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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from lucyferr
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Fifty one kidnapping attempts and only three had been successful. Without her Slayer abilities, Lois would have been constantly in danger, and Clark would have teased her about it unmercifully.
That assumed that he ever bothered to tell her about his abilities.
It was a humiliation she was happy to be spared. She liked being a more or less equal partner to both Clark Kent and Superman. Anything less she would have resented.

That makes a lot more sense than the usual Superman story

One of the few things Buffy’s crew had managed to do for her was to establish a legal defense fund. It was available to all Slayers, but Lois tended to use it more than most.
After all, vampires didn’t sue people, but crazy whack job kidnappers did.

good one!

If the number of websites with Clark’s head pasted onto the bodies of nude male models was any indication, the female population of the planet thought so too.

lol - bet the younger slayers are no exception - those who werent in the stadium anyway

It helped to talk to someone who didn’t judge. Between her counselor, and Clark, and occasional phone calls to Faith in Cleveland, Lois had come a long way toward finding peace with both what she was, and what she’d done.

cool - also cool that she's still buds with Faith

“Me and Robin are sort of splitsville.” Faith sighed. “It got kind of ugly.”
“I’ll get the ice cream,” Lois said.
...

glad Faith has a bud :-) one who won't automatically put Buffy first

Faith grinned. “It’s a wicked tight suit.”
“So he had her add the underwear for the sake of modesty.”
“He should have left it off. Then nobody would be looking at his face.” Faith smirked.
“That’s what his mother said, but Clark’s a little bit of a prude.”

lol - bit surprising tho - with his mother not being a prude lol

"I think it’s best that Slayer chicks have guys who can take a beating.”
Lois stared at Faith and was startled to see her blush.

wow - Faith can blush?!

“Have you checked the net?” Lois asked. “Belief in the supernatural is at an all time high.”
Clark was part of that. In a world here a man could fly and lift space shuttles into space, it was a little easier to believe that others might have strange abilities. It was only a small leap from that to being open to the possibility of the supernatural.
It was all part of Lois’s long term plan. The truth about the supernatural wasn’t going to remain a secret forever. When it came out, she was going to be on the front lines, earning that Pulitzer.

biggest plan for a Pully I ever saw

The newest intern at the Daily Planet was a witch. She’d been hired by Buffy’s group to maintain the protections Willow had placed on Clark and to keep tabs on him to make sure nothing had gotten through them.
Clark had no idea that she was anything other than a love struck teenager. If he ever was controlled again, she was everyone’s secret ace in the hole.

smart

He’d treated her with kid gloves for the first couple of months of their relationship.
But as they’d both begun to heal, their true selves had begun to emerge. Lois had finally allowed him to see more of the ugliness in her soul, and despite her fear, he’d loved her anyway.

good

Loved the story - good romance fic
Comments from author:
Thanks for all the comments! I'm glad to see that people are still reading this, even if it was written a while back.
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Endgame" from lucyferr
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Well the whole one-drop-of-blood thing was a bit cliched, but - who cares? :-)

“You’re lucky to have him,” she said quietly. “Don’t let him go. You never know how long you have…” The pain in Buffy’s eyes was unmistakable.
Lois smiled up at Buffy and said, “I’m sorry for everything.”
She’d judged Buffy and the life she’d lived without having a clear idea of what it was like. She still couldn’t imagine what it would have been like to have been alone, to have known that in all the world there was no one else like you.

