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Review of chapter "Lilah" from Cutiepie
Review:
Oh my. That was darkly humorous, but at the same time struck a touch too close for me. All I could think of was when my own son was born. 'Course, I did have the cesarean, neither my son or I are evil (at least not technically or intentionally), and my husband has never (nor will he) raised a hand to me in violence. Still it kind of gave me the shivers.

As for my car metaphors, I am trying (unsuccessfully) to sell my old car. I guess it is always at the back of my mind or something. The latest one was intended to be a tie-in to the previous one about watching a car crash on the freeway. =]
Comments from author:
Well you certainly come across as very tender hearted and not at all evil to me. I am aware Caesareans are a feminist political minefield. But good thing you and your child are alive and well!

I've never had my husband hit me either, he likes having both testicles and his car windows unsmashed. I'm not allowed to hit him. I knew a woman who kicked and punched her husband often, but that was okay in their marriage apparently because she was a female.

Speaking of cars, I liked the freeway smilies you were using. It could be a new thing. Reviewers with a theme.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Lilah" from CPTSkip
Review:
Wow! This is an odd one, even for your peculiar series. It had nice bits of black humor, but I just don't like reading about a guy beating on a woman, even when she is Evil. But I liked bits a lot. Your Harmony was nifty and I liked the throwaway line about Lilah already sacrificing her firstborn. All in all, I have very mixed feelings about this episode. But I still look forward to more of your inventive series.

PS When I reread my comments, I realized they may sound too negative. This was not my desire. I realize when a bard is pushing the limits, which your series does brilliantly, sometimes for some people the author overreaches themselves. This doesn't mean I dislike your story. It just made me uncomfortable. But this is just me and as I said above, I look forward to more of your work with a great deal of ancipation.
Comments from author:
No not negative at all. Hey all reviews are great! If it's any consolation to you. Wesley has never hit her before this, he won't again he was just paranoid about her sacrifcing their child.

There is precedent in this from the Billy episode. Lilah shoots and kills anyone who hits her. Go girl! Wesley told Fred he would never hit a woman normally. I do feel however Wesley is a misogynist deep down. He is frightened of women I think.

I think in Lilah and Wes first encounter he had his hands around her neck in a nightclub before they went off and had a one night stand if I remember rightly. She wasn't scared of him.

Also in an original 3rd series angel episode script there was a line about Lilah sacrificing her baby to Hell, but they cut it for length.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Mayor" from Cutiepie
Review:
And the out-of-control semi careens over the Volkswagen Beetle, side-swipes the Ford Focus, uses the Audi as a take-off ramp, and finally crushes the Geo Metro flat! Sparks fly everywhere and the crowd goes wild!

I don't really get why she was drinking blood (yeck! I almost thought 'vampire' except for the pregnancy thing), but this was as bizarre and twisted as any of the preceding. Even though you didn't highlight it, the Father-Daughter aspect of the relationship from the show did stick with me and make this additionally squicky. =]
Comments from author:
If you remember season one angel. when Cordelia was pregnant with mutiple demon offspring, she stole angels blood out of the fridge to drink.

I mentioned the fact Faith went out into the sun with her toddler, to allay people's impressions she was a vampire. So i'm glad your realised she wasn't.

I wanted to highlight the father and daughter angle oh I did so badly. But this story is only F13.

Btw very impressive first review paragraph. A lot of your metaphors have been car based lately. Thinking of purchasing a new family vehicle perhaps?
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jenny, Doyle, Veruca, Darla" from JennyLal
Review:
Twisted but very funny! Angelus begging to be staked was class. You do know that the Irish (the actual real Irish living in Ireland) are extremely hard working and we have one of the highest standards of living in the world. So you know we can't all be alcoholics!
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Aw, I didn't mean to upset you. No I only review - I don't write. Anything I try tends to be a bit mary sueish and I get stuck in a hating Xander spiral! Anyway I've never met a horrible New Zealander so I couldn't write a bashing story thing. And ye gave us the Haka. Great nation (even if your players did spear tackle O'Driscoll-bastards). I don't think it's dole bludger but I can't for the life of me think of the term used.
Comments from author:
Oh god I am so sorry! I felt appalling typing the word Mick. It is done for humor purposes. I realise that Ireland has had a complete economic turn around in the past twenty years.

Please I challenge you to write a story bashing New Zealanders. It is deserved. BtW do you northern hemispheres use the term 'dole bludgers' or was I being too antipodean again?
Review By [JennyLal] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Mayor" from CPTSkip
Review:
Now this update was just plane disturbing. And very imaginative, in a Cuthulu Knows Best kind of way. But also funny, in a bizarro Leave It To Beaver kind of way. I look forward to more of your insanity, I mean cleverness. Lol!
Comments from author:
'Cuthlu know best' that would have made a great title. Thank you for your review.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Mayor" from (Past Donor)Methos
Review:
wonderfully done, sick, evil and twisted. i love it ;)
the short Angel/us/Darla was a stroke of genius, fantastic work.
Can't wait for more.

M
Comments from author:
I could have made it more sick by playing on the vaguely incestous nature of Faith and the Mayors previous father daughter relationship. I would have loved to have written a sick sex scene between them. But I have set myself the target of making these stories F13.

thank you for your review.
Review By [(Past Donor)Methos] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Mayor" from MarcusRowland
Review:
Now that one is just weird - love it!
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jenny, Doyle, Veruca, Darla" from Cutiepie
Review:
Twisted. You are twisted. And clever. Imaginative. Not to mention very entertaining. Thanks for posting, and I'll be watching for more whether I want to or not(much like seeing a multiple car accident on the freeway, I suppose)!
Comments from author:
Why thank you for your kind vote of confidence. I try. But god it is so enjoyable to think of how peoples marriages could go wrong. Of course some couples will suffer more than others.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jenny, Doyle, Veruca, Darla" from CPTSkip
Review:
Lol! You are an evil, evil bard. But I have to admit, you made me laugh. But where is Tara and Willow and how have their lives gone into the crapper? There must be more angst! Please? Lol!
Comments from author:
Oh totally, there were many more deaths remember? Many more unhappy marriages or happy but sick marriages that could have resulted.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [2 Jan 07] • Not Rated
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