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Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from nicjphill
Review:
Loved it. Really intersting that the potion seems to dim the connection they have with each other. It kind of seems like Xander, Dawn and Willow are doing something to Buffy and the slayers to break their connection. Really looking forward to the next update!
Review By [nicjphill] • Date [13 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from Marcel
Review:
This is a pretty interesting story. I wouldn't worry about too much talking - talking is good, this way we get to see how the characters interact.

Tracking this one :)
Review By [Marcel] • Date [13 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from (Current Donor)mmooch
Review:
Oh, so loving this story! It's interesting how you are making Giles realize - sort of - how the pressures of running the Council is able to strip him of the closeness to the Slayers. Maybe the Old Council wasn't evil, just out of touch. Can't wait to see what you have next. Especially if it has something to do with Buffy and Daniel!!!
Review By [(Current Donor)mmooch] • Date [13 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from nightshadowlife
Review:
Amazing chapter! I can't wait to find out whats going on with Buffy and if the SGC can help her! Plus what is the whole connection to both Buffy and Daniel?
Review By [nightshadowlife] • Date [8 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from SassyFrass
Review:
I was really glad to see an update! And I love Buffy/Daniel pairings, so I'm really excited that it's starting so soon in the story.
I love protective!Giles.
Looking forward to more soon.
Comments from author:
Hey! Thanks for your review! Yes, I love the pairing, too. I also love Buffy/Jack despite the age thing.

Again thanks for your comments, you can't believe how much it helps!
Review By [SassyFrass] • Date [8 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from FireWolfe
Review:
Great job and it does a wonderful job of showing the real concerns everyone is having. More soon please.

Lisa
Comments from author:
Yep, no one knows if they trust each other or not.

Thanks for the review!
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Dootzbugg
Review:
Very interesting so far. I look forward to reading more.
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Review By [Dootzbugg] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from purrfus
Review:
Intense. Nice that even with the previous meetings and explanations that everybody isn't best friends in 2000 words or less.
Comments from author:
Well is was actually closer to 2500 words but yeah, not best friends.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from nicjphill
Review:
I hope they can help Buffy. Intriguing that Daniel remembers Buffy. Looking forward to the next update!
Review By [nicjphill] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from spk
Review:
Great update! LOVE the way you're writing Giles' character with his inner turmoil. Beautiful descriptions. :)
Comments from author:
Blush! Thanks. To be honest Giles wasn't supposed to be in the story other than the phone call part. It took me totally by surprised when he said he was hopping a plane to Cleveland!

I'm glad that you think I'm doing a good with him.

Thanks for the review!

Edited to Add: PS: If you think I start getting off track Giles then let me know.

Thanks again
Review By [spk] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from dreameralways
Review:
Very nice and a good set up. If the Scoobies had been entirely honest (including telling them the visions) they could have already resolved that it really likely is a vision of the SGC. How will the chips fall from here. I can't wait to see what comes next.
Comments from author:
If the Scoobs were honest... Would they be the scoobs?

Thanks for your comments and review!
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from KnightOwl
Review:
It's good to finally see an update. It's intriguing that Daniel has memories of love with Buffy. I like the whole conversation between the SGC and them. I really can't wait for another update!
Comments from author:
HEY,

Thanks for the reviews! I think I'm finally feeling well enough to start writing more than once a year--I hope. I've started on the next chapter already.

Again thanks for all your reviews you would not believe how much they help keep things moving along.
Review By [KnightOwl] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Newford
Review:
I wanted to apologize for my last reviews quibble. I reread the story from the beginning and, you're right, you did have that they had met, etc and in this last chapter you did write that they had been specifically briefed, so I don't think you have to change anything. I was a little distracted when I originally read the chapter and that's my fault, certainly not your writing so please don't change a thing!
I'm enjoying how you paint the scenes, and your dialog, mental and spoken feels very true to character.
Again, thanks for the chapter!
Comments from author:
I wanted to thank you for your thoughts and ideas for this story. I plan to take the story down and rewrite it once I've finished it. I felt that your first comments about Jack and Buffy were right on the mark and its something I put in my personal notes to address in the rewrite.

As I say, I'm beginning to feel physically better so I hope I can actually update this story more than once a year!

Again, thanks for your comments.
Review By [Newford] • Date [6 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Newford
Review:
I remember this story and I'm glad you've been able to update it.
Sorry to hear you've been sick for this long, I hope it's turning around for you.

I hope you don't mind me voicing one thing I'm having a little trouble accepting. I don't think Jack would have this high an opinion of Buffy this soon. I can seem him having respect for her and wanting to help her but not necessarily thinking that she's a true hero, etc. as I think that the government records would only include just a small amount of her accomplishments and experiences. After he's actually knows more about her, seen her in action or heard more about her exploits, then I could accept it more easily.

Other than that minor quibble, I love your characterizations. I love Buffy and I'm sorry to see her going through all this but it's nice to see the others concern for her and the group dynamics here. I'm also enjoying seeing how the other slayers relate to her. Love the scene in the kitchen with Giles finding out the true extent of Buffy's problem when she loses it and tries to attack him. I can definitely see Buffy trying to spare everyone and leaving the house like that to go out fighting.

Hope you can continue the story as I'm enjoying it quite a bit and would love to see the next chapter and the Stargate characters entering the story more fully.

Again, hope you're feeling better!
Comments from author:
Hey,

Thank you so much for your in-depth feedback. I enjoy it when people (nicely) point out the flaws in my stories. This story has many problems and once I start feeling better I plan to take it down and address the issues I have with it. In the mean-time I needed to post it because I wanted to emotional boost getting the reviews gives me.

All that aside, in chapter two or three Giles mentions that they (Giles and Xander) had briefed the U.N. and by default Home World Security. Jack O'Neill was at the briefing and learned about Buffy there. Since I didn't make that clear enough I will add it to the list of things I need to fix.

If you find anything else you want to mention about the story please feel free to drop me an email or P.M.
Review By [Newford] • Date [5 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Past Donor)Fritolays
Review:
Awesome update! I can't wait to see how the SGC plans on helping Buffy. Keep up the great work :)
Review By [(Past Donor)Fritolays] • Date [3 Dec 08] • Not Rated
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