Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from bjchit
"...To say nothing of Hulk Hogan signing up with the NWO."
Review By [bjchit
] • Date [4 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 17 - Part 2" from breve
i really enjoyed the first story in this series.
you started to lose me with all the politics...but i'm persevering cos i want to know how it ends
Review By [breve
] • Date [17 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from tracysgate
oh dear lord.. this has been epic and painful and exhilarating, so many other things i cant find words for. .... and your not even done yet! but i have to be.... 2 nights of basically no sleep does not a functional girly make!
i cant even begin to tell you my feelings about this. i loved the depth of the WHOLE thing. and even though i cant say i agree with everything... ... man you must have a scary political/strategic brain.
i dont know if its cause of the the hints in the supernatural series... but im wondering if the priest, was actually God and trying to guide our girls the best way he could. i do wish we had a chance for more of a look at Xander and dawns last night... their goodbye...
i wondering if daniel is supposed to be a new love interest cause he hung around a bit at the end.....
and who exactly is The Boyfriend??? something seems off about him... not necessarily *bad* just off.... but then after reading your story im feeling a tad paranoid :P
i cant imagine where you got the background for some of the theory in this? at times i thought you had to be a polical science major or something. .... other times it felt like a definite exploration of the whole look at religion....
i dont know what else to say.... my brain is feeling kinda *fire bad - tree pretty* itself. lets just say the overwhelming opinion of the moment is..... W.O.W!
i will get around to reading the last installment but.... sleep is becoming essential. we cant all be slayers.....
oh that bit did confuse me a bit... how they removed the slayer *ascension spell* or what ever you called it... and they had basically burned out the slayers for the next 300 years.... so how did alternate faith become a slayer? is it due to the alternate reality? didnt Elizabeth/buffy loose her powers too when willow rescinded the spell?....
anyway... sleep now... clarification later :)
Review By [tracysgate
] • Date [16 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from EmberQuill
I really, REALLY love this story. It's one of those rare sequels that manages to top an already-brilliant prequel. The plot itself and the characters were all great, but the many philosophical issues you brought up during the course of the story are what truly makes it shine. Somehow you managed to give adequate consideration to issues such as the true nature of good and evil, religion, politics, the various effects of the Stargate going public, and many more that would take too long to list.
My only criticism (and it's a small enough criticism that it doesn't detract from the rating I've given) is that just about everybody in the story seems to have a better-than-expected grasp of philosophical, political, economic, social, and psychological issues that makes their discussions on such issues a bit hard to follow at times.
On the other hand, your description of the contest of wills between the First and the Key was amazing. Faith's revelation that everything had been leading up to that moment was incredible as well. The way Buffy's plan relied entirely on Dawn's watch, and the First's plan relied entirely on Buffy's plan, was kind of funny too.
Review By [EmberQuill
] • Date [2 Jul 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from maxthehobbit
sorry, forgot to put in a rating
Review By [maxthehobbit
] • Date [19 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from maxthehobbit
For a very serious story I loved the humorous parts ... like the tree test and lol the one eyed Gott. Not to mention that Kennedy was incredibly pretty ... personally I thought she was a skank.
Although I enjoyed this story to a great degree I feel it would be better if you had someone beta it and put down the thesaurus and use words more suitable for fan fiction.
I really enjoyed the action parts including the planning beforehand.
I thought the President talking with Buffy was a little long and redundant in parts ... I felt a little shorter would have been better, but was good the way it explained his side of things to show that everything wasn't either black or white, but an extreme amount of gray.
I guess my imagination isn't quite as good as yours with the thing between the Key and the First, several times I got completely lost and had to go back and reread several pages, but in the end I think I finally got it.
In the epilogue I loved the way the priest/minister/whatever explained things about Buffy to Dawn. It even made sense to me and left multiple openings for sequels.
To sum up my criticisms are small and my liking your stories are great. Keep up the good work, whatever you write I'll read as soon as each story is completed ... I stopped reading uncompleted stories because so many authors stop writing in the middle of a story which irks me to no end.
You have earned a WELL DONE in my book.
Review By [maxthehobbit
] • Date [19 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from vladt
remarkable tale. thank you for the wonderful read.
Review By [vladt
] • Date [1 Apr 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Obsidian
Wow very nice story. Loved it. Thanks.
Review By [Obsidian
] • Date [25 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Aomizuoko
I spent the better part of the last few weeks reading the first two installment of this series. So, this review will address the stories as a series instead of individually.
I thoroughly enjoyed your characterization of Buffy but I am thrilled mostly by your ability to show the changes in her without making them obvious or irrelevant.