At least Buffy's not alone any more - she's got Faith - and Lois may have Clark - if the incorrect 'values' given by his parents doesnt bring him down. Their values worked very well for the world they live in, but he aint living in that world no mo.
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Firestorm" from lucyferr
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“You couldn’t have known this was going to happen.”
Buffy had known. In truth, deep down, Lois had known as well. Clark was too perfect to remain unsullied by this new, grimmer darker world they’d discovered.

well spotted, lois

“Is that what he told you?” Angelica grinned. Her face was monstrous, as was the look of triumph on it. “Didn’t you ever learn not to trust witnesses? They get it wrong half the time. I only promised not to shed a drop of your blood.”

ouchness - good villain, this Angelica
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Firestorm" from lucyferr
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“You couldn’t have known this was going to happen.”
Buffy had known. In truth, deep down, Lois had known as well. Clark was too perfect to remain unsullied by this new, grimmer darker world they’d discovered.

well spotted, lois

“Is that what he told you?” Angelica grinned. Her face was monstrous, as was the look of triumph on it. “Didn’t you ever learn not to trust witnesses? They get it wrong half the time. I only promised not to shed a drop of your blood.”

ouchness - good villain, this Angelica
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sacrifice" from lucyferr
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“What happened?” Lois asked in a low undertone. There was always the possibility that the witch was hiding somewhere nearby.
“Your boyfriend kicked our asses... Two seconds,” Buffy said, staring at the devastation around them. She looked as though she was in shock. “Twelve slayers and the most powerful witch in the western hemisphere and he beat us in two seconds.”

so that answers the question of Superman vs Slayers... probably a good thing for the Slayers - esp a bunch of new ones - to know they aint top of the food chain

“What did you do, stab him in the back?”
...“I gave it my best shot,” Buffy said. “As hard as I hit him, I should have cut him in half. He’s incredibly tough.”...
Buffy’s expression hardened. “I did what had to be done. “

Clark's with Buffy on this - the only thing harder than finding a friend you can trust with your life is finding a friend you can trust with your death

“Being a Slayer isn’t about flashy powers or kicky boots,” Buffy said softly. “It’s about sacrifice. Sometimes it’s a pretty crappy life.”
...“Sometimes, though, it’s worth it.” Buffy said as she watched Faith hugging the man on the bed. “And of course, there are always the flashy powers and the kicky boots.”

good scene

“It’ll give them the chance to be recognized for the heroes that they were.” Buffy glanced back at the bodies of the fallen girls and sighed. “That doesn’t happen very often in this line of work.”

the chance... they'll probably end up in cheap graves... unless Lois writes a story about them, maybe

There were dents on the front of the bus that hadn’t been there before, and it suddenly the reason the group used a one eyed driver was becoming more clear.

not to me it aint

Luckily, Lois wasn’t. She hadn’t lost that spark of humanity that let her look beyond the numbers o see the value of a single human life.

who says that's humanity? And not just selfishness? Of course, selfishness is a human trait, a very universal and well-respected one that's part of the whole self-preservation thing

She would be the one to free Clark from slavery.
Being under a compulsion wouldn’t matter if the people who controlled you were dead.

Ah, that's more like it.... though doesnt she realize that the Slayers would love to kill Angelica too?
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hunt" from lucyferr
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She’d resented these women for thrusting all this on her, but the truth was that if they hadn’t, she’d be dead somewhere in Africa, a forgotten footnote in the history of journalism.

yep

He looked pale, and his clothes were tattered and scorched. Nothing was left of his suit jacket, and there were burn marks on his pants and shirt.
“I’ve been flying fast,” he said. “Anything not tight against me gets scorched.”

give da man a cape

He didn’t really understand evil. For all that he’d traveled the world, there was part of him that had kept its innocence.

looks like it

This was the man she was going to spend the rest of her life with.

She better get real good to making flexible plans and cancelling at the last moment - so should he, for that matter. Love aint always enough. On the other hand, she'd never expected a rose garden, so maybe she can hack it.
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ride" from lucyferr
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“You can stay with us,” Buffy said. “What the hell. What’s one more slayer?”
“Thirty minutes less bathroom time every day,” Faith snickered.

lol

The relationship between Buffy and Faith confused Lois. At times they bickered like sisters. At other times, there seemed to be strained silences between them.

