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Review of chapter "Not All There" from bradsan
Darn I was hoping that there would be a chapter where Hank met Buffy and showed her how proud he is and still loved his daughters. I also would have loved to read the meeting between Jack and Hank. Hank seeing Joyce in love again and feeling some regret about leaving his Joyce.

A well good story and enjoyed it very much.
Comments from author:
Sorry to disappoint, but I doubt this series will have any more additions. I think Hank still loves his children regardless, but feeling regret towards Joyce feels wrong. Bittersweet at seeing someone else put that smile on Joyce's face perhaps, but regret feels a bit too much like punishment and Hank gets that enough in fandom. ;)

Thank you for reading and I'm glad you liked it.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [19 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not All There" from BrownFinderth
Not all the stories I've read do I feel need to be left as they are, finished or not. Yet, this completed story begs to be continued and I sure do wish that Ava would do that. (This is such a well written story!!)
Comments from author:
Actually I think this set of stories is a completed. Sorry to disappoint, but there will be no coninuation.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [17 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not All There" from Anglachel
You made me cry:

“Dawn!” The shout of her name stopped the teenager and she turned innocent eyes on her mother who simply arched a brow. “Behave.”

“But I live to torment you.” The impish smirk and flash of mischief stilled Joyce’s busy hands and she watched Dawn turn, leave her.

The knife slid from suddenly nub fingers and her hands struck the cutting board with a dull thud and she looked down, stomach knotting as Dawn’s words rolled through her head. Dragged free a memory of last Christmas, of when their family was whole and she hadn’t left her eldest in California, left her in the cold ground. Parents shouldn’t to survive their child, that wasn’t supposed to be how the world worked."

This is just the most chillingly beautiful description of a mother´s grief. With just a short paragraph you manage to convey, how grief overwhelms you at the most unexpected moments, how the force of it is just irresistible, and how the simplest words like: "I live to torment you" can take on a multiplicity of meanings and realities to a grieving mother. You convey how Joyce is both forced to confront a past reality with Buffy in her life, and at the same time she is forced, yet again, to confront a future without Buffy with all the sense of of loss that entails.

Just a bit of clumsy musings and ramblings on my part. Really, I just wanted to convey my thanks for a beautiful and riveting story.

Comments from author:
Sorry for the tears, but yay for getting an emotional reaction. *hands tissues*

Thank you. There are a lot of things I wished Whedon hadn't done and off'ing Joyce was one of them. She was the most humanizing aspect of the series and I adored her for it. I also think Joyce's reaction to Buffy's death would have been the most poignant and intense.

And you weren't clumsy with your thoughts. I think you did a rather fine job of describing what you liked and why and it's muchly appreciated. Thank you for taking the time to review.
Review By [Anglachel] • Date [4 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not All There" from spring
I love this fic. I do have to say that I am a bit surprised that Giles wasn't upset about what Willow did, nor did it seem Spike was either and both one would think would know that the kind of power to return someone from the dead is very very dangerous. Again I love this fic.
Comments from author:
Thank you! Giles is upset, but his anger with Willow shouldn't be thrown at Joyce, Dawn and definitely not Buffy. He slipped up a bit when he mentions he didn't condone Willow's actions and Joyce reacts as if he'd hit her. Joyce isn't well versed in the ways of magics and just knows that her daughter is back, broken, but back and for the moment that's enough.

Spike was pissed, but Giles' steered the conversation toward what he wanted to know about Spike's actions rather then allowing himself to be reprimanded for Willow's. I'm more about the underlining tones so perhaps I should have tried harder at expressing their emotions and reactions, then again this is a Joyce'centric piece and I was more concerned with hers then other characters. I'll try harder next time to convey the others more accurately. Thank you for taking the time to review.
Review By [spring] • Date [20 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not All There" from MercyJones
Wonderful! I never thought to look at a Joyce-centered sg-1 fic. Woowee, boy, did you just change my mind. I like how you still have Buffy being all distant too. Also, nice touch on having Buffy be there for Joyce's before-canon-death moment. Only thing, not sure I buy the whole telling Hank touch, but otherwise no complaints. This is one happy girl. :)

10/10, rec, fav, and tracking I liked it soooo much.
Comments from author:
Thank you! Joyce tends to get the short end of the stick in a lot of stories and I wanted to buck the trend of my usual work and focus on another BtVS character. (I tend to write Buffy'centric) Buffy being there for Joyce was my simple way of telling how she lived without doing a flashback. I'm not so great with those.

Ah, Hank. You'll have to remember that with Joyce still alive he never had the chance to miss her funeral, which was his biggest black mark in my book, and in season three Joyce stood up for Hank when he missed Buffy's birthday and they had a good parent moment in season 2. I can see Joyce giving Hank the chance to actually *know* his daughter, even if it was too late.

Glad you enjoyed it and thank you for the rec!
Review By [MercyJones] • Date [6 Dec 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not All There" from Stranger
*Shrieks* Ish brilliant! I loves! Seriously though, I really love the visceral feel of it, the very quiet intensity. There's a warm realism to it that makes me think, "Yeah, this is how it would happen."
Comments from author:
LOL Thank you! "Yeah, this is how it would happen," is quite a compliment. *is proud*
Review By [Stranger] • Date [30 Jul 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not All There" from Cristina
ohh wow...I don't really know what else to say...besides that you have captured some very powerful emotions here.
Review By [Cristina] • Date [31 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not All There" from desartartt
sequel? or continuation?
Comments from author:
Maybe? Probably?
Review By [desartartt] • Date [25 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not All There" from Tripper
This story absolutely captivates me. Dealing with Buffy's death in a way that the show could not, seeing Joyce's reaction and how she deals with it. The little words and observations here and there that are just so perfect. I can't describe them all but this truely is a wonder piece of fanfiction. Thank you for sharing.
Review By [Tripper] • Date [24 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not All There" from RevDorothyL
Excellent cover story, and somehow I'm not surprised that the U.S. Government is cooperating with it (though the Watchers' Council lending a hand is a little surprising, since they've seemed more like the "kill the resurrected troublemaking Slayer, and problem solved!" kind of folks, in their earlier appearances).

