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Review of chapter "Jonathan/Molly" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Particullarly liked the Jonathon/Amy/Molly story and the Giles/Anya one the others were pretty good too. Pity about Jonathon dieing (in the series) and Amy going 'bad'. They could have made a good xover series.

All the best,
Dave T.
Comments from author:
Did you like them because they featured English people governor?

Yeah, Amy could have got her own show easily. 'Amy Madison, witch'. It could have been set in San Francisco and featured the struggling of a girl who had her college disappearing into the Hellmouth along with her academic records. And her resulting struggles to find employment and not turn people into rats. I'm sure she wouldn't have behaved like a total slapper like the charmed ones too.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [11 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jonathan/Molly" from CPTSkip
Lol! Now this was a sweet chapter. I so like to see everyone that counted coming out ahead. Jon was one of my favorite minor characters and I like Amy and Jon getting married. Even though I do think there are a lot of people who would be better off as rats I do think Amy might be better off after an anger management class or two. Meanwhile "I've got a little list..." Oops! Wrong chapter. I look forward to more neat updates.
Comments from author:
Yeah, there are so many people better off rats and dead.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [11 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jonathan/Molly" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Heh. Cute seeing those two together. Kinda makes me want to read/write a dark-J dark-A AU-Season 6 team-up... ;)

Great assortment of people brought back, reads well too :)
Comments from author:
A dark Jonathan, that's an interesting idea, but he'd just fall in love with Winifred Burkle too you realise? But yes you should write it.

Thank you very much for your review.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [11 Jan 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Anya" from ContessaD
Wow, these were...entertaining. I'm really enjoying the odd relationships and situations. Plus, I love to see who turns out completely screwed up and who doesn't. It's always a surprise.
Comments from author:
There is actually a way you can predict if peoples marriages are going to be happy or not in these stories. Think about it and see if you can work out the formula.

Ooh it's like Algebra isn't it?
Review By [ContessaD] • Date [9 Jan 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Anya" from exqurere
Bunny phobia- it's completely understandable if you've seen the Holy Grail :P Another great chapter, I love the unhappily ever after twists
Comments from author:
Thank you very much, I'm glad you like the twists. I saw Holy Grail ages ago I can only remember the cocconut horse hooves. Not the bunnies. Someone must have done a cross over.
Review By [exqurere] • Date [8 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fred part 2" from Ouatic
I realize not every chapter will be funny to everyone but, gotta say, not seeing the comedy in this chapter....

Edit 1/8/2007: See now, if you had run over the dogs, I would have gotten the joke.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.

I was chortling with evil glee when I wrote it I have to confess. So it's good to have someone honest tell you the joke fell flat for them.

The joke is I was attempting to get to. Is that just when you think Fred's being alive will lead to people being happy, it all turns to custard.

However I do recognise that affairs, abortion, miscarriage, being turned into a souless animated corpse and aeroplane crashes are not funny in real life.

But humour is based on fear. Perhaps I should have had the dogs get run over too. The doggie dying is the ultimate social taboo.

I promise the next chapter will be fluffy and as funny as I can make it for general audience appeal.


I am now deeply regretting not running over the dogs
Review By [Ouatic] • Date [8 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Anya" from CPTSkip
RAOTFLMAO! Excellent, excellent. I love this update. You made me laugh like a loon which is actually a good thing. There were so many good lines, including the last one. But for some reason these lines made me laugh the most: “No, we would hardly encounter each other. That’s why I’m completely sincere in inviting you to live with us.” I liked seeing Rupert and Anya have a good and happy life together. I just hope Alexandra gets a little brother or sister some day. Lol!

PS Somehow I missed the Dawn Queen of Hell episode. But I just reread all your chapters and wanted to tell you that was another winner. I laughed muchly at that one. And you did a good job with the words to "I've got a little list" song.
Comments from author:
To quote Gwyneth P. "You liked it, you really liked it?"

I am so glad. In my mind there will be no further siblings in that family. Giles was always anti kids as was seen in the restless dream. He could cut it as a stepfather, pretending he wasn't really involved. But he would be of course. He's too old to have more kids. It's happily ever after for them, to have just one quiet little girl.

Dawn, thank you as you are the first to comment on this chapter I thought no one must know that song. Always one of my favourite songs. Up there with a grunge song called "Shitlist" based on the same principle.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [8 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Anya" from JennyLal
Anya and Giles are one of my favourite pairings. I think he just accepts her as she is without constantly trying to change her like Xander or judging her like Willow. Nice chapter.
Comments from author:
Why thank you. I've been a Anya/Giles shipper since their earth moving kiss in Tabula Rasa I must confess. I was wishing frantically when they went on their little adventure together to speak to the eye of the b-something in S7they'd get it on.

