Such a tiny little tidbit left to tantalize readers... in other words - that was one hell of a teaser! I hope you have a heck of a lot more written out, or at the very least planned with the way you had so much details in the beginning to leave us readers left hanging. :)
keep penning, Marns ~pobody's Nerfect
Review By [Bumpkin] • Date [27 Feb 07] • Not Rated
I love the concept! I hope the rest of the story is in third person, though. Daniel's POV is hard to pull off, and while I can't put my finger on what about this didn't strike me quite as Daniel (because there were times when it was in character), but something about the voice wouldn't work for me as more than a prologue.
Comments from author:
It's only the journal part so far thats in first person, anything that I put in first will be clearly labled. Thanks for saying that I got the Daniel part right though. I'm finding it quite hard to write as an american and not as an englishwoman.
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [27 Feb 07] • Not Rated
this sounds good to me, are you going to get Xander out of Sunny-D because I for one think it is about time when someone rescues Xander they get him out of Sunny-D as well. PLease update soon!
Review By [AonGealach] • Date [27 Feb 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
