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Review of chapter "Halfrek's Gift" from MistressRed
Review By [MistressRed] • Date [23 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halfrek's Gift" from lorwen
That's all I can say.
Review By [lorwen] • Date [18 Jul 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halfrek's Gift" from (Current Donor)MarcusRowland
Saw this recced
and thought I'd say
that on the whole
it's pretty okay!
Comments from author:
Read your review
With the rhyme I was enamored
And since the prose was pretty okay
I guess I'm kinda flattered

Review By [(Current Donor)MarcusRowland] • Date [14 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halfrek's Gift" from (Past Donor)Ponder
That was great. Very nice build-up to Willow's realization.

You've got 4 line breaks between each paragraph instead of 2. I believe you can easily fix that in your original wordprocessor doc by turning off the double-spacing and then you can repaste here at TtH.

The title of the story is still misspelled.

*** Ponder
Comments from author:
A large part of the problems I am having stem from My computer having a MAJOR crash about a year ago. I lost everything. I AM trying to fix things, however, I am stuck re-downloading everything and trying to put the fixes together from that. There have been issues (sigh). I do apologize for inconvenience this is causing the readers, but I AM trying
Review By [(Past Donor)Ponder] • Date [24 Feb 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halfrek's Gift" from Satori

This fic is amazing. Much kudos.
Review By [Satori] • Date [24 Feb 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halfrek's Gift" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll

Excellent setup!
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [25 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halfrek's Gift" from (Current Donor)Speakertocustomers
An intriguing idea and you put it over very well. I liked it a lot.

However Belisarius has a good point about your spelling of names. Ahnyaka should be Anyanka, Halfrac (which you also spell as 'Halfrak' in one place) should be Halfrek, and Jessie (a feminine name) should be Jesse (the masculine version). The spelling error in the title will probably put off a lot of prospective readers, quite apart from the potential quarantine issue.

Also, Willow's correction of Buffy's grammar is itself incorrect. Buffy was right first time. You can check by inserting the phrase into the original sentence and then taking out the second person. "You didn't bring I a wedding gift" is incorrect and therefore "You didn't bring Xander and I a wedding gift" is also incorrect. "Me and Xander" is correct and, as Willow is canonically much more likely to be right about such things than is Buffy, you should do something about it.

ADDITION: Only too happy to help with constructive criticism - if I don't like a story I don't bother to point out errors. You haven't caught all the spelling mistakes - you still have Halfrek's name wrong. The second vowel should an 'e'.
Comments from author:
I would really like to than you and Belisarius for your constructive criticisms. I like getting those as much, if not more than, the positive words. I think I got all my my errors...I hope...

Once again thanks
Review By [(Current Donor)Speakertocustomers] • Date [27 Jul 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halfrek's Gift" from Belisarius
Pretty interesting, one or two misplaced capital letters. Also, and this is important, it's Halfrek and Anyanka. Stories get quarantined here for misspelling canon character names.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the heads up.I think I got them

Review By [Belisarius] • Date [27 Jul 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halfrek's Gift" from MaeveBran
Wow. That was perfect. Sad but perfect.
Comments from author:
Well if you people keep up with such nice flattery I may have to write something else. I'm glade you enjoyed the story. I guess its time to start work on the next one
Review By [MaeveBran] • Date [27 Jul 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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