But no, silly Anya had to take the path previously trodden and sleep with the guy who was constantly embarassed by her, and had jilted her at the altar.
Review By [JennyLal] • Date [8 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fred part 2" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Heh, I was kinda hoping Lorne would bump into Wes and read him... Maybe leading to everyone being better off.

Ah well. Lorne really on the flight? Ouch. Poor Faith and the potential vamp baby.

Xander/Joyce is cute.

Wouldn't it suck if Wes tried a spell to resurrect his pregnant Faith and wound up with alternate reality pregnant Faith from the Mayor's Chapter? Heh :)

-- Welcome ;)
Comments from author:
"Wouldn't it suck if Wes tried a spell to resurrect his pregnant Faith and wound up with alternate reality pregnant Faith from the Mayor's Chapter"

That is an inspired suggestion. That would be totally blackly funny.

I'm glad you liked Xander and Joyce.

Thank you very much for your review
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [8 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Harmony" from Cutiepie
I don't know about Harmony, but Riley is certainly better off with her dead! That one was a riot. The Fred one not so much (I just can't seem to laugh about a miscarriage, for very personal reasons), but I laughed out loud at the Harmony/Riley pairing. Especially the unicorn fetish that she has going. Priceless!
Comments from author:
Thank you Cutiepie. Glad you liked Harmony and Riley. Thank goodness you found it funny! Nothing makes me happier than to know it made someone laugh.

Yes, I think I crossed the line back there with bad taste with Fred part 2. Sorry. It was cathartic to me, for my own sad personal reasons. But I didn't want to bring nice people like you down, even though it cheered me up. And that story gets a happy ending. I don't think there will be many readers who will want to read Fred part 3 however judging from feedback.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [7 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fred part 2" from SevenMagic
I think that my sense of humour is not compatible with your sense of humour. At least as far as the "black" stuff goes. I didn't find this at all funny, but beyond tragic instead. Oh well. You hit some and you miss some. Maybe another, future one will be good for me.
Comments from author:
I promise no more black humour. (Well there's one potentially coming as the very last concluding story chapter Fred part 3 but that is five chapters if not more away.) If you see Fred part 3 you can avoid it. But I was thinking of giving it a happy ending. Yes that tangled mess can still be saved believe it or not.

Thank you very much for your honest review. I really appreciate it when people politely tell me what they didn't like about a story. If I ever do a series like this again. I was thinking of doing a companion piece one day. 'If only they'd died.' I'll never experiment with a Fred storyline like that again.Because if it doesn't make most people laugh it's not good enough.
Review By [SevenMagic] • Date [7 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Mayor" from Brightly
wow, that's wicked screwed up, but also frighteningly plausible.
Comments from author:
Why thank you Brightly. I'm getting more and more tempted to write my first ever F21 pwp to describe exactly the call of Cuthulu carry ons that go on in the governors bedroom.
Review By [Brightly] • Date [4 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Joyce" from Cutiepie
OK, I put this one into the file of "*Not* Better Off Dead" although the idea of Joyce married to Xander is kind of wig-some. Yeah, I know the "May-December" marriages happen, but it is outside the realm of my actual experience. I just don't see what they would have in common. =] Anyway, you are going great guns with this series, and I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
Comments from author:
May December? May September thank you, golly maybe even May late August. And they have heaps in common. they speak English, they lived in Sunnydale, they're both hetrosexual, they probably both vote Democrat. The age gap is a lot less than between Xander and Anya.

No it wasn't better off dead at all, three cheers for Joyce. Also not that funny damn. However cheerful. And after Fred's wrist slitting recount. (I think I acccidentally wrote angst instead of black humour) I needed a feel good story.

Thank you as always for the review.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [3 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fred" from CPTSkip
Ah, this little story is so sad. No Big Bads, just good people doing bad things to each other. And yet it was sort of sweet too. Nicely done. BTW, I have never thought of Fred and Lorne together as a couple before, but you actually made them a cute couple. Again, nicely done.
Comments from author:
Thank you, it should have been funnier and was, draft 1, when Fred was being a bitch and Lorne not in love with her. Wesley and Faith were just using each other for sex. But that was too out of character, and thus the story become the sad little tale of so many affairs, whereas if the Wyndam Pryce spouses had just communicated better, they could have got what they wanted inside their marriage instead of out of it.

Although the whole reason why the rooms got described was so you could see Wesley was craving a bit of rough, Fred glamour.

When Fred died in Ats, I thought Lorne seemed the most upset out of anyone outside Wesley, with hints he was in love with her, (although god, everyone was!) hence the inspiration for her paramour.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [3 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Mayor" from Ouatic
Gotta love the mayor. I think he was the best villain Buffy ever had. My favorite was how it was unsanitary to make love in the kitchen.
Comments from author:
Gotta love reviews where people tell you specifically what their favourite lines were.

I loved the mayor too.
Review By [Ouatic] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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