The Goblin King and His Powers, 5 th Edition by Melinda Warren = Charmed Illusion, Advanced Spells In, 3 rd Edition by Sabrina Spellman = Sabrina the Teenage Witch Practical Illusion Spells 1 st Edition by Gillian Owens = Practical Magic
You are Good! Three of my favorite Non Harry Potter Witches mentioned!
Comments from author:
heh, Ive dropped a few other crosses as mere hints too, see if you can spot those!
Review By [JediClaire] • Date [16 Dec 06] • Not Rated
I'm liking a lot of this story. The voice of Jareth and the goblins are strong. Although it appears that the HP universe characters are only window dressing so far. How old were Harry and his friends? How far did they get and what did they see? Thanks for sharing the tale.
Comments from author:
well, the hp characters are getting a lot more of a showing in the newer parts, hope you like
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [28 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Sharp. While there are some definite edges between chapters, within each chapter the story is flowing nicely.
Great edge on Dumbledore. I don't like the character, but writing him as intelligent and manipulative is much better then merely cunning.
Comments from author:
well, this story was a backburner one, just to get the rabid plot bunny out of my head, meant it could be months between chapters being written... that kind of encourages the edges unfortunately
Review By [purrfus] • Date [28 Nov 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
The only problem that leapt out at me was the "revile" in chapter two — I rather imagine that it should be "revel". Other than that, this is a fantastic start and promises to developing into a fantastic story.
Thanks.
Comments from author:
well, the deatheaters would say 'revel' i suppose.... everyone else would just 'revile' it.... ;-)
Review By [Fooo] • Date [28 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
This is good. I can see Dumbledore drooling at the thought of more power. Sarah is definitely going to be a wild card. Please continue.
Comments from author:
yes, he is a bit of a manipulative *beep* isnt he? and whilst he might be nice, i would certainly not say he was 'Good', if you get the distinction too many plots in that head of his, makes you wonder how much of what you see is a facade and how much he truly means of course, just being a schemeing individual doesnt instantly mean hes bad / evil... this kind of question mark just makes a character more interesting actually.
Review By [Sandi] • Date [28 Nov 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Too brief, and while I tend to think most things are in this case the chapter was abrupt. Jareth's speech felt pushed out. I would like to see where this takes you, but please slow down. Thanks
Comments from author:
okay, you might have a point there. but hey, that chapter was written a year ago intending to kill a plot bunny unfortunately the plot bunny in question needed a holy hand grenade of anitoch to kill it and i havent got one of those.... yet
Review By [purrfus] • Date [26 Nov 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
it might be an unusual story for me (only ongoing HP fic, only crossover that doesnt involve BSG03, BTVS or SG-1) but I still have no intention of dropping it in fact, Im finding this one quite fun
Review By [war] • Date [26 Nov 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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