I am glad that you have decided to work on this story again and I am looking forward to read any new additions you might get inspired to add to it.

The story looks just as nice as the last time I read it, however you might wish to mention in either the summary or in the author notes that you have rewritten the story.

::Gives the plot bunny a huge carrot omelette::

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To invent, you need a good
imagination and a pile of junk.
- Thomas Alva Edison
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I hope you get inspired to continue this story.

::Gives the plot bunny a couple of slices of carrot cake::


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"Are You Pondering What I'm Pondering?"
"I think so, Brain, but if we covered the world in
salad dressing wouldn't the aspargus feel left out?"
- Pinky and the Brain
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Hey, I rewrote this since you reviewed. Does it read better now?

Wow. A Shadowrun crossover. That game (first ed. and second ed.) is actually what got me into sci-fi/fantasy in the first place. The nostalgia puts a tear in my eye. My hats off to you.

Cool; Thanks truly :)

...Let's hope I pull it off.

Confused but interesting :)

Nicely done. I had to read it several times to fix the bent time-line in my head, but I think I can follow your logic now. I'm not sure where you plan on going with your story, if you are, but I think it would be an interesting read.