Good story! I could definitely see Giles reacting that way if Anita and Edward tried to kill Buffy and them. You had a good Giles voice. Giles showing them mercy and letting them live because the others requested it was good, too. I also thought it was great that they had killed the contractor, too.
Review By [KnightOwl] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
As a scene, this worked very well. I'd actually like a little flashback exposition on how the existance of demonic possession vampires might be a closely guarded secret to the supernatural community and the world of AB, and that perhaps the AB characters were hired for a specific reason (either to go after Dawn for someone or something earlier in their continuity).
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
The problem with this isn't so much that it doesn't work, but that the reader is left with a feeling there is vastly more to know about this scenario, both by what has already happened and what could happen in the future.
Review By [Crydwyn] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
You need to flesh out the story, in particular the back story. Anita has a clear sense of right and wrong in her own head, and I have difficulty fitting killing children into that. She's never one to follow orders blindly, and she doesn't see monsters or non-humans as being evil, so it is a bit of a stretch for her to try and kill kids, even 'special' kids...
I can see you've done a fair Ripper but you cut yourself short. Wonder if you would not have been happier if the story was longer? Just a thought but if the story is thought of as a beginning then you do have a decent start.....
Review By [morgyair] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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