I don't know if I like Xander being butt-monkeyed by this Narcisisus guy and I was expecting Xander to make some crack about his name like 'Is that your stripper name?' etc etc, but it's still pretty interesting. You've got quite a few good lines here that gives the whole thing a good vibe of being well written. I hope Xander keeps his sarcasm about the Anita-blake verse. I think canon Xander would be really annoyed by a place where vampires were undead citizens. heh.
I don't think he should be giving up quite that quickly either... Willow wouldn't let a little thing like the inner workings of timetravel stop her from rescuing her Xander shaped friend... he might have to wait awhile though.
Review By [ashez] • Date [10 Jul 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Very interesting and hard-boiled. I like how you dramatized that Xander realizes that he's stuck (because any portal unstable enough to deage him would be untraceable in the reverse). Looking forward to more.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [9 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Sweet. Love Xander-hyena-ness... and it's cool to read a different take on Narcissus. Most take the route of 'he's a bastard' which I agree with, but this characterization of him makes just as much sense.
Danke, and looking forward to more.
Review By [amusewithaview] • Date [9 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Seems fairly similar to another fic that came out recently by zili but I like the way this is coming out. Please update soon, I'm looking forward to more!
Comments from author:
I've read zili's story, but have to say this is headed in a very different direction than that story is. We've got very different takes on Narcissus for one.
Review By [forbin] • Date [9 Jul 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Junior high age, or right when all the hormones start to hit like a sledgehammer. Because I was feeling evil enough to play with the younger scoobies theme in that way.
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [9 Jul 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Eek. Okay, so I so didn't see that twist at the end coming but all that it did was make an already fabulous story even *better*. I'm curious to see how you're going to depict Narcissus in this story, and all the weird looks that he was getting make so much more sense now and... aw, heck. It's just *all* great. ^_^
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed. I think Narcissus tends to get portrayed a bit unfairly on TTH at times. Yes, he's weird to the proint of being creepy, and when we first meet him, his goals are different than Anita and friends. But he seems to be respected and liked by his hyenas, and he's trusted by everyone in the coalition enough that his people are guarding the daytime resting place of the Master of the City.
It was one of those cases where I end up writing the story I wanted to read.
Review By [AshJ] • Date [9 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
