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Review of chapter "Chapter 10 Rituals, Inheritance and Goblins" from Netchka
Review:
Cool story. Can't wait to read more. Buffy and Victor together, interesting? Tiny blond and tall Victor! Fun is going to happen.
Review By [Netchka] • Date [26 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10 Rituals, Inheritance and Goblins" from bradsan
Review:
It's a long time a go that you updated this story. Is there a chance you will update or did you lost your interest, because it's a interesting story.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [12 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4 Leaving and a Glimpse" from ptbptb
Review:
This story had a good start, but the writing became rather disjointed and clumsy after the first couple of chapters. Some things I think would help:
- Longer chapters.
- Less jumping around between points of view.
- More paragraph breaks (less solid lumps of text).

I hope you aren't discouraged from continuing to write, but I suggest you get some advice on writing style.
Review By [ptbptb] • Date [13 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10 Rituals, Inheritance and Goblins" from FireWolfe
Review:
I just found this. It is a great piece. While there is some technical difficulties it reads well and you can get past them. I love the idea and the creativity. I do hope you come back to th is story someday soon.

Fire
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing! I had hoped that by now this would not be the only story but it seems it is destined to be the lone story. I re-read my story just now and i agree that there are some technical difficulties but until i can completely fix them all I'll continue to edit as i go back & look at it through rested eyes.

IA
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [2 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10 Rituals, Inheritance and Goblins" from rhiowen
Review:
Ahh!! ages since you've updated, but i only just found the story :( please update again soon.
Comments from author:
i hope to but i'll have to see what happens. i'm in the middle of graduation preparations right now but i hope to update over the summer.
Review By [rhiowen] • Date [14 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10 Rituals, Inheritance and Goblins" from kimah
Review:
absolutely fantastic! I just discovered this story and glad I did! keep it coming please! I love the pairing of buffy and viktor!
Comments from author:
Thank you! It helps to now people are reading this. I hoped that other people would write storys with the same pairing but theres none as of yet!
IA
Review By [kimah] • Date [3 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10 Rituals, Inheritance and Goblins" from ChloeWinchester
Review:
Haha Krums gets knickers in the mail. Can't wait for these two to meet. Awesome chapter update soon.
Comments from author:
lol yeah, poor Viktor! They will soon i hope.
IA
Review By [ChloeWinchester] • Date [2 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9 Let the learning begin!" from (Past Donor)Fritolays
Review:
Hmm, will Buffy be able to get Sirius a fair trial and will he become a free man? I guess we'll have to wait and see. Can't wait to find out :)
Comments from author:
well it will be coming up soon. i have the scene written but not the chapter if that makes sence.
IA
Review By [(Past Donor)Fritolays] • Date [7 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1 Summer Vacations" from meka
Review:
I really want to read your story. You have drawn me in with this first chapter. Half the work of writing is catching the readers attention. You have done that. Yeah for you!!! However, the other half is editing your story. You have to get someone to edit for you. I want to read this. I am craving a good crossover. You have all the makings of one. You just need someone to edit it for you. Please keep writing because it is good but without editing it is hard to read.

Best wishes,
meks
Review By [meka] • Date [31 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1 Summer Vacations" from lilcutie
Review:
are ugoing to update... i love this soy it is unusual.. please continue
Comments from author:
Yes, as soon as i can! chapter 9 is betaed but my (insert swearing) computer and email account were acting up now that i have a new email my beta and i are hoping it will be easy to get up the next 2 chapters up!
IA
Review By [lilcutie] • Date [20 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8 Wands, Feathers and Time warp" from paradiso
Review:
LOVE THIS STORY!!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!! I can't wait to read about what happens when Victor and Buffy meet. Is he going to take her to the Yule Ball instead of Hermione? I hope Harry brings Ginny. Their one of my favorite Harry Potter pairings.
Comments from author:
Chapter nine is being beta-ed right now. Buffy and the gang will end up at Hogwarts by chapter 15 (i hope). Buffy and Viktor will meet shortly after. Harry will probably end up taking Ginny i never liked him having a crush on/dating Cho.
IA
Review By [paradiso] • Date [19 May 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8 Wands, Feathers and Time warp" from CharmedSlayer
Review:
Very nice, keep up the good work
Comments from author:
Thank you
IA
Review By [CharmedSlayer] • Date [20 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8 Wands, Feathers and Time warp" from (Moderator)acs
Review:
Okay... add another vote for serious need of a beta (One willing to back over your earlier chapters and help you fix them. And one who can show you how to format/write dialog in a readable fashion.)

