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Review of chapter "The Return of Atlantis" from Duskie
Review:
Really liked this too. I hope you do Methos and Silas' last five million years too.
Poor Dawn loosing her mind. This is sure going to change the Inara's life I really want to know if Willow can remind Dawn who she is.
Doesn't this put Willow almost five million years back in the past if Earth-That-Was, was only destroyed five hundred years ago. Therefore Willows brothers are Five million years in the future? Therefore she's that much further away from them?

Hope you continue more and the Early Dawning soon!
Review By [Duskie] • Date [27 Nov 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Return of Atlantis" from Infinix
Review:
The one thing that can't be argued against with story/series is that it is original. The ending felt a bit rushed but not enough that I want the unification to be delayed.
Review By [Infinix] • Date [18 Nov 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Return of Atlantis" from Bobboky
Review:
sweet
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [18 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Return of Atlantis" from arkeus
Review:
kickass indeed.
Too bad there was no more carter action though :/

he he he, I want to see "dawnie's" reaction.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [18 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Return of Atlantis" from Bluesnowman
Review:
Great stuff.
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [18 Nov 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Return of Atlantis" from Thedruid
Review:
Aw, so this arc ends. Well done, and you even managed to tie it into that other short story you did with Firefly. Looking forward to more, hopefully sooner than the last time.

Couple of reasons I'm not giving this a 10 though.
1. This just seems to be a wrap up of everything and rush to the other arcs. Barly any actual drama or interaction of charcters at all. You could have easily gotten another encounter or three between the SGC and Willow in there, placed anytime between her escape and recovering of her research ship. (Times they came close to finding her, wondering what she was doing, dealing with the poltictions after Atlantis was brought back, her gathering of supplies for summoning Atlantis, maybe teaching some 'normal' people so they could help her with her quest... etc. etc. etc.)
2. What happend to Cassie after Willow brought her to the SGC? Has she survived?
3. How does SG-1 deal with the evidence of the control Willow apprently has over them? The massive security leak that she is.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I really did try to write some more scenes with Willow interacting with the SGC, but none of them worked, they all just dragged on and got kind of boring. That is why it ended up taking so long to update. There were three plots that I tried to get to work before deciding to just wrap the story up. This is the outline of the one that went the farthest.

Starts with Daniel in one of the SGC isolation rooms tring to figure out what was going on. Eventually getting let out, and then becoming obsessed with tracking Willow down. He starts assembling research on a series of roberies from meuseums and various archeological sights and correctly guesses that Willow is behind them. Most likely gathering high tech artifacts that she can canabalise for parts for some nefarious purpose.

However the rest of SG-1 become woried about his growing obsession. They need his help translating the Asguard database, but he just isn't putting the time needed into it. The only person who takes his side is Cassie Sr. Who, after recovering from radiation poisening, sees a video of Willow slaughtering half a dozen soldiers, and crippling SG-1. The brutal violence makes her feel betrayed and manipulated by the woman whom she had considered a friend. For these reasons she helps Daniel in his research.

The months pass and the two become quite close, but Daniel soon starts behaving more eratically. It turns out that Methos' hijacking of his mind has started to cause cell death. The momentary exposure to the imortal's massive consciouness is slowly killing him...

After that I'm not sure what I was going to do. Maybe have Willow sneak into the SGC and heal him, or have Methos hijack him again and bring him to Willow to be healed. I was having a lot of trouble getting Daniel's interactions the way I liked them. In the end I decided that it would be better to avoid getting too bogged down in the SGC's story, and focus on getting Willow to complete her plans.

Thanks again for the review, maybe I'll try and put some of this plot into the next part as a flash back, I'm actually going to need Daniel/Methos again.
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [17 Nov 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Return of Atlantis" from Neqs
Review:
Great chapter in a great series! I especially like the way you keep some of Willow's truest characteristics, yet write her in a totally unique way. There's only one thing I'd like to heckle about: "The vacuum of space had kept the ship in perfect condition. It could just as easily have been left there for three days as three million years." If space kept things in perfect condition, the moon would be a smooth orb, right? If the ship had a shield, where did it get its power for 3 million years? I'm sure Willow's smart enough to make a shield that draws power from the nearest sun or subspace or whatever, but the chapter just glosses over the issue. That said, great fic and thanks for sharing!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, but I have to disagree with your opinion on things decaing in space.

Actually if you aren't in a crowded solar system, very little could cause something to age and degrade. Even on the moon, things take much much longer to change, for example Neil and Buz's footprints are going to be preserved for thousands of years. Something as small as a ship, even one in orbit of a blackhole system would be such a small target that it's chance of getting hit by anything that could cause damage is very very small. It will age, just very very slowly.

The reason the moon looks like a hideously pock marked teenager is that there is no atmosphere to wear away the ocasional meteor strike, so we get to see it's BILLION year history written all over its surface.

As for power supply, I supose I should have put a sentence saying the ship had just been turned off.
Review By [Neqs] • Date [17 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Escape" from Suzanne
Review:
I really do like this story. I hope you write more of it in the future. Great job
Comments from author:
I'm actually working on the next chapter right now. I realised that it would be better to get this story done before I finish up the Early Dawn. It shouldn't take too much longer, maybe two weeks.
Review By [Suzanne] • Date [3 Nov 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Escape" from JediKnight
Review:
Glad to know you haven't abandoned your stories, I hope to read more soon.

Was it really necessary to kill Oma?
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I do think it was necessary to kill Oma, can you honestly see the Willow in this series leaving her alive?
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [4 Oct 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Escape" from Thedruid
Review:
Please update soon, I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter! This one or Xander's story!
Comments from author:
I just started writing again after a long spell of writers block so there should be something new soon. Most likely in Xander's story.
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [12 Jun 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Escape" from Hellfire
Review:
A good crossover for Methos would be the book Mutineers Moon. If you haven't read it, you can read the whole thing at the free library on baen.com.

In Mutineers Moon there is a conflict raging, with the same characters (500 year lifespan with treatment, stasis, and brain swapping), from the second Methos shows up till the near future. Most of the time its something of a cold war which would suit his more cerebral style. Methos can't just over power the Mutineers because their to heavily augmented. They should be stronger and faster than slayers. The counter mutineers are very much the underdogs so Methos would have to use his brain and skills to fight them. If you want you could keep him in stasis for a long period of time like most of the counter mutineers.

Love the series.
Review By [Hellfire] • Date [17 May 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Escape" from lexas
Review:
I like it so far can't wait to see more. Please update soon and good luck writing :)
Review By [lexas] • Date [10 May 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Escape" from Infinix
Review:
Well that didn't go very well. Does that mean there are two Cassies in this reality now?
Review By [Infinix] • Date [10 May 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Escape" from NoLifeKing
Review:
Awesome.

I'm hooked on this story.

Can't await the next update. :-)
Review By [NoLifeKing] • Date [10 May 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Escape" from eponine
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You have a talent for creating terrifying scenarios. Seriously. It seems like every chapter has me on the edge of my seat, just barely restraining myself from yelling at my computer screen. The way you built up tension between Oma and Willow was perfect. Guh.
Review By [eponine] • Date [10 May 07] • Not Rated
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