I wish that you would continue this story or let somebody else do it if you lost interest.
I still don't get why Buffy thinks she isn't smart. She isn't a genius like Willow and maybe Dawn but her SAT score and her ability to think on her feet while fighting, her input while they are thinking strategies or trying to figure something out are always pointing to the opposite. So I never get why the Scoobies and herself always think she isn't smart. I agree she isn't book smart as genius are but smart on other levels . She is real life smart.
A well I don't think it matters because this story is never gone be finished and my review will mean nothing because of it.
The relationships are unfolding nicely, and the characterizations are good. Its hard to manage flow when you are trying to bring together so many of the characters from each show, but your pacing is mostly working.
If you are planning to have future information packed conversations:
The conversations / exchanges of information are ok, except between Buffy and Hank - too much information packed in to that short conversation. Adjusting the story timeline to allow more time to discuss their history or including Dawn would have allowed a 3 way disbursement of information and help the conversational format flow better.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [15 Nov 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
If you turn a Jaffa into a vampire, what happens with the Gou'ald he carries. The logical thing would be that he would simple die, but ... we are dealing here with magic.
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [17 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Wow. Obviously well thought out. Looking forward to further installments in a well crafted tale. Keep up the good work. you could however do with a proofreader before posting there seems to be one significant error (not just a typo) every chapter or two. However I didn't think to mark them down and can't remember any specific ones right now. If you would like me to reread the story an d provide you with some corrections/suggestions let me know. Again - very enjoyable and eagerly anticipating more.
Hi, Looks like an interesting story. I'm only up to Chapter 8 so far. I wanted to let you know (as you may have been told already) that Jack's name is O'Neill. You also call him Jake at the end of the chapter. Other than small things like that, it has been a good story. I very much like your idea of Hank and like the parallels between Landry and his daughter. Nice work.