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Review of chapter "The Balance" from arkeus
Review:
hum...interesting, though the fight like a slayer bit is a bit weird, given that a slayer is like much, much stronger than an human. Oh, and harry shouldn't have been able to fight hand to hand against two vampires, as strong as he is :/
apart from that, it has gotten better!
Comments from author:
He's not as strong as a slayer. The meaing is that slayers use a mix of various forms of martial arts thats unique to them. I think all martial arts long ago when they were used constantly in combat were far deadlier than modern forms. Sure most black belts can kill, but in the past all warriors were trained to kill. The slayers fight to win, aka kill. Harry wanted Illyria to train him this way. Since Harry couldnt really hurt her, although he gets hurt alot.
As for the vamps, all the scoobies have fought and killed vamps. Even Cordelia at graduation. Harry didnt want to reveal his magic to her so he fought the ones at the door it self hand to hand. Harry was been training for awhile, so he is quite good.
There is another point, but it will be explained in a few chapters.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [20 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Balance" from Valkyrie
Review:
I don't like this not interfering with the balance thing. It's irksome, and smacks of ulterior motive.

If their side can win with his help, or get a leg up anyway, what reason do they have to refuse him? If evil cheating is the norm anyway, what would it change?

The question to ask is, what do the PTB gain by the continuation of "balance?"
Comments from author:
I have always wondered why the good guys never got a break. During both series, BTVS and Angel, neither had much in ways of help. They each had a few good friends to help, but nothing like the bad guys had. Heck, Wolfram and Hart is multi dimensional. This is my way of countering that.
Will the reason for the 'balance' be revealed? You'll have to wait and see.
Review By [Valkyrie] • Date [19 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Balance" from purrfus
Review:
Very interesting so far.

Thanks for skipping so much of the HP stuff. For some reason the Scoobies and Halloween fics, etc don't bother me, but revisiting HP with minor (and some times even major) changes gets old fast. Really how many different ways can you slice and dice old Voldy?

The people and the plotting are what make stories fun, and I can't wait to see what happens next in this one.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it. I thought the same thing. Although I have seen a couple of those fics that had some imaginitive ways to kill Voldemort.
I hope you like the rest of the story.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [19 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Last Task" from arkeus
Review:
hum...quite awkward in places, in the sense that it sounds a bit surreal and perfect, and harry, for all his talk, really didn't learn how to duel :/
Comments from author:
guess I could have fleshed out the fight a bit, but Harry alone vs. several death eaters and holding his own. I thought it would be implied that he out dueled them till help arrived. my bad. hope you like the rest of the story.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [19 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Last Task" from mikek
Review:
Liked the idea of the camera for the third task.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I mean they had Ludo as commentator for the first two, now this nothing. I know the stands are tall, but could they really see what the champions were doing in that far away.
Review By [mikek] • Date [18 Apr 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Last Task" from (Past Donor)JoeHundredaire
Review:
The entire story is far too fast and way too underdeveloped.

