Poor, poor Doyle. Dying to save the world (or at least a whole bunch of innocent half-demons) just doesn't bring the reward and respect it ought to, does it?
Comments from author:
It really doesn't. The PTB don't seem to like him that much, do they? Or is that the ascended now? XD
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Argh! Great start, but wishing the installments were longer.
Comments from author:
Actually, this originally started as a oneshot but evolved into separate chapters simply because there were clear boundary lines between sections one, two, and three. If I decide to continue it further, the chapters might gain length.
Glad you enjoyed it. ^_^
Review By [Califmole] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Well, because a human genetically person struggling and in pain in the sick bay is so dangerous? Hope he gets an appology. Of course now they have no reason to think he speaks English -- also he appeared without the stargate so no belief that there will be any kind of automatic translation either.
Comments from author:
It was more the transformation that surprised them as well as his unpredictable behavior. The military, no matter what shape or form, hates surprises. They generally adhere to the 'shoot first, ask questions later' motto. Doyle's just lucky they were using zats instead of real guns. >_<
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [25 Jun 07] • Not Rated
What fun! I hope you're going to continue this, because I like the idea and the way you've started it out (plus, good work on the Jack O'Neill voice, just from the bits and pieces Doyle overhears in this chapter).
Comments from author:
thanks! What did you think of Doyle's accent? I wasn't sure how to make him sound...well, like himself.
And there will be a bit of a continuation but I don't think it'll be too long (3 parts at the least). :)
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [22 Jun 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Ha, ha, ha! I cracked up over the sneezing part, though I swear I saw it coming. You're such a tease! You only gave a taste of the story and ended it! *squirm* C'mon, please write more, soon? It sounds SO interesting.
Nozomi
Comments from author:
Thanks! Actually, I've already written a bit more...enough for three parts (inc. chapter 1). Not sure beyond that though, or if all three will actually make it up.
But I'm glad you like it!
Review By [Nozomi] • Date [22 Jun 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Love Doyle stories, hope you continue. Only criticism is that I found the reading a bit chopy, that is when there were four people in the room it was kind of hard to tell who was talking.
Comments from author:
Thanks! And choppy where? Do you mean at the end or when Carter's coming into the room?
Review By [angrymonkey] • Date [21 Jun 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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