Of the SGC your characterization of Daniel was the one that stuck with me the most. I love how you employed him as a the morality in the face of the government. I do wish you would have showed more interaction and focus on the SGC team, but the story was written well enough that though I want more, I still feel satisfied. I adore how you used reality doubles and the logic behind your reasoning. You were able to give vital information dumps without it feeling dull. I did struggle through some of it but thats more due to the fact that I'm not much of a science person.
I also thought it was genius the way you employed the Key and Dawn. Your explanation works well with the science of the SGC and the reality of the Buffy verse. I do feel for Angel - whose predicament I noticed you did not resolve. Yes, Buffy is in what is essentially purgatory, but Angel is in a straight-up hell dimension. Somehow, I feel like Angel should have a happy ending.
Over all, your end product took some effort to get through but it was well worth it. I really enjoyed the ride - it was a true epic and it's easy to see how much work you put into the story's plot, characterization, and the idea in general. I've got this fic and Far Beyond Normal stashed away in my pile of virtual gems. ;)
Review By [Aomizuoko
] • Date [18 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from leelaa
Dr. Boyle (psychologist head of SGC's Psychology Group): “I find myself more than slightly reluctant to condemn anyone to death just because they might at some point in the future do something wrong should they become Evil. Were that our standard, I fear that everyone in this room would have to be killed. Everyone outside it as well.”
Pretty much everyone winced as his acerbic observation.
Review By [leelaa
] • Date [14 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10" from leelaa
Several Jaffa field battalions could shower, shave, and perform their morning constitutional in the time it took Miss Summers to shower… and the entire batallion would use less water.
Review By [leelaa
] • Date [14 Nov 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from CindyB
Far Beyond Normal was one of the best fic's I have ever read. Everything about it was just amazing. I was thrilled that it was going to have a sequel. However, Return To Normal was not good. I did not like it at all. I am really disappointed in this fic. I think I will pretend that FBN was a stand alone fic.
Review By [CindyB
] • Date [3 Oct 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Guile
Quite magnificent. Fun and entertaining and even rather moving, all told. Bit of a Xanatos Pileup at the end, but you wrote an epic, sweeping fight between good and evil, twisted canon in interesting ways but made it stick, weren't afraid to go for the ugly gut-punch when it was required on the part of the First, and - probably my favorite part - you were willing to create an interesting and engaging original character and then kill him off. I like that. Fenton was awesome.
Review By [Guile
] • Date [17 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from lucyferr
Everyone knew that no matter what the media had been saying about Buffy Summers, the Jaffa thought she could walk on water. These men were armed to the teeth, almost livid with rage, obviously looking for a fight, and had diplomatic immunity. They were there to honor someone who had derailed the ambitions of a god. Such an achievement resonated with the Jaffa. No one would be permitted to disturb the sanctity of her funeral.
Least of all those jackals who had hounded her to her death.
There was pretty much blanket media coverage of her rampage as she punished those responsible for Buffy’s death.
Even though she was now the only living Watcher and would have to go through the hassle of locating the next one following Faith’s inevitable demise, Dawn couldn’t find it in herself to regret Faith’s actions. State Security had asked her to make a public broadcast demanding that Faith had turned herself in. Not only had she point-blank refused, she’d engaged a small army of lawyers to ensure they stayed away from her and their bullshit charges of aiding and abetting.
Thank goodness Dawn has a brain
Any political damage resulting from Faith’s rampage was their problem. They had refused to deal with the Trust out of fear of discovering just how high up the penetration of their government went, how deep the rot extended. Now they would have no choice but to deal with the results of Faith discovering that information for them, and letting the world witness her deadly revenge.
Unfortunately for their plans, when an Asgard transport beam removed her from custody every time they tried to confine her, people started getting the message.
seeing her sister humiliated in the media infuriated Dawn. As it had their mom.
funny, Joyce hadnt helped before with her silence
Dawn was uncomfortably aware that had Faith not reacted to the murder the way she had, there might not have been any point in continuing. Governments wanted to control the slayer, and had been molding public opinion in order to ensure they got their way. Either Buffy hadn’t seen the danger, or hadn’t seen any way to stop them. If nothing else, Faith’s extraordinarily lethal rampage was showing the entire world what a slayer could do when pushed too far. It was very unlikely that any future group would conclude that murdering a slayer was a better option than any alternative they might have otherwise chosen.
good work Faith!
Four billionaires, three Senators, two generals, and a whole lot of collateral damage later, the survivors were collectively shitting bricks in their armored fortresses over what they had unleashed.
Sorry - was that all? Well, hopefully Kinsey was among them.
...the sheer brutality of their invariably painful deaths had ensured there was no way it could be covered up.
