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Xander and the Himalaya Fortress Fantasy Hotel

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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Deridesio
Review:
Wonderful premise. Would love to read more. I am very interested in the interaction between Xander and Ra's. There seemed to be a hint of possessiveness on Ra's part, and I would love to see that explored. I am also curious to see if Xander will be made to use a Lazarus Pit, as that might restore his eye (I mostly bring that up cause I have a big aversion to losing body parts and tend to pretend that thing with the eye never happened). I do hope you update eventually.
Review By [Deridesio] • Date [24 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Greywizard
Review:
PLEASE!!! This NEEDS to be continued!

LMAO at Xander's last thought. ;-)
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [2 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Review:
Trying not to laugh out loud due to the early hour.

Thanks
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [7 Sep 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Dragonelf
Review:
I hope you will get inspired to continue this story as I would love to see how Batman would react to when Xander and him meets for the first time.

::Feeds the plot bunny::
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [19 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Nightscream
Review:
Are you ever going to continue this fic? I hope soe its seems like a very good start.
Review By [Nightscream] • Date [26 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Loved the ending.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [25 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AnthonyR
Review:
interesting story. you should continue it. really overdoing it with your style of writing american english. i dont know where your from, but in your next chapter you start to refer to california as cali, i WILL shoot you. we dont say that. ever.
Review By [AnthonyR] • Date [24 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ashez
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Ha ha, that last part cracked me up. I'm especially fond of the title too. From the description I thought he was going to end up being Talia and Batman's son, but this works just as well too. I can see Xander wanting to get his sister away from 'dear ole dad'... I hope you write more.
Review By [ashez] • Date [25 Aug 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
interesting
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [9 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Elleria
Review:
More as soon as you can please!
Review By [Elleria] • Date [25 Jul 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MagnusXXN
Review:
Ah! I actually had an idea to use Ra's as Xander's long lost father. Glad to see someone did it. Interesting weirdness with the whole naked groping of his half sister. ; )

Are you going to leave it at one chapter? Or do you plan on adding more? I'd like to see more.


): )
Review By [MagnusXXN] • Date [24 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Lucinda
Review:
first thought: oh my...
second thought: I want to know how this continues.
third thought: doesn't that last line just follow Xander's luck with females?

Lucinda
Review By [Lucinda] • Date [23 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Kirallie
Review:
Poor Xander! Was his threat to magic himself out genuine? Xander and magic are usually an incredibly bad combo. Isn't his dad one of the bad guys? Keep up the good work!
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [22 Jul 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ChristaBelle
Review:
A lovely job on the story (whether it is done or you continue on) BUT I have a little pet peeve that ran through and distracted me.

The use of the word WHOM vs. WHO is the peeve. You should only use the word "whom" if you would use the word "him" whereas the word "who" should be used it you would use the word "he".

For instance:
"With whom did you take out that vampire nest?"
"I cleaned out the nest with him."

"Who is Xander's father?"
"He is Xander's father."

Sorry for going English Teacher on you, but I can't help myself, even though it is Summer Recess so I'm not officially teaching right now. Yes, High School English teacher here. ;)
Comments from author:
Ah, thank you for that clarification. I'll make the changes. (Have you heard/read any of Garrison's little skit jokes involving English majors?)

Thanks!
(^_^)/
BEM
Review By [ChristaBelle] • Date [21 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Greywizard
Review:
I definitely like this! ;-) More, please?

Especially like the last line. ;-)
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [21 Jul 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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