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Review of chapter "26: Smell-o-vision" from Wolveschildscub
Review:
please work on This story i really like it.
does Sara like Jereth too, or is it a one sided thing.
i think Sara likes him but is scared and un trustful of her feelings towards him.
I BEG of you to finish this story.

love always,
WOLFCHILD
Review By [Wolveschildscub] • Date [30 Mar 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "26: Smell-o-vision" from Dragonelf
Review:
I will most likely one way or another nominate this story to this years COA!!!

This story is really GREAT so far and I am looking forward to read any future chapters you might get inspired to write.

::Feeds the plot bunny::
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [20 Mar 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: Ding Dong…" from Dragonelf
Review:
Is it Duncan or Connor MacLeod? (I suspect it is Connor as he has been mentored by Nakano)

::Continues reading the story::
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [20 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 9: Hearing of the Dark" from Dragonelf
Review:
...“If I want to mock He Who Is Defeated By Babies, I will” Sarah replied, loftily...

::Giggles Insanely::

I am really glad that I wasn't drinking anything when I read this chapter.

::Continues reading the story::
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [20 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "26: Smell-o-vision" from jupitersdaughter
Review:
Very nice addition. I really love your discriptions of Snape's facial expressions!
Review By [jupitersdaughter] • Date [30 Dec 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "25: 1st Blood" from spring
Review:
I love this fic so very very much! I think it's wonderful so far. I really really would love to know what exactly the twins did to the Death Eaters you have my curosity in this part. I am also eager to know if Jarth will make his move on Sara although I think from the movie she sorta knew that Jarth had a thing for her. I hope that you are able to update this wonderful fic again soon. Again I love this fic.
Review By [spring] • Date [13 Dec 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "25: 1st Blood" from jupitersdaughter
Review:
Very nice traps! I like the looking up logic, it works so well!
Review By [jupitersdaughter] • Date [2 Dec 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "24: Muggins of course..." from (Current Donor)DreamSmith
Review:
Okay, first the bad: There are a truly horrific number of typos in this story, both outright mispellings, and contextual errors (you routinely use 'to' when you meant 'too', or the reverse, for example). Likewise, your punctuation isn't great, sometimes to the point of making it pretty annoying to read. Things like that will usually turn me off of a story within a few paragraphs. You really, REALLY need to get a beta reader, or, if you already have one, you need a BETTER beta reader.

Now the good: What you're doing here, the story lurking behind the sloppy editing, is surprisingly engaging. I quite happily blew through the whole thing, suppressing the winces when I repeatedly stubbed my toes (metaphorically speaking) on the errors, and still found myself enjoying it.
The sections with Snape being set upon by his students pretty much shattered my suspension of disbelief, but again, I was able to force that away and let myself be entertained.

Now, if you would only clean it up a little, and give us more character bits featuring Sarah, then this would be a really outstanding story.

I'll keep watching this.
Review By [(Current Donor)DreamSmith] • Date [2 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "24: Muggins of course..." from jupitersdaughter
Review:
Damn people move quick. And I love the illusion theories!
Comments from author:
well, mostly they are my actual thoughts on the natrure of illusions and it does seem to work for this fic,
and thanks!
Review By [jupitersdaughter] • Date [30 Sep 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "23: Rides ansd Wishes" from jupitersdaughter
Review:
Cool!
Comments from author:
thanks!
Review By [jupitersdaughter] • Date [19 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Emeraldfire
Review:
This is awesome! A friend told me to check this story out. Please continue!
Comments from author:
of course... though it wont be a fast updater Im afraid
Review By [Emeraldfire] • Date [18 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "22: Wards" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
Prof. Sprout and Dunbledoor? 0.0 good golly!
Comments from author:
is a bit scary isnt it? ;-)
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [15 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 21: The Morning After" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
I really like this and I like that Draco is getting to be a little better, I still kinda wish it could be a Jareth pairing. but it's all good. One suggestion, if you upload your chapters spread out you would probably get more reviews. Of course that is assuming that you want more reviews, but most writers do so I thought I would suggest it.
Comments from author:
heh, well, i had actually planned on adding a paart a day until all i had ready were uploaded, but kept on forgetting...
eventually I gave up, hence why you got the lot as once
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [20 Feb 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 21: The Morning After" from purrfus
Review:
Wow. When you update you go all out. The story is really good, but the Draco, Snape, and Abbott bits are great. I really enjoyed Dumbledore being told off.
Comments from author:
thanks! and yes, Dumbledore does need telling off now and again.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [20 Feb 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from DarkTopaz
Review:
please update this
Comments from author:
every chapter that has been written has now been uploaded
Review By [DarkTopaz] • Date [27 Dec 06] • Not Rated
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