my computer hooked back up again, I should be able to post later today. Happy Mother's Day!
Review By [DirectorLady] • Date [13 May 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Going Head to Head with Glory" from Rivulet
Review:
What an interesting concept. I loved John's reaction to Dawn...and the hellhounds, great scene. Loved how Sam and Dean are all 'oh little sister' and immediantly go to help. Great story.
Comments from author:
Thanks, it was my first. I did go back and rewrite the first half of the story as it was a bit stilted. Oh who am I kidding, It was very stilted! LOL!

I started this verse when I read a story where Giles was Dawn's dad. Now, that little challenge was sitting in the back of my mind and I started watching Supernatural. I got to thinking, and well, this verse is the result.
Review By [Rivulet] • Date [8 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Going Head to Head with Glory" from Ansku
Review:
Great story :) Very enjoyable, even if I haven't seen a single episode of Supernatural (I've read a few short ficlets and a brief introduction to it though, so I know roughly what it's about). I think John believed Dawn a bit too quickly, though, it's not like she had any proof... but then again, I know next to nothing about him.
Comments from author:
It was more that he has a great deal of experience with the supernatural (that is also the name of the series that he comes from) as he has been a hunter of demons, ghosts and the like for twenty three years. He knows that such things are possible. Plus the expressions on her face are identical to his younger son's. That's what clinched it for him. Add in the DNA tests he was holding, and you get a fairly quick 'ok, I've got a new kid'. Since you liked this you might want to check out the rest of the series.
Review By [Ansku] • Date [10 Dec 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of story "Dawn Winchester?" from shelli
Review:
I do like this, it's a new way to introduce Dawn and her origins. This is my favourite in the series. The fight with Glory was over quickly but the characterisations were nicely done. Dawn needs a firm hand and John Winchester is just the man to do it!
Comments from author:
Thank you. It's also my first fic, ever. I was really surprised to find out how much people liked it.
Review By [shelli] • Date [9 Nov 06] • Not Rated • Edit Comment
Review of story "Dawn Winchester?" from arkeus
Review:
Nice fic, htough you did tend to bable a few times, and some paragraphs sounded a bit awkward. I expect the sequel to be even better :p
Comments from author:
Much better, this was the first fic I ever wrote. I did get better as time went on I promise. I've also been thinking of going back and rewriting this one.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [8 Oct 06] • Not Rated • Edit Comment
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