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Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from (Past Donor)JoeHundredaire
Review:
I'm not sure who "Home Security" is, but I really couldn't buy the Chloe half of the chapter. First of all, do the African countries spend time and resources calling everyone who views their publicly-published information about Xander? Secondly, while the school might be fairly empty at certain times of day while Chloe is researching, it'd take more than a small bit of time to track down which computer was accessing the information and who was on it at the time. It just really smacks of the "SCOOBIES PWN THE WORLD!" mentality that far too many authors take in post-Chosen fics.
Comments from author:
Hey, my first pissed off review. Thank you. Seriously. I always respect honest opinions.

To address your point: While it’s not impossible, a fast reaction like this is highly unlikely. I agree.

But why do you think the sheriff told the truth? Was the fact that there is no agency called “Home Security” not enough of a hint?

How the information about Chloe’s research was really obtained and why someone in Smallville has an interest in scaring her off will be answered in the next chapters.
Review By [(Past Donor)JoeHundredaire] • Date [16 Dec 06] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from EdScott
Review:
Great story. I'm really enjoying this. The vamps that attacked were from Harmony. Right? She had a thing for unicorns.
Comments from author:
Thank you.

Yes, the unicorn points to Harmony. That doesn't mean that she's around necessarily.
Review By [EdScott] • Date [16 Dec 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from RevDorothyL
Review:
I'm glad you're continuing with this! Thanks for the updates. Wonder what Chloe will do with the intriguing bread crumbs Xander and Co. have dropped in front of her, now!
Comments from author:
Yes, Chloe will definitely be curious once she stops worrying about Clark.

Thank you for pointing this out.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [5 Dec 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Bobboky
Review:
sweet
Comments from author:
Thank you for leaving a review once again.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [3 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from purrfus
Review:
Great Watcher and slayer interaction between Xander and Liza.

Michelle is a problem. Even knowing her family was recently killed in a car accident and that she is having trouble accepting the slayerness is not enough to make me care what has happened or might happen to her. While I understand the need to have some local reason to attract Xander to Smallville, if she can't be a least a little more likable please remove her.
Comments from author:
Please realize that for Michelle it have been only a few hours into the day so far. She woke up with a massive hangover, had a one-eyed man tell her a nearly unbelievable story, and had more than once been bested by a child. So it's understandable she's far from her best behavior.

Still she has decided to follow Xander to find out the truth about her strange powers. She had another explanation for them, Smallville style. But she has given Xander the benefit of doubt. He has the first hooks in. There's a hint in the story how he thinks about her already.

There's a reason, why Michelle is in this story. Give her one or two days more to get her act together.

Thanks for leaving a review and voicing your opinion.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [3 Dec 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from magik
Review:
It's pretty interesting. I hope you expand on the history of how Xander got to this point in his life. I love the the girls, and how they relate to their new watcher. I look forward to more.
Comments from author:
There are so many great "Xander in Africa"-stories out there, I don't think I have something to add to them. But I will probably reveal a few events from Xander's past. Give it some time.

Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [magik] • Date [3 Dec 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Sadfru
Review:
Great chapter :)
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [Sadfru] • Date [17 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Bobboky
Review:
very cool
Comments from author:
thanks
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [17 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Intriguing! I hope you'll continue with this fic.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Yes, I will continue. Give it some time.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [17 Sep 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Rob
Review:
Very good so far. I like the way Xander's handling Michelle.


Rob
Comments from author:
Thank you. Yes, Michelle and Xander will probably be fun in the next chapters. For me at least.
Review By [Rob] • Date [17 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from tohonomike
Review:
An intereting start ... but I can't be sure of that... maybe you could add another three or four parts this week so I really know how I feel about this story? ;)
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.

Sadly, I'm am a very slow writer. At least I'm already working on the next chapter. Try to be patient.
Review By [tohonomike] • Date [11 Sep 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MusingsOfApathy
Review:
I believe that I reviewed your 20 minute work and told you how much I liked Liza. I like her even better now. I like Xander to have someone around him that is the muscle and he is the heart and the brains. It negates the need for Xander being more than a normal human, albeit one with great fighting skills, for a human.

Thank you for writing.

Mike (MoA)
Comments from author:
Yes, you did.

I view Liza and Xander as a team. She brings the slayer package, he brings the experience and his heart.

Xander is a good and experienced fighter (in this story). A drunk and untrained slayer isn't nearly as fast as a sober, trained slayer.

Thanks for following this story and for your kind review.
Review By [MusingsOfApathy] • Date [5 Sep 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Some nice characterization so far - but no compelling reason for the story to take place in or near Smallville. I'll check in when you write more. Thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
You are right, there is no reason yet. Be patient. Considering the snail's pace at which I'm writing be very patient.

Thanks for your kind review.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from PhilH
Review:
Very good stuff, I especially liked how Xander handled the drunk slayer (alcohol bad!), and teases his slayer. More soon please.

Phil
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. I am glad you like it. Be patient.
Review By [PhilH] • Date [5 Sep 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
good
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [5 Sep 06] • Not Rated
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