Finish, please?

good

Cool :D

Well what happened in the intervening three years? Did everything play out the same?

I think if you have a major XO event like Susan she should change the events of what happened in the series.

Ah, I like sweeping changes to the universe as much as the next bloke, but I'm aiming here for a kind of 'changing the past not to change the present, but to change the future' kind of feel. So far I've mainly had experience with the former. I'd be very happy if I could keep the build-up low key this time, but only if I also manage to make it convincing.

Chapters 10 & 11 should both read (from different points of view) something like:
Event in Season 3 leads to ---> 'Missing' Scenes cropping up everywhere in Seasons 3-7, without overly affecting what the 'camera' sees, but inevitably leading to ---> Large Events now that the finale is safely out of the way.

"Susan, this is Giles the Watcher-trained Librarian and Faith the Accomplice Slayer. Guys, this is the mysterious-"

accomplice slayer? god no wonder she went rogue - Faith the Vampire Slayer in her own right thank you.

Then I forgave you because you portrayed Faith as no dummy who read Pratchett because he took her away from her world.

Then you spoilt it again by having Xander read the discworld books too. Hell why not have Snider and Joyce read them as well?

Actually I think it a mistake to have Susan a recognisable piece of fiction far better for her to be from another dimension like Pylea.

--mistake to have Susan a recognisable piece of fiction

Hmm. I usually go for indirect connections, myself, rather than the actual books... There's just not a lot of stuff out there comparable to Discworld... Then again, if Susan had just shown up and acted as she normally does, I could see a less well read Giles quickly growing to resent her.

As far as connections go, how do you feel about the Scoobies being dropped into WB's Smallville, with full knowledge of Superman comics, but having no idea why Clark Kent and Lex Luthor are so very young and so very AU?


--Then you spoilt it again by having Xander read the discworld books too

Alright... It's not an idea I want to discard completely, but I did handle it weakly...

If I change things around, replace that section of chapter 3 with:
"Ahem, Xander," Giles coughed. "Think about the book you were trying to pass off as a 'Demon Reference Manual' when I found you hiding in the back stacks. The one with the humorous cover."
Oh, yeah. One of those nights I really didn't want to go home, I remembered. "That Discworld."

and change Xander's line in Chapter 9 from "I must have missed reading that part" to "Makes me wish I'd read more than thirty pages."

... will that be okay?


--accomplice slayer? god no wonder she went rogue - Faith the Vampire Slayer in her own right thank you.

Hey! You're right that she should resent that remark, but it hadn't occurred to me. Thanks for pointing that out :)

The next Chapter is from her POV, so I might just have her think back and get a bit angry :D


Great review. Thank you for making me think :)

'and the Death most willing to claim the donator'

You just knew they were screwed at that point.

*snicker*

odd

Hey, I rewrote the fic in first person and gave Chapter 8 a somewhat different end result.

Hope it flows more smoothly this time through :)

Very good very Pratchett. I like it.

Hey, I rewrote the fic in first person and reworked the end of Chapter 8 so it made more sense. Still good / Any better? :)

*Great* plot development. I love the way you are keeping everyone in character.

Thanks :D

cool

Chapter seems OK to me - a bit odd and demented but what can I expect? I'm reading a Pratchett cross, after all.

Like this story and look forward to updates.

Ok, I feel like I missed a chapter or two.

Could be me, but this just didn't read right - like, uh, why is Faith riding the horse? It just didn't make any sense to me, but then again, it's 8am, and I should be asleep still, so as I said maybe it's just me.


ADDED 8-19-06

It reads ALOT better this time around.

You're right, it began abruptly and left stuff out.

Demon Binky equals power. I decided to take him away for a bit so I could write the scene in my head. I should have set it up more clearly the first time through...

Thanks for bringing it up... I need help like that sometimes... I increased the length and detail... Better? :)

I just found this story, and all I can say is, "Wow."
Great stuff. I love the characterizations...

Heh, Thanks :)

nice

Hee...

Discworld crossovers always amuse me.

Keep up the good work.

Thanks, but updates are gonna be random. The pacing feels kinda sideways in my head. Working uphill, or somethin' ;)

very cool, i hope top see more of this soon