Timex would have been so proud.
the pleasure of watching her father squirm as he was forced to witness his ex-wife turning to a better looking, more successful, and far more respected replacement.
Unfortunately for him, all of Buffy’s friends thought he’d given her the shaft and were in no mood to bail him out.
I'm sure he's not surprised
ps - good time to release the tape of the SS torturing Buffy
the memorial was something far more elaborate than anything Dawn could have afforded.
I thought Dawn had been playing the stock market?
At first she didn’t see anything, and it was just as apparent that Daniel didn’t either, until suddenly, out of the corner of her eye, she was just barely able to make out a vague shape. Buffy. Older. Bleeding. Hands clenched, focused expression intense with barely-leashed rage. Fading in and out of sight, ghostly, never attaining anything close to corporeality.
how come preacherman can see the First?
“But she’ll also be waiting for your call.”
The elderly man, if he was in fact a man, responded quickly.
This is the chaplain they brought from Okinawa, right?
if Humanity chooses the harder, more rewarding path, the Asgard and all traces of Ancient technology will slowly disappear.
looks like the Stargate system will be around forever then
Unfortunately you can see a similar manifestation of the same sort of situation in Africa, where tribal cultures are maintained in defiance of all logical reason.
Hm - a lot of that is because the Europeans split Africa up arbitrarily without any consideration for tribal boundaries. European tribes weren't broken like that (mostly) and thus were able to respond more logically.
Far too many humans are willing to act against their own long-term interest, so long as it benefits them personally to do so, even though they are condemning their children to destitution and irrelevance. Or, even worse, doing it because it costs them less than it will cost another tribal grouping they despise for whatever reason.
That part's true enough
The lessons of Rwanda and Zimbabwe should have been learned centuries ago during the similar experiences of medieval cultures which also permitted extremists to dictate the policies that drove them to ruin.
You do realize that Zimbabwe's problems have very little to do with tribalism? You'd have been better off using Rwanda & Sudan. And there's always the Congo - that conflict is more about who controls the minerals than anything else. Perhaps the Congo would be the best example?
It might interest you to know that all of this, everything that has happened between you and the First and this epic battle being finally fought to a conclusion was because your sister demonstrated a character so noble it surprised even the Elder Gods. None of this would have happened had she simply done the obvious, and killed you rather than risk the world just to try to save you. It was noble, and foolish, and brave, and insane, and in the end, it was successful! One cannot judge her for the lunacy of her decision without also noting that it worked!
that's something to ponder
"In the end, when it comes down to a final decision on how successful humanity had been, that decision will be yours. Over the eons to come, the Key will use millions of avatars to keep it abreast of events transpiring among the non-Ascended races. When they die all of those millions of avatars will be combined into the gestalt of its emerging personality. But right now it is a child, with only one imprinted pattern, and that pattern will determine the template for its future growth. A few thousand years from now you won’t recognize it –no human mind could possibly understand what it will become by then—but the Key will still likely refer to itself as ‘Dawn Summers.’ You, as the Key, are immortal. Long after humanity had grown beyond its physical limitations, or been exterminated by a more adaptable species, you will remember humanity. Long after the last human breathes his last breath, or the final descendant of what had once been human forgets her true origins, you will remember. You are humanity’s legacy. You will be the Last Human.
That's an incredible speech - I'm actually getting some goosebumps.
So Daniel staying by her side - wzup with that hm? :-)
Amazing story. Well done. I feel privileged to have read it. Thank you.
Review By [lucyferr
] • Date [14 Jul 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 25 - Part 2" from lucyferr
“He didn’t have any power! We were supposed to take care of him!”
So many times, that was what they had tried to do. Xander couldn’t fight demons, or do magic, and he wasn’t a genius. He could provide encouragement and get the donuts, but when the fur started to fly, he had to be sent to the nursery with the other children.
interesting similarities between Xander and Carter
The entire history of the universe was its own time loop.
“So who was the real spy?”
“Forrest, of course. Big shock, I know.”
It seemed like such a dumb thing to say that Buffy looked confused for a moment, as the soldiers opened a break in the obstacles fronting their position to let the two women enter. Finally she understood. This was a military unit, and for such people Image Was Everything. No matter how much pain she was in, macho posturing was called for. The men expected it, and although she might not lose their respect if she told the truth about how sore and exhausted and burnt out she was, such truth would not go with the sort of image O’Neill had been trying to build for her.
ah. man culture.
“Absolutely! I mean, Jack gets hard every time he see’s Riley’s tight little ass, but you don’t see him getting all mopey about it!”