And you might want to work on your pacing... you tend to pack too much into a paragraph.

Okay... the issue of names -- sure you can change events around, resurrecting some characters and killing others off at your own whim -- we all do that to some extent. But getting character names, physical descriptions, personalities wrong intentionally - just because you can - ??? Why would you do that?

Names are important in fan fiction -- they are a framing device. They give the reader a point of reference. A way to connect with the story.

In one movie and 144 episodes (no idea about books or comics) - Buffy was never called "Elizabeth". Calling her that makes her into a different character. "Buffy" is light and fluffy. Totally unexpected as a "super hero" - which was part of the whole genre twist going on. An "Elizabeth" is someone more mature, more reserved. Very unlikely to survive the twists and turns that 'Buffy' had the flexibility to over come.

And who is this Mrs. Calendar you refer to? Jenny Calendar wasn't married as far as we know.
Comments from author:
Yes i know and i am working on it i started this in July and intended to have it finished by know, circumstances left me unable to meet that goal.
I'll try to do that i was feeling rushed which was probably conveyed in the story.

i am going back to change her height i had no idea how tall she was but i figured 5"5 would be a happy median and since i am aware that shes 5"3 know ill change it. As for Rory i will be correcting that too on here. (no offense but people on here are more picky then on ff.net plus its easy-er to change on here too)
As for Ms. Calender word messed that up and i had not noticed until you pointed it out.
Thank you
IA
Review By [(Moderator)acs] • Date [18 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2 Owls with Letters!" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
You *badly* need a beta reader - the numerous grammatical errors make this a difficult story to read. Also, I see that I - *once again* - must remind a fanfic author that Buffy's official full name is Buffy Anne Summers, *not* Elizabeth. She is also 5' 3", not 5' 5", and Xander's uncle's name is Rory, not Royal. All of this information is easily obtainable from IMDB.com, a resource I suggest you avail yourself of before any further writing.
Comments from author:
i do have one and will be posting the corrected version of ch.8 after this and asking them to go over the Previous chapters. Yes i am aware of those facts but my story is Fanfiction where i can twist and warp the truth to what i want or need it to be. Just like people do when they say Joyce or Tara are alive it simply fits the plot of my story, and i do know about IMDB.com
Thank You for reviewing
IA
Ps i didn't know Buffys height and it will be corrected soon
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [17 Dec 06] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8 Wands, Feathers and Time warp" from Nightmarish
Review:
I realize that you're trying to improve your grammar, etc. in each new chapter, but I think it would also be beneficial to go back and edit from the beginning. When a story is difficult to read (especially in the beginning!), readers are often put off or discouraged, and will more than likely hit the back button. Your story could have the most engaging plot in the world, but we readers are lazy and don't want to do any more work than we need to. A beta reader could help you with your grammar, spelling, etc. But keep trying - you've got an unusual pairing working to your advantage, and the makings of a good story, with a bit of editing. But was it just me, or was Xander's uncle named Rory?

If you're interested in help on the editing front, feel free to e-mail me at Nightmarin@gmail.com. I'm working on a few fics already, but I'd be happy to help where I can. Or you could check out the TtH forum.
Comments from author:
thank you for pointing that out i will be asking my Beta to look over previous ones. Yes, but i warped his name it sounded better to me when i wrote the first draft. I do need help with the fonts on hear i wanted Xander's thoughts and the spell italicized and it did everything down from that and it wont stop to my annoyance.
Thank you
IA
Review By [Nightmarish] • Date [17 Dec 06] • Not Rated
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