“I didn’t think there was much use they could make of me if I couldn’t kill anyone.”
Buffy scowled. “You said kill, not hurt, right?”
“Yes.”
“So they could have you beat up tough demons, then hold them down while they finished them off.”

he really is a smalltown boy

Finally he sighed. “That may be a problem. I can hear everything in maybe a thirty mile radius.”
...“Let me be the first to say, eww.” Buffy said.

well said

“I’d just let them buy sugar frosted bomb cereal and all that unhealthy sh…stuff.” Faith said with a glance toward Lois.
Lois was getting tired of being looked at like she was an old woman.

lol - surprised @ F tho
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guilt" from lucyferr
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There was something about an organization that found young girls and indoctrinated them into fighting for their lives that didn’t sit right with Lois.

agreed

“I was pretty much all alone. Buffy had her friends, her inner circle, and then there was me.”
A young girl, alone and vulnerable. A man must have shown up. They always did.
Faith chuckled bitterly. “I guess you hear it all the time…girl needs a daddy. A guy shows up and pretends to be nice.”
“He took advantage of you?”
“If it was just sex he’d wanted, he could have had it, and I’d have been done with him. No…he offered me something much harder to resist.”
“A family.”
“A screwed up, dysfunctional family where daddy wanted to turn into a giant snake and eat people, but yeah…”

hope B is hearing this

"What it all comes down to is, are you going to let your guilt make you stupid, or are you going to let it make you smarter?”

good one, v good one

“There’s some kind of compulsion on him. All they have to do is call for him, and he’ll come.”

ouch... not so good (dif kinda good)
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fall" from lucyferr
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“So you really did this to me?” Lois asked.
“It was that or the world was going to end.” Buffy said. “Sometimes there aren’t any good choices.”

what do you say to that? I mean, the rule of 'the needs of the many outweight the needs of the few' is certainly far more a universal than the 'kill nobody, not even people who're gonna kill again' thing, but it still sucks if you're among the few.

“And you left all those girls out there alone, not understanding what’s happening to them?”
“We’re getting the council back together. We’re going to start tracking everybody down, explain everything. We’ve just been a little off our game for the last few days.” Buffy’s voice was defensive.

Good question... Buffy totally needs a Cerebro

It wasn’t their age that shocked Lois. It was the level of responsibility.

excellent line

It was the same thing that allowed cheaters to think that their lover was more perfect than their spouse. It wasn’t until they woke up and discovered that their lover had the same flaws and the same morning breath that they realized that they’d made a mistake.

good line...

“We haven’t had enough time.” she said.
“Isn’t that the way of it?” Faith pulled out a cigarette and offered one to Lois.

Faith's a good person to talk to... on any topic other than Faith, at least
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Buffy" from lucyferr
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“We’ve been following the news…firebombing a local ranch….attacking a library right around the corner from this hospital, dragging people off the streets. You were involved every time.”
“I’ve been having a little vampire trouble,” Lois said weakly. “Girl had a crush on my partner before she was turned.”

cool how Buffy turns things around - all in all, the outsider RLish pov is great. Annoying, but great.

“I’m a journalist,” Lois said. “People have the right to know the truth.”
It all rang a little hollow. It was what she’d always believed, but she was already having reservations. Would creatures like Clem be considered to have basic human rights? Would Clark? Or would those rights be reserved for humans only, allowing entire species to be shut away into camps?

funny how journalists are heros in some stories, villains in others

“So because a few adults failed, that means the entire adult world is clueless? “ Lois shook her head. “That’s a juvenile way of thinking.”
“The world has been in the hands of a fifteen year old girl for the past six thousand years,” Buffy said. “And it’s still here.”
“So you had a lucky streak,” Lois said. She smiled slightly.
“That’s what worries me,” Buffy said

good scene

“Better for who?” Lois asked. “For the little girl who bear her stepfather to death in his trailer in Little Rock? How about the insane girl here in L.A. who killed three orderlies in the asylum? This thing isn’t a gift…it’s a curse...I just wanted to know why you did this to me!”

that's actually a good question - the last one at least - I certainly think very highly of the little patricidal girl - wonder what her stepfather was doing to her?