Love the Joyce/Jack vibe, and the Jack/Daniel conversation in the previous chapter. All very good character stuff (though I can't help hoping you're not quite done with this story yet).
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [24 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Only Sky Above Us" from (Moderator)Saturn
Great story so far. As usual all the little details you include really make it seem work. I don't think I've ever read a fic where people have a conversation while making salad. :) It just makes things seem that much more real. The autopsy scars are a nice touch too. I can't wait to find out how SG-1 and Buffy will interact. Most of the time it goes one of two ways:

A) "You seem trustworthy young lady. Would you care to join our band of space traveling heroes?"


B) "You're the military so I can't trust you ever and we might as well start fighting each other tooth and nail using all our resources and powers regardless of what any real enemies might be doing."

I feel confident in your ability to come up with a good C) option.
Comments from author:
You mean I can't use 'the band of merry space travelers' as Daniel or Jack's come hither intro to the SGC? Damn, there go my plans for chapter 4.

As for the details, I like stories that paint a picture rather than tell you what's going on and I try to do the same. Which doesn't always work but all I can do is keep writing and hope that I get better with practice and patience. *hugs* And thank you for noticing the details!
Review By [(Moderator)Saturn] • Date [24 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not All There" from Lisette
So is this story done-done, or done as in done until you next get inspiration and add to the tale? Because Chapter 2 concluded with 'The End' and thus I'm trying not to get too dismayed by this chapter's 'The End.'

Regardless - beautiful job with this chapter. Again, your descriptions are lovely to read, but it's the characterizations that I truly love. Yes, you're kind of screwing up my Buffy/Jack fantasy by making the Joyce/Jack pairing work so well, but you do everything else so well that I can forgive you for coloring my perceptions a bit!

You introduced Spike to the story, and while I would have enjoyed seeing the first meeting of Buffy and Spike, or at least her thoughts on his presence there, I loved seeing Giles threaten Spike. That always makes for a fun time in my book! And the autopsy scars... wow, that's a thought that I've never had for Buffy post-ressurection. Fascinating thought - and one that would go to even greater lengths to explain why Buffy had such a horrible time getting over her death. Kind of hard to forget and move on with life when the scars from your autopsy are always staring you in the face. Scars have a way of doing that - perpetually reminding you of things that you'd rather forget. I have a few of my own that are like that.

As always, scary good writing. Thank you for sharing!
Review By [Lisette] • Date [24 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not All There" from (Past Donor)exiled
Wonderful story! I love how you are using Joyce's point of view and mostly her observations of Buffy's mental health. The scar was a nice touch and a good detail that later set-up the emotional confrontation with Jack. Joyce had the prefect cover story for Buffy's return. Jack had to accept it. Just mundane enough.... But why do I think that Jack won't leave it right there?

Just a little tiny nit-pick, the opening paragraph of the last part was kind of confusing. You mention Buffy and Dawn then only use pronouns. If you could mention Joyce, by name, sitting the truck it would make it more clear.

Oh and I almost forgot, the way Joyce was so empathetic towards Jack and understanding that it wasn't fair for Buffy to return from the dead and not his son.

Thank you for sharing this story!
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [24 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not All There" from AllenPitt
hm..I have this vision of Jack overhearing " Osiris" and 'resurrection' and jumping to the conclusion that a Goa'uld sarcophagus was used....also the council re-doing all the records will show up, as a very high level gov? intervention. Depends on how curious Jack & company are with all this, of course---
* Kind of ironic that everybody's focused on Buffy, when the real problem is Willow and her descent into dark magic. But, it's always the quiet ones....
Poor Spike---yet another top secret gov. agency for him to run into...
* Next up, (as in another fanfic ) have the gov. find all the bodies from the Knights of B (killed by glory in the desert) each with a tattoo on the forehead.... possible Foothold situation, obviously...
Comments from author:
* Why would anyone focus on Willow at this point? I mean Buffy's been with her mother for less than a week and they are in Colorado Springs while Willow is in Sunnydale. How would they even notice Willow's addiction (which really isn't showing at this point in the season)? Sorry but Willow will be Giles and Faith's problem and I'm hoping (if the muse agrees) that with Giles there he'll notice the downward spiral before it's too late and do you really think Faith would put up with Warren, Andrew and Jonathan like Buffy did?

* The Knights of Byzantium have been rotting and decomposing in the California sunshine so any trace of the symbols on their foreheads would be long gone at this point...and I'm not focusing on the action. This series is more about the relationships and how they are strengthened, dissolved and created.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [24 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not All There" from (Past Donor)polgara
*bounces in seat* Yay! A new part!!

K, you already know what I thought of the first two scenes cause we've talked about them. But I LOVE the next two parts.

Oh how I just love the way you write Joyce. The understanding mother who knows there is something wrong with her daughter but is unsure how to help. I like that they had told Hank about Buffy being the slayer, even if he is an asshead. You even managed to redeem him a little by him being proud of who his daughter turned out to be.

But I think the best part was when Joyce realized how hard it had to have been for Buffy to lie to those she loved for all of those years. To be able to connect with her daughter in a manner that she never had before and the realization to come crashing down on her was beautifully done. And then her realization shortly after that about her feelings toward Jack. I can't blame her for that, he is quite the catch ;)

I caught a couple of typos in those last two sections of the chapter, but fabulous as always.

Review By [(Past Donor)polgara] • Date [24 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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