Great update! LOVE the way you're writing Giles' character with his inner turmoil. Beautiful descriptions. :)
Comments from author:
Blush! Thanks. To be honest Giles wasn't supposed to be in the story other than the phone call part. It took me totally by surprised when he said he was hopping a plane to Cleveland!
I'm glad that you think I'm doing a good with him.
Thanks for the review!
Edited to Add: PS: If you think I start getting off track Giles then let me know.
Thanks again
Review By [spk] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Very nice and a good set up. If the Scoobies had been entirely honest (including telling them the visions) they could have already resolved that it really likely is a vision of the SGC. How will the chips fall from here. I can't wait to see what comes next.
Comments from author:
If the Scoobs were honest... Would they be the scoobs?
Thanks for your comments and review!
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
It's good to finally see an update. It's intriguing that Daniel has memories of love with Buffy. I like the whole conversation between the SGC and them. I really can't wait for another update!
Comments from author:
HEY,
Thanks for the reviews! I think I'm finally feeling well enough to start writing more than once a year--I hope. I've started on the next chapter already.
Again thanks for all your reviews you would not believe how much they help keep things moving along.
Review By [KnightOwl] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
I wanted to apologize for my last reviews quibble. I reread the story from the beginning and, you're right, you did have that they had met, etc and in this last chapter you did write that they had been specifically briefed, so I don't think you have to change anything. I was a little distracted when I originally read the chapter and that's my fault, certainly not your writing so please don't change a thing! I'm enjoying how you paint the scenes, and your dialog, mental and spoken feels very true to character. Again, thanks for the chapter!
Comments from author:
I wanted to thank you for your thoughts and ideas for this story. I plan to take the story down and rewrite it once I've finished it. I felt that your first comments about Jack and Buffy were right on the mark and its something I put in my personal notes to address in the rewrite.
As I say, I'm beginning to feel physically better so I hope I can actually update this story more than once a year!
I remember this story and I'm glad you've been able to update it. Sorry to hear you've been sick for this long, I hope it's turning around for you.
I hope you don't mind me voicing one thing I'm having a little trouble accepting. I don't think Jack would have this high an opinion of Buffy this soon. I can seem him having respect for her and wanting to help her but not necessarily thinking that she's a true hero, etc. as I think that the government records would only include just a small amount of her accomplishments and experiences. After he's actually knows more about her, seen her in action or heard more about her exploits, then I could accept it more easily.
Other than that minor quibble, I love your characterizations. I love Buffy and I'm sorry to see her going through all this but it's nice to see the others concern for her and the group dynamics here. I'm also enjoying seeing how the other slayers relate to her. Love the scene in the kitchen with Giles finding out the true extent of Buffy's problem when she loses it and tries to attack him. I can definitely see Buffy trying to spare everyone and leaving the house like that to go out fighting.
Hope you can continue the story as I'm enjoying it quite a bit and would love to see the next chapter and the Stargate characters entering the story more fully.
Again, hope you're feeling better!
Comments from author:
Hey,
Thank you so much for your in-depth feedback. I enjoy it when people (nicely) point out the flaws in my stories. This story has many problems and once I start feeling better I plan to take it down and address the issues I have with it. In the mean-time I needed to post it because I wanted to emotional boost getting the reviews gives me.
All that aside, in chapter two or three Giles mentions that they (Giles and Xander) had briefed the U.N. and by default Home World Security. Jack O'Neill was at the briefing and learned about Buffy there. Since I didn't make that clear enough I will add it to the list of things I need to fix.
If you find anything else you want to mention about the story please feel free to drop me an email or P.M.
More, more, more, please. Hasn't *any* one considered that this is a Slayer Dream? It's not mentioned in the story anywhere I noticed whether they have or not, and it's a plot point you need to consider covering as a yes/no since it leaves you a plot hole since it was very firmly established in canon that she gets the prophetic Slayer dreams. If they haven't considered that it's possibly a Slayer dream, then they are drugging and electro-shocking her when the dream is *not* going to stop until steps are taken to deal with the dream's content. Other than that, nicely done so far, and I'm eagerly looking forward to the upcoming chapters. I hope your schedule and muse will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm
Comments from author:
Yes, Slayer dream was the first thing they thought about however Buffy thinks that its in a military bunker complex thus they assume its from the Initiative. Since I picked up the story a week into the "dreams" I thought I could get away without spelling things out that the scoobs had already thought of it and discounted it. I'll have Giles say something in the next chapter to cover the bases.
Real life has been a bear and with my L.D.s its hard to write on just one story. I normally end up writing a few pages on different stories each week and that's why they are updated all at once.