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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Wolfrngr
Review:
Neat story, but Anita's been willing to push final confrontation with Edward for less, and killing kids is not something she would do. Of course if Edward didn't know there would be a lot of superpowered girls running around and wasn't sent to kill a slayer...then that could be interesting.
Review By [Wolfrngr] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from amusewithaview
Review:
Not dissapointed, I like it.

Danke
Review By [amusewithaview] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from KnightOwl
Review:
Good story! I could definitely see Giles reacting that way if Anita and Edward tried to kill Buffy and them. You had a good Giles voice. Giles showing them mercy and letting them live because the others requested it was good, too. I also thought it was great that they had killed the contractor, too.
Review By [KnightOwl] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Twoboots
Review:
I need more! Flesh this out!
Review By [Twoboots] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Lulubell
Review:
wow... I loved this.. Hope to see what you have in the future
Review By [Lulubell] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
As a scene, this worked very well. I'd actually like a little flashback exposition on how the existance of demonic possession vampires might be a closely guarded secret to the supernatural community and the world of AB, and that perhaps the AB characters were hired for a specific reason (either to go after Dawn for someone or something earlier in their continuity).
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)SusanAnthony
Review:
WHOOO! Go Ripper!
Review By [(Current Donor)SusanAnthony] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
very scary
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Crydwyn
Review:
The problem with this isn't so much that it doesn't work, but that the reader is left with a feeling there is vastly more to know about this scenario, both by what has already happened and what could happen in the future.
Review By [Crydwyn] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ranlynn
Review:
tsk, tsk, tsk...folks always seem to forget about 'Ripper' don't they?
Review By [ranlynn] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Drix
Review:
Ooh, I like this, make it longer, you know, the before and after. I think it has the potential to be a great story.
Review By [Drix] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from darren
Review:
You need to flesh out the story, in particular the back story. Anita has a clear sense of right and wrong in her own head, and I have difficulty fitting killing children into that. She's never one to follow orders blindly, and she doesn't see monsters or non-humans as being evil, so it is a bit of a stretch for her to try and kill kids, even 'special' kids...

Hence the much needed backstory.
Review By [darren] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from anomoly
Review:
Interesting. This has possibilities. Are you considering pursuing it?
Review By [anomoly] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)morgyair
Review:
I can see you've done a fair Ripper but you cut yourself short. Wonder if you would not have been happier if the story was longer? Just a thought but if the story is thought of as a beginning then you do have a decent start.....
Review By [(Past Donor)morgyair] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Rivana
Review:
Oooh, Ripper playing. Nice.
Review By [Rivana] • Date [12 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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