“You’re a hypocrite. You talk about wanting to find out about the supernatural, and you’ve been terrorizing the underworld for days with some sort of Hellgod.”

lol
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Allocution" from lucyferr
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“That’s the thing. I don’t know if I’m me anymore. If we were talking about the person I was two weeks ago, I’d agree with you. Now…”

Of course she isnt what she used to be. And why is that a bad thing? If nobody changed personalities with experience, nobody would grow up.

“I went through the Congo once,” Clark sighed. “I didn’t stay long. It hurt too much knowing that the villagers you helped one week were going to be herded off their land the next.”
Three million dead and with the death toll rising, the Congo was a place of horrors.

ouch yes

“It doesn’t make what either of us did right, but it makes it a little easier.”

that makes sense

“If I get into the same situation again, I won’t be making the same choice,” Clark said firmly.
Lois felt a chill. He’d as much as admitted that he’d surrender himself if he was captured again.
She’d have to make sure that didn’t happen.

that's just plain dumb

Lois had been surprised at how much information the name Slayer had made available. It had opened unexpected doors, both on the internet and in local libraries.
There was an entry on a website called “Demons, Demons, Demons.”

cool

If there was a sadness in his eyes, and a sense that he wasn’t happy about his own role in killing, it was something that Lois was sure would fade with time.
All she had to do was protect him while she looked for the truth behind what had happened to her, to the organization in England, and to the city of Sunnydale.

cool that someone thinks Superman needs protection - coz he does, from himself and the limited non-universal ethics his parents brought him up with
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Choice" from lucyferr
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“You killed something accidentally tonight, Clark.” Lois shook her head. “Something that would have killed Jimmy and would have gone on and on, killing until it was killed.”
Deep in her stomach she knew she was right. Not killing the thing would have been the greater crime, because it would have meant being responsible for the deaths of everyone the thing killed after it was released.

This hangup with 'avoid death at all costs' isn't an ethical universal - it's quite a recent concept, with modern anglo-saxon civilization - and it will go away in a few centuries. In other words, Clark is being an idiot.
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Lorne" from lucyferr
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If Lois was the thing demon children feared, Clark was the thing that terrified their parents.

good one - though I think there's more you could have done with that line

It sounded to her that even the most benign demon lived a life of oppression, always waiting for discovery, always afraid that the things that wandered the night would show up at their door.
They had no sense of safety, no security. Human law would not help them. It couldn’t protect them against things it didn’t know existed. Or at least, things it wouldn’t admit existed.

Well spotted - it's like that with illegal immigrants in RL too

He handed Lois a business card. It had a distinctive logo at the top, with Wolfram and Hart, entertainment division.
“Your name is Krevlorne?”
“You expected it to be Larry?” Lorne shrugged. “I’m a demon.”

Lois Surreal Lane just rolls off the tongue...

Although she’d dreamed of meeting a good man, a hero, Lois had given up on the dream a long time ago. The world was a thousand shades of gray and nobody was perfect. Men were flawed. Inevitably they had disappointed her....Clark could have rushed off on his own, left her stranded as he had on the first night of their investigation. Instead, he’d chosen to expose himself even further, to share this…gift.

okay, now you're getting me all greeneyed of LL
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Karaoke" from lucyferr
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By six o’clock, Lois had counted thirteen different species of demon, and more were filling in rapidly. Word had apparently gotten out about the talent scout, and apparently, there were some universal constants in Los Angeles.
One was that everyone wanted to be in the movies.

lol

It was a pleasant surprise when a female demon with strange spikes coming out of her face actually had a voice that was a pleasant contralto.

That's quite a good scene there - the backstory on the female demon would make a good oneshot
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Clem" from lucyferr
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Good talk from Clem
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [23 Jul 10] • Not Rated
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