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Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from (Past Donor)exiled
Review:
The opening could use a little description cause I had no clue that it was plane until half-way through the paragraph. It might be a well known plane in the UK but I'm in the America.... Same with the C141, besides isn't that rather a large plane for the Council?

Ah, well, moving on, I am so glad that you have gotten back to this story! I liked the Faith/24 story alot, but Buffy is my favorite. The scene where she didn't let Danny take down Manny's pictures was poignant. She knows what it's like to lose people and I know when Danny finds out just how much pain Buffy has gone through it will change him.... it will also give him a glimpse into why Buffy becomes so emotionally crippled and frightened sometimes. It's one thing to have someone tell you about past pain, it's another to be faced with it.

Josh is a sweety and I'm glad Dawn has him, is he becoming a Watcher because he's smitten or because it's a real calling to him? I think his father and mother understand the danger, the long hours, the soul killing pain, but is it on his radar as yet? I'm sure you will answer these questions in the story.

Still really liking your Willow, the Goddess. I think you have really captured the true humble yet amazing woman. This is what Willow had the potential to be all along. She is the right person to have all that power entrusted with her.

No comment yet on Carter's family, I don't know them yet. Though, things seem to be going too well for Buffy and Danny.

Can't wait for more!

Once again, thank you for sharing your time and vision.
Comments from author:
Thanks for your review. Yes the part about the plane was a little vague, I'll admit. And a C141 is a comparable size to an Ilyushin 76. (Russian build quality....crap!) I know it's a bit on the large size but initially, (see Next in Line) I needed a plane that had the capability of flying from Rio to Paris in one shot, with a full compliment of slayers and associated vehicles on board. Enter the C141.....

Don't panic about Josh.. Or have you been sneaking a look at my chapter notes? I have written about four chapters ahead of what you are actually reading, so I know where it is leading...

Meeting the Carter's soon.....

Regards

Avidreader.
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [20 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from Marcel
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Wow. Long chapter - my favorite kind :) - and a lot of stuff happening. I can't wait to see where you intend to take this.
Review By [Marcel] • Date [20 Jan 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen." from Genjimat
Review:
I've just re-read "Next in Line" and then this one, all in one go. And I must say, it's starting to become one of my favorite series. I quite enjoy your take on the BtVS characters, because it sometimes differ from mine, but that's one of the reasons it's interesting to read, not to mention entertaining. The only small problem I have, as shown by my rating of 9, is in the (and I hope it's the right word) formating : in a good deal of instences, your punctuation is a bit peculiar. But as it has very little to do with the plot, I can only end this by saying that your work here is quite nicely shaping out to be an excellent novel.

P.S. Being french, I've also got to say that your story is sometimes very funny to read. But it kinda keeps it in close lineage with the Dan Brown's novel (but yours is better in that respect, because, seriously, how the hell did HE come up with the name "Bezu Fache" ?! THAT has to be the biggest mystery in the Da Vinci Code).
Review By [Genjimat] • Date [18 Jan 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen." from Marcel
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Still interesting; still weirded out about the low number of reviews. Also, I think Yademos is right - casually messing with people's memories does not sound like something they should be doing, especially given Willow's history.
Review By [Marcel] • Date [15 Jan 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen." from (Past Donor)exiled
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I knew Dan was going to have trouble with Buffy moving in once they got back to the apartment. Thanks for making your characters human.

Nice part, though I am concerned about Jo.

Good update!
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [14 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from Marcel
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I have recently discovered Next in Line, and then of course this one. Very interesting, very well written. I'm suprised by the very low number of reviews though; weird. Eagerly waiting for the next update.
Review By [Marcel] • Date [14 Jan 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from (Past Donor)exiled
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That cliffhanger was evil! another great part!
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [5 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fourteen" from (Past Donor)exiled
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Interesting problem Dan and Buffy have now. I'm sure there is a spell to help with it though, or Willow could come up with something. I'm beginning to really like Josh, however, I can't wait until he meets Buffy! Good story!
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [29 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from Lulubell
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I just Read both of the stories and I must say..... they are Great. Loved everything involved with the Dan and Buffy thread though out both stories.... Cant wait for the next chapter..
Review By [Lulubell] • Date [30 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from YademosEbyam
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The writing is excellent, the plot intriguing, but I'm finding the direction the WSC seems to be heading in the last couple of chapters a bit disturbing. (But then maybe it's supposed to be.) The apparently casual way that Dawn and Giles used mind control magic and blackmail respectively to solve the Council's problems makes me wonder what other shortcuts they might take in future. While I've never been a great fan of angst fic, a little soul searching before (or even after) implementing these solutions would have been appropriate. Is this the path the old Council travelled? If one of Scoobies doesn't makes at least a token objection, I'll be very disappointed. Subordinating ethics to expediency never ends well; pretty soon the "necessary evil" becomes "policy".
Review By [YademosEbyam] • Date [12 Nov 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from mithrilandtj
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nevermind
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [1 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from mithrilandtj
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Oookay...

So how is this a sequal to "Next in Line"? I'm sorry but I'm just not seeing it.
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [10 Oct 06] • Not Rated
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