Nodding her head in stern, contemplative agreement, Faith ignored the barely-suppressed laughter coming from all around them and studied an indignant-looking O’Neill before responding. “This is true, Oh Wise One; but Jack has also had much, much, much, much more time to learn how to deal with his repressed homosexual tendencies. Four or five more decades and Forrest probably could have handled it too.”
“In fact you may actually have surpassed Master Bra’tac, which is something I never thought to witness. Unlike you, BuffySummers, he felt compelled to first cook the flesh of his enemies before consuming it.”
good for t
“Once the timeloop was broken I no longer remembered it, but Angel did. When I was on the Asgard homeworld they recognized that I had a day’s worth of ‘virtual’ memories locked away, and they recovered them for me. Since those memories only existed in an alternate timeline it took even the Asgard awhile to figure out how to access them, which is why it took me so long to get back to Earth. They were… pretty impressed with our plans, or at least the scale of our ambitions, and helped me work out the details of what we had to do to beat the First.”
ohhhhhh. wondered bigtime about that.
“So if you didn’t have a vision of it, how did you know, to the exact second, when Angel was going to reach out and grab the First?!”
Buffy looked a bit chagrined as she explained. “It was a timeloop! When Angel was returned to the original timeline, he told me that he pulled two people into the portal at this end.” She shrugged. “One of them just happened to be wearing a watch…”
ouch my brain hurts - if they are in a time loop why are they worried? Everything exists, therefore must have existed, therefore Dawn must have fixed it.
If there were two words that soldiers did not want to hear more than ‘Oh, shit…’ O’Neill couldn’t think of them.
i cant either
It wasn’t anyone’s fault. They were slaughtering demons by the dozens, blowing them apart, frying them where they stood, zat-blasts vaporizing some more. But there were always more, and their overhead protection wasn’t good enough to save a man when a hundred-pound chunk of concrete landed on top of him.
Time to send a 'Wish you were here' postcard to Kinsey. Preferably with a vengeance demon in hearing range
as a club smashed into her torso with enough force to launch her body into the air and toss it thirty feet or more, where she crashed into the ground like a broken doll.
One Faith down... lucky Faith. Hope she gets no afterlife (i.e. peace) or a good one (hopefully with peace).
Without any need for discussion both she and Spike had pulled it back… although both had secretly wished they hadn’t had to....Instead, to their surprise they got something better. They got trust. After years of being the outsiders, the ‘extra help’ called upon when needed but otherwise ignored, they were suddenly the ultimate insiders.
How much she liked the younger, more innocent Faith. How freaked out she was to actually be considering exploring the relationship further, should the opportunity present itself. For the very first time in their entire relationship, Buffy had actually asked Faith for advice... It had been one of the best nights of her entire life, and if Faith was not destined to survive the day, she was profoundly grateful that her final night had been the one night she had spent with the only person she had ever loved, just talking, occasionally laughing, making fun of Spike and just generally behaving like friends. It wasn’t a bad way to check out, and a far better exit than Faith had ever expected.
You’re used to the fight ending when you as the hero defeat the evil villain in single combat, and he disappears in a puff of smoke so there’s no unsightly corpse to mar the vista of the rising sun telling everyone else that all that nasty fighting can end because all is right in the world once more.
“This is what it’s like for the rest of us, Buffy! It’s bloody and it’s brutal and it’s ugly and it doesn’t stop on cue.
Great speech Jack! But.... he sure says way too many words for someone with a bunch of demons closing in on him. Bit unrealistic there. This is just a fic I suppose.
Also, I'm a bit surprised you have Buffy stop fighting. I don't think she would, or that she needs to have someone tell her '“Now, take your place on the damned line. Welcome to the real world.” That seemed gratuitous.
All this quantum stuff with Dawn is seriously boring.
long enough to blind many of the demons who had instinctively turned to look.
the soldiers and slayers didnt instinctively turn to look?
She was white as a sheet, obviously having been bled dry. Angel, he assumed. A vampire had to feed, after all. Especially one trapped alone in an alternate universe for the next hundred years.
“A lesson in power I shall not soon forget. More ever, a lesson on strategy, on arrogance, on duty… on friendship. An interesting experience. One almost worth the price paid to learn it. But the lesson is over. I find myself recalling the foolishness that was Glorificus. Despite her many faults, it was… unseemly, for a god to be betrayed by her own triumvirate. I have decided that it is incumbent upon me to teach the remaining members of this triumvirate the folly of such betrayals.
great goodbye speech by Illyria. Also nice to have Fred back - for Willow.
Wonder what'll happen to the Slayers now that they've been depowered? Many of them must have made personal enemies in their arrogance... wonder how many of them will commit suicide or die in dark alleys...
Review By [lucyferr
] • Date [14 Jul 10] • Not Rated