That, and you keep misspelling Fleur.
Comments from author:
There are a million stories about Harry going back to change time. Too flesh out the first part would make this just another one of those. In truth, the story is just beginning. I guess I could have just let Illryia take Harry straight to before the last task, grab the horcruxes and finish things.
Regardless, I hope you like the rest if you continue to follow it. Sorry about the name, I truly never noticed it. Odd that. Its been proven that as long as the first and last letters of a word are correct, the rest can be jumbled and the brain can still read it. Huh.
Review By [(Past Donor)JoeHundredaire] • Date [18 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The First Task" from Aesop
Review:
I'm enjoying the story. It's well written and an interesting premise. I would like to point out one problem, though. Angel season 5 takes place after Buffy season 7. In order to prevent the Slayers being called, Illyria and Harry would have to go back to a point before she was released from the Deeper Well. I doubt she would risk changing that, even for Wesley. It's just not in her nature.
Comments from author:
That will be explained later. Not sure exactly which chapter it will be though. It depends on the length of some scenes I am writing. If they get too big, I split the chappy. But it will come out soon. Glad you like it.
Review By [Aesop] • Date [14 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some things old, some new" from (Past Donor)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Uh, you do realize the timeline makes this a 13-year old Luna wanting a 14-year old Harry to impregnate her, right? That's kinda creepy, old minds aside. Sex is one thing, wanting to be knocked up when you're barely into your teens is something else entirely.
Comments from author:
For my fic, Luna is like Hermione, almost a year older than the rest of her year mates. Shes only a few months younger than Harry in this, just not old enough to be in his year. Hermione is almost a year older than Harry with her birthday just after school starts.
Other things will come about later in the story to help explain things. Hope you still find it enjoyable.
Review By [(Past Donor)JoeHundredaire] • Date [11 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some things old, some new" from arkeus
Review:
hum...i am not sure, but isn't the conception happening like twelve hours after sex?
Great work.
Comments from author:
True, but it's magic isnt it. I mean, if science can make a pill that works the day after sex, whether or not your pregnant, shouldn't magic be able to as well. And so shouldnt magic be able to tell if the egg was fertilizied or not pretty darn quickly.
My story will mainly go with the boundaries of magic being power and imagination. The books all show them doin some amazing things, but still, Harry wears glasses. I think eventually enough muggleborn will become nurses and doctors and realize, they can fix that using a method similar to lasik, just using magic. Of course, some magics arent compatible, like things caused by dark magic might not be able to be healed, explaining Mad Eye and all his missing parts. Hope you enjoy the story.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [11 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Some things old, some new" from MistofRainbows
Review:
It's sort of an interesting story. The reactions of the girls seems a bit overstated. Mostly I just wanted to puke when Luna called Ginny Ginerva. That's not her name. NEVER in the book does ANYONE call her that. Sorry, but it's more than a little annoying. I can see maybe Gin or something as a shortened pet name. But the nicknames in my opinions distract from the story.
Comments from author:
Sorry you didnt like that, but according to several sites her name really is Ginerva Molly Weasley. Luna is different in my story, she can literally hear and see what others think, whether they are day dreaming or doing homework, etc. Its my way of explaining her personality. She mostly gets confused by the voices in her head kinda thing. Most times she calls everyone by thier given names, like as ways calling Ron Ronald. So I thought that she should do it with everyone, not just Ron. I hope this doesn't keep you away from the story, but to each his own. Theres alot more about to happen, some including Luna, but I wanted to get this chapter up quickly. The rest of this chapter will be up soon, not sure exactly when though. Depends on my friends who beta for me.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [11 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dazed and Confused" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
Love it!

Wispr
Comments from author:
thanks. Glad you like it. I will probably update about once a week depending on work and holidays.
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [7 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One - Do you really want this?" from AmethystSiri
Review:
What a great story, I can't wait for the next chapter :) please update again soon :)
Comments from author:
thx, I should have the next chappy up soon
Review By [AmethystSiri] • Date [6 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One - Do you really want this?" from oberon
Review:
hmmm... I see many errors with your characterization of Illyria and not all of it could be explained by social interaction.

First of all, Illyria sees herself still as a God-king and her speech should reflect her arrogance. No matter how much socilization, this would not change especially when she has possession of the Key which makes her superior to most beings. Why should she be humble when it is not in her nature nor an adaption to suit her current state? Basically, she has no reason to change her superior attitude.

Secondly, as God-king, Illyria would not ASK for help. She will demand obedience especially from a no body like Harry Potter. There will be no deals, Harry will do what she tells him and she will reward him OR Harry will feel her displeasure.

This seems to me like a another "Harry goes back in time to fix stuff" story only with Illyria as the plot device which enables the time travel.
Comments from author:
true, she is different, but theres a reason for it, and a twist coming later that most will not like. One thing I will say is that she lied to Harry about him being the one. She has killed every 'champion' that she has tried this with so far, and there are alot of them. Some actually made the transition to thier younger self, but either died soon after, or couldn't save Wesley.
I hope that the later chapters will satisfy your lust for the bad-ass Illyria we all know.
Review By [oberon] • Date [5 Apr 07] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One - Do you really want this?" from Anya
Review:
This is a really good beginning. Illyria is still Illyria, but you can see that she spend some time in the modern world. Is there a chance for the soul of Fred to survive? And what of the rest of AI, were they alive after NFA?
Comments from author:
Well, to satisfy your curiosity, only Conner survived, and the PTB's intervened to save him, as thier new chosen champion. As for Freds soul, that will be discussed in later chapters.
Review By [Anya] • Date [4 Apr 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One - Do you really want this?" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
Very interesting start... can't wait to see where you go with it!

Wispr
Comments from author:
Thanks, glad u like it.
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [4 Apr 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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